Atonement

September 24, 2014 at 4:25 pm 42 comments

for friday fictioneers 100-word challenge 26 September 2014

Marie Gail StratfordPhoto Credit: Marie Gail Stratford

I never thought I’d be embarrassed of my mother, but that was until I learned about her job.

As a single mother, I gave her credit for spoiling me. She bought me designer clothes and shoes. Now I felt like a fraud for wearing them.

She cried when I confronted her about working in a strip bar. Growing up, I made her cry even more for what I perceived as her shortcomings.

Looking back, I couldn’t imagine how she could deserve such an ungrateful son. I hope it’s not too late to make amends and tell her I love her.

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  • 1. JackieP  |  September 24, 2014 at 4:53 pm

    Parents do what they must to provide for their kids. Good story, with a moral.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  September 24, 2014 at 6:34 pm

      jackiep:

      strippers are people, too.

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      • 3. JackieP  |  September 24, 2014 at 6:43 pm

        They are and I’ve met some. Some are good some are bad. Just like any other part of society.

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        • 4. plaridel  |  September 24, 2014 at 9:48 pm

          jackiep:

          totally agree.

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  • 5. Leigh W. Smith  |  September 24, 2014 at 6:13 pm

    Great story and, as Jackie says, it has an important message of sacrifice, a stirring moment of epiphany, and a hoped-for atonement. I hope the protagonist comes to peaceful terms with himself and is able to say those all-important words. Beautiful words and thoughts as always, Plaridel (and an unexpected direction from the photo prompt)!

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    • 6. plaridel  |  September 24, 2014 at 6:34 pm

      leigh:

      i don’t know why but the picture prompt reminded me of the ceilings in a strip bar. oh, i just went there out of curiosity.

      Reply
  • 7. Elizabeth  |  September 24, 2014 at 7:01 pm

    This son shouldn’t be so selfish, and respect his mother for being his mother not for her job.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  September 24, 2014 at 9:50 pm

      elizabeth:

      thank goodness, he finally saw the light.

      Reply
  • 9. Sandra  |  September 25, 2014 at 12:10 am

    Hope it’s not too late for him too.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 3:25 pm

      sandra:

      that’ll be the happy ending or shall we say the start of a new beginning for both of them.

      Reply
  • 11. draliman  |  September 25, 2014 at 1:39 am

    I’m glad the son has realised that she was just doing whatever was needed to provide for him. I hope it’s not too late too!

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    • 12. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 3:28 pm

      draliman:

      it’ll never be too late to make amends especially to one’s mother.

      Reply
  • 13. dmmacilroy  |  September 25, 2014 at 2:30 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    He finds out the truth to the old adage, We grow too soon old and too late smart. Leet’s hope another one holds true for him….Better Late than Never. Well done,

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • 14. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 3:31 pm

      doug:

      thank you. my sentiments exactly.

      Reply
  • 15. sustainabilitea  |  September 25, 2014 at 10:20 am

    Unique take on the prompt, Plaridel. So much to consider in your story and I hope he’s in time.

    janet

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    • 16. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 3:33 pm

      janet,

      thank you. as doug said, better late than never.

      Reply
  • 17. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  September 25, 2014 at 10:22 am

    I know what it means to be ashamed of your parents… my father was a professor, and when I grew up in the 70s in Sweden – the disgust of everything academic was very clear.. later there came a time when things changed.. but there were those years.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 3:42 pm

      björn:

      yes, there were those years when we thought our parents weren’t that cool and whatever they said didn’t make sense. if they brought us right, there’d be also those years when we finally realized how wrong we were in our estimation of them.

      Reply
  • 19. lifeconfusions  |  September 25, 2014 at 11:01 am

    It is never too late to tell someone that you love them 🙂
    Very nice story 🙂

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    • 20. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 3:43 pm

      lifeconfusions:

      i totally agree. 🙂

      Reply
  • 21. Swoosieque  |  September 25, 2014 at 3:52 pm

    If she reads your blog, she knows now! 🙂

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    • 22. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 10:09 pm

      swoosieque:

      are you suggesting you have inside information? 🙂

      Reply
  • 23. The Writer's Village  |  September 25, 2014 at 5:04 pm

    Never to late to make amends, build bridges, express appreciation, and renew love. Randy Good moral story

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    • 24. plaridel  |  September 25, 2014 at 10:10 pm

      randy:

      true, indeed. thank you.

      Reply
  • 25. rochellewisoff  |  September 26, 2014 at 2:41 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    They say hindsight is 20/20 and this case it’s true. Mom did what she felt she had to do to give him a good life. This one of my favorites so far. Well done, sir.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 26. plaridel  |  September 26, 2014 at 1:05 pm

      rochelle:

      what a compliment, graciously accepted.

      Reply
  • 27. patrickprinsloo  |  September 26, 2014 at 3:16 am

    Never too late, I hope. Great portrayal of youth’s failure to understand.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  September 26, 2014 at 1:05 pm

      patrick:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 29. K.Z.  |  September 26, 2014 at 7:26 am

    i hope that it’s not too late. great story of love and sacrifice.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  September 26, 2014 at 1:06 pm

      k.z.:

      a mother would always do whatever it takes to give her child a good life.

      Reply
  • 31. hafong  |  September 27, 2014 at 3:49 pm

    It’s never too late to say I’m sorry. A good story.

    Lily

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    • 32. plaridel  |  September 27, 2014 at 9:04 pm

      lily:

      that’s very true. thank you.

      Reply
  • 33. patriciaruthsusan  |  September 27, 2014 at 9:48 pm

    Plaridel, Good story. We shouldn’t judge others, especially our parents. We shouldn’t hurt them. At least it’s not too late for him to make amends to his mother. He should do so as soon as possible. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

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    • 34. plaridel  |  September 28, 2014 at 6:48 pm

      susan:

      you have the gift of wisdom. thank you.

      Reply
  • 35. Nan Falkner  |  September 28, 2014 at 12:24 am

    Dear Plaridel, I think this story is wonderful! I believe the son certainly knows he was wrong and his Mother did what she had to do so she could give him a better life. His Mother is a Saint and loves him more than she does herself. Excellent story with a good message!

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    • 36. plaridel  |  September 28, 2014 at 6:49 pm

      nan:

      thank you. let’s hope for a happy ending.

      Reply
  • 37. aliciajamtaas  |  September 28, 2014 at 3:04 pm

    Gosh! I hope he has time. Some parents give so much to their children, however they can, and NEED to be thanked.

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    • 38. plaridel  |  September 28, 2014 at 6:50 pm

      alicia:

      i agree wholeheartedly.

      Reply
  • 39. Love Happy Notes - Daily Fun and Inspiration  |  September 28, 2014 at 6:13 pm

    Dear Plaridel,The mother really loved her son. Great write. LHN

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    • 40. plaridel  |  September 28, 2014 at 6:53 pm

      lhn:

      yes, like all mothers do.

      Reply
  • 41. wmqcolby  |  September 29, 2014 at 6:11 am

    Human failings on both sides. Sad and well-spoken.

    Nice job, Plaridel! You really nailed it!

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    • 42. plaridel  |  September 29, 2014 at 9:17 am

      kent:

      thank you for your well-thought-out comment.

      Reply

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