Daddy’s Girl

March 4, 2015 at 10:04 am 41 comments

for friday fictioneers 100-word challenge 6 March 2015

Erin Leary
Photo Credit: Erin Leary

Once, I’d have traded Dad for somebody famous, but only if he didn’t look good in a uniform.

“I love you, Hannah,” he said as he left for Afghanistan. “You’ll always be daddy’s girl.”

I knew he wanted me to say I love him, too, but I didn’t. I was upset he asked me to help him clean the barn.

He promised he’d be back soon but we didn’t expect him in a casket. Mom was sobbing and hugged me so tight it hurt.

I wished he could hear me say I love him as he was laid to rest.

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  • 1. Priceless Joy  |  March 4, 2015 at 11:18 am

    Oh dear, that’s sad! Good story.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:36 pm

      priceless joy:

      a sad story, indeed. 😦

      Reply
  • 3. patrickprinsloo  |  March 4, 2015 at 11:52 am

    Regrets, I’ve had a few. Great story illustrating a big one. Bravo.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:36 pm

      patrick:

      hopefully, she could learn to move on.

      Reply
  • 5. Francesca Smith  |  March 4, 2015 at 12:12 pm

    Regrets are horrible, especially if the last thing you said or did to a person was something that made them upset.
    I’m sure he knew that she loved him.
    Wonderfully told, but very sad.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:37 pm

      fran:

      he did. after all, she was daddy’s girl.

      Reply
  • 7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  March 4, 2015 at 12:37 pm

    What a sad situation on regret.. afterwards it’s always too late.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:37 pm

      björn:

      it could be devastating for a little girl, indeed. 😦

      Reply
  • 9. milliethom  |  March 4, 2015 at 12:50 pm

    An incredibly sad story, told very well, plaridel. Regrets such as this stay with us for a very long time.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:37 pm

      millie:

      i found it quite a challenge to encapsulate the message in 100 words, but i did try.

      Reply
  • 11. sustainabilitea  |  March 4, 2015 at 1:37 pm

    Definitely a word to the wise for all of us, Plaridel. Don’t wait until it’s too late to say you love someone.

    janet

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    • 12. plaridel  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:38 pm

      janet:

      that’s so true. life’s full of uncertainties.

      Reply
  • 13. aliciajamtaas  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:04 pm

    I’ll bet Dad knew, but it always hurts so much to wonder after an incident like this. Well done.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  March 4, 2015 at 2:38 pm

      alicia:

      she knew. she was daddy’s girl.

      Reply
  • 15. kindredspirit23  |  March 4, 2015 at 8:03 pm

    Wonderful, one of the best I have read (and I have read a lot)

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    • 16. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 9:57 am

      kindredspirit:

      what a great compliment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 17. Sandra  |  March 4, 2015 at 11:08 pm

    Very sad.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 9:58 am

      sandra:

      i know.

      Reply
  • 19. FabricatingFiction  |  March 5, 2015 at 12:20 am

    Very well written.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 9:58 am

      louise:

      thank you for the compliment.

      Reply
  • 21. Claire Fuller  |  March 5, 2015 at 12:43 am

    A sad story 😦

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    • 22. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 9:59 am

      claire:

      thank you for reading.

      Reply
  • 23. draliman  |  March 5, 2015 at 2:13 am

    Very sad. I’m sure many people have cause to regret their last words spoken (or in this case unspoken) to loved ones.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 9:59 am

      draliman:

      that’s very true. unfortunately, we can’t turn back time to make amends.

      Reply
  • 25. rochellewisoff  |  March 5, 2015 at 2:22 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Poor Hannah. She’ll always have some regret for what she didn’t say in her childish anger.

    Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 26. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 9:59 am

      rochelle:

      i won’t blame her too much. she’s but a little girl.

      Reply
  • 27. dmmacilroy  |  March 5, 2015 at 2:22 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I loved this story. The regret is palpable but I am mystified by the first sentence. Are all the words in it?

    Good job on this one.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • 28. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 10:00 am

      doug:

      truth to tell i’d labored with that first sentence for sometime making sure i didn’t exceed 100 words. i’d welcome any change you’d recommend.

      Reply
  • 29. gahlearner  |  March 5, 2015 at 7:12 am

    That’s so sad. Dad will have known, though.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  March 5, 2015 at 10:00 am

      gahlearner:

      of course, he’d always know.

      Reply
  • 31. Weltchysnotebook  |  March 6, 2015 at 12:42 am

    Ah man, that is very sad indeed. Nicely written, though I agree with Doug, the first line isn’t quite right. Maybe something like…

    Once, I’d have traded Dad for somebody famous, but only if he didn’t look good in a uniform.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  March 6, 2015 at 12:44 pm

      welchy:

      your suggestion is perfect. made the change. thank you.

      Reply
  • 34. rgayer55  |  March 6, 2015 at 3:55 am

    We didn’t have any girls, but now have three granddaughters. They can steal a man’s heart. I’m sorry he didn’t make it home alive. She needs to forgive herself and move on. That’s what he would want.

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    • 35. plaridel  |  March 6, 2015 at 12:44 pm

      russell:

      i think so, too.

      Reply
  • 36. Amy Reese  |  March 6, 2015 at 10:12 am

    Intricately woven story, Plaridel. You have so much here in this short space. I hope she can move on. It would be suffocating to not let go. Nicely done.

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    • 37. plaridel  |  March 6, 2015 at 12:44 pm

      amy:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you.

      Reply
  • 38. erinleary  |  March 6, 2015 at 2:34 pm

    Very sad – but most kids don’t think much about the future, do they?

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    • 39. plaridel  |  March 6, 2015 at 4:28 pm

      erin:

      i guess at a certain age that is true.

      Reply
  • 40. talesfromthemotherland  |  March 9, 2015 at 6:46 pm

    Painfully tender story telling, Plaridel. Beautiful.

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    • 41. plaridel  |  March 10, 2015 at 10:36 am

      dawn:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply

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