Coming Home

February 18, 2015 at 3:41 pm 45 comments

for friday fictioneers 100-word challenge 20 February 2015

Note:This story was inspired by the picture prompt and “Home” by David Byrne and Brian Eno. If you haven’t heard the song, you can click on the link below.

Marie Gail Stratford
Photo Credit: Marie Gail Stratford

After months in captivity, Farida makes a dash to the unlocked door and runs to freedom.

“I’m a human being,” she told the big fat man who bought her at auction after ISIS militants overran their village and abducted her.

“You’re property,” he sneered and turned her into a sex slave.

“Stop, or I’ll shoot!” he yells. Farida keeps on going.

“Bang! Bang!”

She staggers and stumbles bleeding to the ground.

Farida once tried to reconcile the woman she used to be with the person she has become. It doesn’t matter now. A beautiful light surrounding her, she’s heading home.

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  • 1. Nan Falkner  |  February 18, 2015 at 8:14 pm

    I think she is lucky he didn’t have her in a metal cage and squeezing lighter fluid around her. Good story about the most devilish non-human humans on Earth. Nan 🙂

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    • 2. plaridel  |  February 18, 2015 at 10:13 pm

      nan:

      it was admirable of her to choose freedom against all odds.

      Reply
  • 3. Sandra  |  February 19, 2015 at 1:44 am

    Painfully topical. This whole issue is devastatingly cruel, as are the perpetrators. Well done

    I think the second and third paragraphs would be better in the pluperfect tense, as they are actions that took place earlier than the moment in which you’re writing. Otherwise it sounds as though it’s conversation/action they had on her way to the door.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 9:36 am

      sandra:

      i rewrote the story based on your observation. can you take a second look and see if it has made any difference? thanks.

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      • 5. Sandra  |  February 19, 2015 at 10:15 am

        I can’t remember how it was before, but now I see there is a different tense to differentiate between the historical and the current actions. You could have just changed the 2nd and 3rd to “she’d told” and “he’d sneered” but it’s fine anyway. Nice one.

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        • 6. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 10:39 am

          sandra:

          thank you.

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  • 7. draliman  |  February 19, 2015 at 4:44 am

    I’m sure many currently in this position would rather take a chance with a bullet than remain.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 9:36 am

      draliman:

      under the circumstances, she had no other choice.

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  • 9. Suzanne Joshi  |  February 19, 2015 at 6:20 am

    So sad, and it seems realistic, fitting into today’s news. At least she’s going to a better place. Well done, Plaridel. — Suzanne

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    • 10. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 9:36 am

      suzanne:

      if anything, she died reclaiming her dignity as a human being.

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  • 11. aliciajamtaas  |  February 19, 2015 at 7:44 am

    This is the perfect story for the times we live in. I count my blessings every day for the freedom and respect I receive in my home and homeland. Thanks for such a poignant story.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 9:37 am

      alicia:

      freedom is worth dying (and living) for.

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      • 13. sustainabilitea  |  February 19, 2015 at 2:31 pm

        I agree here, too, Plaridel.

        janet

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        • 14. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 4:30 pm

          janet:

          thank you for agreeing with me. 🙂

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    • 15. sustainabilitea  |  February 19, 2015 at 2:31 pm

      I agree!

      janet

      Reply
  • 16. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  February 19, 2015 at 11:52 am

    What can I say.. the destiny of so many human beings is so frightening… and they say that we soon have them here too (last week it was Copenhagen, soon it’s Stockholm)

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    • 17. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 4:30 pm

      björn:

      that’s something i don’t understand about some people. like snakes, they bite the hand that feeds them.

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  • 18. keiths ramblings  |  February 19, 2015 at 2:53 pm

    A story for our times. Poignant, thought provoking.

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    • 19. plaridel  |  February 19, 2015 at 4:31 pm

      keith:

      it’s one story worth telling even if it hurts.

      Reply
  • 20. yaralwrites  |  February 19, 2015 at 4:37 pm

    Very nicely done, freedom is not always easy or long lived.

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    • 21. plaridel  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:12 pm

      yaralwrites:

      i agree. sad thing is oftentimes we learn to appreciate something more when it’s gone.

      Reply
  • 22. rochellewisoff  |  February 20, 2015 at 2:20 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Words escape me and they’ve pretty much been said. Timely story. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 23. plaridel  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:13 pm

      rochelle:

      thank you. stories like this need to be told again and again.

      Reply
  • 24. Priceless Joy  |  February 20, 2015 at 7:24 am

    Plaridell, this is chilling because these is so much truth to it. Excellent! PJ

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    • 25. plaridel  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:15 pm

      priceless joy:

      thank you for reading. i just wished it had a happy ending.

      Reply
  • 27. gahlearner  |  February 20, 2015 at 7:38 am

    One of the worst things about this excellent story is that this is the 21st century Earth, now. How many SF and fantasy novels show something like this on distant planets, at some point in time, as ‘picturesque’? Nope, it’s now, here, not in the middle ages either. Sorry for the rambling.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:15 pm

      gahlearner:

      it only proves some people living in the past haven’t evolved that much.

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  • 29. Amy Reese  |  February 20, 2015 at 2:08 pm

    Such a horrifying situation going on in the world. Very tragic story, Plaridel. I like to think she’s going to a better place. Well done.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:16 pm

      amy:

      she tried to escape and failed. but even then death would be preferable under the situation she was in.

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      • 31. Amy Reese  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:57 pm

        I can see how this might be the case. So tragic.

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  • 32. Liz Young  |  February 20, 2015 at 2:45 pm

    Poor woman – and the trouble is, it reflects real life. Well done.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:16 pm

      liz:

      thank you for your comment. well appreciated.

      Reply
  • 34. The Writer's Village  |  February 20, 2015 at 4:41 pm

    sad, true, shocking story like so much of mankind’s story throughout the centuries.
    Randy

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    • 35. plaridel  |  February 21, 2015 at 9:46 am

      randy:

      it’s a pity that folks capable of doing these things consider themselves as decent human beings.

      Reply
  • 38. Tracey@WhatsforDinnerDoc.com  |  February 20, 2015 at 5:48 pm

    Give me liberty or give me death.

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    • 39. plaridel  |  February 21, 2015 at 9:46 am

      tracey:

      you said it right. thank you for your comment.

      Reply
  • 40. patrickprinsloo  |  February 21, 2015 at 4:23 am

    Well written and certainly of our time. Aren’t humans just the nicest of creatures!

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    • 41. plaridel  |  February 21, 2015 at 9:47 am

      patrick:

      it seems to me that people are nicest only to those they can identify with.

      Reply
  • 42. milliethom  |  February 21, 2015 at 8:14 am

    I found this a very moving story, Plaridel. The girl was desperate for her freedom and saw running as her only possible chance. It’s a pity she didn’t make it but, in reality, how many of those unfortunate girls stolen /tricked away from their homelands do escape?

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    • 43. plaridel  |  February 21, 2015 at 9:47 am

      millie:

      it’s a world problem. really sad. it happens even in america.

      Reply
  • 44. Rachel Bjerke  |  February 22, 2015 at 9:14 pm

    Very emotional, and very on point for the times. Nicely done.

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    • 45. plaridel  |  February 23, 2015 at 10:03 am

      rachel:

      i appreciate your comment. thank you very much.

      Reply

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