You Can’t Go Home Again

October 31, 2013 at 2:29 pm 18 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 1 november 2013


Photo Credit: Douglas M. MacIlroy
 
“I barely recognize you,” my stepmother said, as she awkwardly greeted me at the door.

I noticed that she had changed, too. She looked much older since I ran away from home many years ago. I saw her hair had turned gray and the lines on her face were becoming more pronounced.

Nothing was standing still. My elder sister was married and our house had been remodeled.

My old bedroom was gone and the koi pond that I built was covered with dirt.

“What happened to the fish?”

“Oh, I thought you’d never ask. We threw them into the river.”

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18 Comments Add your own

  • 1. glossarch  |  October 31, 2013 at 8:01 pm

    Can’t say I blame him for leaving! Just one piece of crit: do you mean “ask” on the last line?

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    • 2. plaridel  |  October 31, 2013 at 11:04 pm

      glossarch:

      ouch! what was i thinking? it should be “ask” not “asked” as you pointed out. just corrected the error. thank you.

      Reply
  • 3. Sandra  |  October 31, 2013 at 11:46 pm

    She sounds a bit of a cold fish. No wonder he left. Well done.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  November 1, 2013 at 5:27 pm

      sandra:

      he went home to validate what in his heart he already knew. sad.

      Reply
  • 5. Lindaura Glamoura  |  November 1, 2013 at 1:48 am

    Not a very nice homecoming. Interesting take on the prompt and I like Sandra’s comment above: She seems like a cold fish!

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    • 6. plaridel  |  November 1, 2013 at 5:28 pm

      lindaura:

      cold-blooded is another term to describe her.

      Reply
  • 7. Amy  |  November 2, 2013 at 7:58 am

    Very sad…

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    • 8. plaridel  |  November 2, 2013 at 9:48 am

      amy:

      glad it’s only fiction.

      Reply
  • 9. rochellewisoff  |  November 2, 2013 at 6:13 pm

    Dear Paridel,

    I’ve heard it said you can’t go home again. In his case this is true. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 10. plaridel  |  November 3, 2013 at 8:46 am

      rochelle:

      he wasn’t welcomed back with open arms for sure.

      Reply
  • 11. dmmacilroy  |  November 3, 2013 at 1:16 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    And now the fish cannot go home, either. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • 12. plaridel  |  November 3, 2013 at 11:37 am

      doug:

      they overstayed their welcome when he left.

      Reply
  • 13. seeker  |  November 3, 2013 at 11:09 pm

    I hope the fish survived in the river. Better that way than living with that woman.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  November 4, 2013 at 12:09 pm

      seeker:

      the koi’s ability to survive and adapt would serve them well even in the river.

      Reply
  • 15. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  November 4, 2013 at 9:21 am

    You can’t go home again and sometimes you don’t want too.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  November 4, 2013 at 12:12 pm

      dawn:

      you hit the nail right on the head. 🙂

      Reply
  • 17. CherryPickens  |  November 4, 2013 at 12:43 pm

    Wow. Better than flushing them down the toilet, but still … wow. Good story, and harsh mother.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  November 4, 2013 at 5:05 pm

      cherry:

      lucky for the koi, they were too big to flush down the toilet.

      Reply

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