The Ball

December 10, 2014 at 3:13 pm 19 comments

for friday fictioneers 100-word challenge 12 December 2014

Sandra Cook
Photo Credit: Sandra Cook

Six-year old Jeremy was holding on to his ball as he and his mom and her newly found boyfriend were crossing the narrow bridge away from the homeless encampment the authorities had ordered them to evacuate.

“Mom!” he cried after he accidentally dropped it falling down the dead creek below.

The ball was his favorite toy. It was the only thing that he had left of his dad who died of drug overdose a year ago.

He wanted to retrieve the ball but his mom wouldn’t let go of her grip.

“Come on, son,” she said. “We’ve got to go.”

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19 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Life in the 50's and beyond...  |  December 10, 2014 at 5:06 pm

    Mom is moving on, even if her son isn’t. A good story, true to life.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  December 11, 2014 at 2:17 pm

      Ruth:

      Indeed. She can’t wait to leave the past behind.

      Reply
  • 3. draliman  |  December 11, 2014 at 3:21 am

    Sad, he’s lost a memory, not just a ball.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  December 11, 2014 at 2:17 pm

      Draliman:

      I’m sure it’ll leave an emptiness in his heart that could never be filled.

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  • 5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  December 11, 2014 at 12:32 pm

    Maybe loosing a ball .. a memory that could also drag him down is a good thing.. still so sad… I just hope for them.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  December 11, 2014 at 2:17 pm

      Björn:

      Their current situation is so dire that that they need a new lease in life.

      Reply
  • 7. Karen Whitelaw  |  December 11, 2014 at 1:47 pm

    I love this story, Plaridel. It is all the more poignant because you let the situation do all the talking. We are that little boy leaving his ball (and his father) behind. Brilliant writing.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  December 11, 2014 at 2:18 pm

      Karen:

      Thank you for liking it. It means a lot. 🙂

      Reply
  • 9. Jan Brown  |  December 11, 2014 at 2:43 pm

    Heartbreakingly real. I wouldn’t let my son wander into that creek, either. But if the new boyfriend wants to stick around, he should have volunteered to step over the muck and the garbage, and get the boy’s ball. I fear this new guy is just another loser who takes care of himself first. Sometimes we make such poor choices, don’t we?

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    • 10. plaridel  |  December 12, 2014 at 7:11 pm

      jan:

      yes, i’m afraid he’s another loser.

      Reply
  • 11. talesfromthemotherland  |  December 13, 2014 at 9:42 am

    Such a sad story, that is happening all over this country.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  December 14, 2014 at 10:34 pm

      dawn:

      true, indeed.

      Reply
  • 13. aliciajamtaas  |  December 13, 2014 at 5:06 pm

    Your story leaves a little hole in my heart. Hopefully the boy can keep memories of his dad – although he doesn’t sound like he was much to begin with. Well done.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  December 14, 2014 at 10:34 pm

      alicia:

      i hope so, too.

      Reply
  • 15. Nan Falkner  |  December 15, 2014 at 12:17 am

    Dear Plaridel, Excellent writing and I love this story. It is sad, Jeremy will not soon get over losing the link he had from his dead father. Poor boy, Mom will watch out over him and is smart not to let him go get it – who knows what’s under all the trash. Great job! Nan 🙂

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    • 16. plaridel  |  December 15, 2014 at 9:21 am

      nan:

      thanks again for reading. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 17. joseph elon lillie  |  December 17, 2014 at 6:43 pm

    So sad.

    Reply

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