Summer of ’89
August 27, 2014 at 5:18 pm 37 comments
For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge 29 August 2014
Photo Credit: Madison WoodsIt was the summer Adam’s voice changed. It led to self-discovery and feelings of intense attraction towards the college-bound girl next door. He’d watch her skinny dip in the pool at night while hiding behind the bushes.
One morning, his dad took his little sister out for a walk.
“Ew, what’s that?” Abby cried pointing to white gooey stuff on the bushes.
“That’s nothing, really, just some bird poop.”
But as they went back inside the house, his dad couldn’t help but mutter to himself, “Adam, Adam, if you’re going to be a man, you’ve got to be more discreet.”
Entry filed under: Blogroll, friday fictioneers. Tags: 100-word challenge, coming of age, fiction, humor.
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hugmamma | August 27, 2014 at 11:17 pm
Oh my! Talk about reality…TV show. ha, ha.
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plaridel | August 28, 2014 at 9:36 am
hugmamma:
now that i’ve thought about it, it may appear a little risque. 😦
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FabricatingFiction | August 28, 2014 at 12:02 am
Unexpectedly funny. Good job.
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plaridel | August 28, 2014 at 9:39 am
louise:
glad you found the humor in it. it wasn’t meant to offend.
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FabricatingFiction | August 28, 2014 at 9:59 am
Nothing offensive there 🙂
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plaridel | August 28, 2014 at 2:22 pm
louise:
thank you for being open-minded. 🙂
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draliman | August 28, 2014 at 4:52 am
Oh my 🙂
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plaridel | August 28, 2014 at 9:42 am
draliman:
i found the picture prompt this week very challenging. took me sometime to come up with something.
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Melanie | August 28, 2014 at 11:38 am
oh too funny! Dad’s right – Adam needs to learn some discretion, or at least some self-control and get back inside first.
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plaridel | August 28, 2014 at 2:25 pm
melanie:
i think he and his dad would have a man-to-man talk pretty soon. 🙂
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) | August 28, 2014 at 1:42 pm
ha.. see men and their ways.
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plaridel | August 28, 2014 at 2:31 pm
björn:
it’s a right of passage for some but not for all. 🙂
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The Writer's Village | August 28, 2014 at 6:27 pm
a touchy subject (pun intended) handled (pun intended again) very delicately.
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plaridel | August 28, 2014 at 8:05 pm
the writer’s village:
thank you for a great comment. it’s much appreciated.
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sustainabilitea | August 29, 2014 at 3:08 pm
Ewwwwww!
janet
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sustainabilitea | August 29, 2014 at 3:09 pm
I agree with Randy, though. (Writer’s Village) Although “randy” might not be the best choice of words here. 🙂
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plaridel | August 29, 2014 at 5:11 pm
janet:
darn, i learned a new word today. i had to run to the dictionary to find its meaning. 🙂
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Madhura | August 29, 2014 at 8:19 pm
Haha this was surprisingly funny! Creative take on the photo I must say.. Enjoyed it 🙂
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plaridel | August 30, 2014 at 9:09 am
madhura:
compliment humbly accepted. thank you. 🙂
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Nan Falkner | August 30, 2014 at 12:47 am
Adam, You should know better! Good story – funny! Just plain funny! Nan 🙂
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plaridel | August 30, 2014 at 9:10 am
nan:
i’m glad you found it funny. thank you for reading. 🙂
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patriciaruthsusausan | August 30, 2014 at 4:54 am
Plaridel, Kind of R-rated, but it’s true to life. The dad handled it well. 🙂 —Susan
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plaridel | August 30, 2014 at 9:10 am
susan:
i was concerned i had crossed the line on this one. thank you for your understanding. 🙂
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rochellewisoff | August 30, 2014 at 10:45 am
Dear Plaridel,
This one made me wince and shudder. On the other hand, this is a very well written story of a rite of passage. Love the dad in this. He’s been there and done that.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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plaridel | August 30, 2014 at 11:31 am
rochelle:
i fully understand the sentiment.
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rochellewisoff | August 31, 2014 at 4:08 am
Dear Plaridel,
I’ve thought about this with your last few stories and decided that now is the time to tell you that I’ve noticed great progress in your flash fictions. This story is one of my favorites this week. A lot of story skillfully packed and layered between the lines. All of this to say, Terrific Job! Bravo!
Shalom,
Rochelle.
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plaridel | August 31, 2014 at 11:58 am
rochelle:
you’re very kind. i deeply appreciate the compliment especially coming from you.
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Amy Reese | August 30, 2014 at 12:13 pm
Ha ha! He’s just a rookie after all. Maybe Dad will set him straight.
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plaridel | August 30, 2014 at 2:38 pm
amy:
i guess that’s what dads are for. 🙂
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Sarah Ann | August 30, 2014 at 1:02 pm
I like the way you cleverly gave us a vague age with that opening sentence. This is an understanding dad I feel. Not sure what to think that the prompt took you in this direction 🙂 Well told though.
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plaridel | August 30, 2014 at 2:38 pm
sarah ann:
i tried to tell a story with the least details upfront and let the reader’s imagination takes care of the rest. 🙂
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aliciajamtaas | August 30, 2014 at 4:02 pm
Oh!!!! So funny! There’s nothing like coming of age… Great take on the prompt.
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plaridel | August 31, 2014 at 11:56 am
alicia:
so glad you found it funny. you made my day. 🙂
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wmqcolby | September 1, 2014 at 8:31 am
Rochelle recommended I read this, Plaridel.
I’m laughing STILL! So funny and, yes, the subject matter IS a bit risqué, but done with class. In all humor, whether it’s clean or dirty, we laugh because of the element of failure placed in it. I laughed BIG TIME. Great job! (I loved Janet’s “eewwwww”).
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plaridel | September 1, 2014 at 11:20 pm
wmqcolby:
i’m glad this little story didn’t disappoint. thank you for reading. 🙂
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AC | September 15, 2014 at 8:31 am
BWAHAHAHAHAAHAHHAAHAHHAHA. Thank you for making me laugh. I needed this. 😀
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plaridel | September 16, 2014 at 9:16 am
ac:
i’m glad it made you laugh. 🙂