Else’s Surprise

November 28, 2013 at 8:52 am 14 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-word Challenge 29 November 2013

Photo Credit: Ted Strutz
Jane had no plans for her birthday, but her friend Else insisted that they celebrate after work.

When Jane arrived at the ferry, she couldn’t find her friend.

“Where’s Else?” she wondered fully unaware of a pair of eyes watching her.

It was unusual for Else to be late. She was always on time.

As Jane was dialing Else’s number, a figure in a devil’s mask slowly sneaked up behind her and yelled, “Boo!”

For a moment, Jane was paralyzed with fear.

“Else, you scared the hell out of me,” she cried, regaining her composure. “Don’t ever do that again!”

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14 Comments Add your own

  • 1. kz  |  November 28, 2013 at 10:57 am

    well, else better make sure she has something wonderful planned, just to make up for that little prank πŸ™‚

    • 2. plaridel  |  November 28, 2013 at 12:52 pm


      i’m pretty sure she had. i believe in happy endings. πŸ™‚

  • 5. tedstrutz  |  November 28, 2013 at 7:47 pm

    It could have been her last birthday.

    • 6. plaridel  |  November 28, 2013 at 9:22 pm


      I guess the plot thickens. πŸ™‚

  • 7. Sandra  |  November 28, 2013 at 11:34 pm

    That’s what fiends are for. πŸ™‚ Nice one.

    • 8. plaridel  |  November 29, 2013 at 8:09 am


      in the spirit of the holidays, let’s hope they remain friends.

  • 9. dmmacilroy  |  November 29, 2013 at 3:31 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    She’s not to do it again, or else.

    Sandra’s comment is great.



    • 10. plaridel  |  November 29, 2013 at 8:10 am


      i think she got the message loud and clear.

  • 11. rochellewisoff  |  November 29, 2013 at 3:31 am

    dear paridel,

    i know that no caps is your style but in this case it made for confusion. it took me a few sentences to see else as a name or someone else. nothing like having a practical joker for a friend.



    • 12. plaridel  |  November 29, 2013 at 8:12 am


      it did come across my mind that the name could be mistaken for something else (no pun intended). maybe i should just retire it for good. πŸ™‚

  • 13. Eena  |  December 1, 2013 at 6:55 am

    I’m not too sure the masked person IS Else. Wouldn’t it be fun if he/she wasn’t!

    • 14. plaridel  |  December 1, 2013 at 9:43 am


      good thought. that would be a big surprise she wouldn’t live to enjoy. πŸ™‚


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