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March 18, 2015 at 2:03 pm 34 comments

for friday fictioneers 100-word challenge 20 March 2015

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Photo Credit: Rachel-Bjerke

It might look abandoned. It might be covered in weeds and moss might have started to grow. But it wasn’t what it used to be. It was once a place where her family gathered on special occasions.

Two years had passed since 24-year old Kaliyah and her family left to avoid a bloody civil war. In that brief span of time, she saw her life altered forever with her parents dying in the refugee camp and her younger brother missing and presumed dead.

Now that the hostilities were over, she was back to reclaim what was left of her past.

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  • 1. Breath of Freshness  |  March 18, 2015 at 2:36 pm

    love the story, feels like a real place.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  March 18, 2015 at 5:19 pm

      breath of freshness:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 3. Francesca Smith  |  March 18, 2015 at 2:40 pm

    I always enjoy exploring ruins and imagining what they were like before turning desolate and unused.
    It often reminds me of Rome, and how amazing it is when walking round (especially in the Forum) that you can picture in the minds eye its former glory.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  March 18, 2015 at 5:20 pm

      fran:

      i’d been to rome as well and enjoyed wandering the city on foot for hours visiting ancient ruins and imagining how the ancient romans went about their daily lives. it was an unforgettable experience.

      Reply
  • 5. Priceless Joy  |  March 18, 2015 at 8:57 pm

    A story of 24 years of a girl’s life in less than 100 words. Excellent story.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 12:07 am

      priceless joy:

      it’s actually in 100 words unless i didn’t count right. 🙂

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      • 7. Priceless Joy  |  March 19, 2015 at 4:02 am

        Still, it is excellent!

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        • 8. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:29 am

          priceless joy:

          thank you.

          Reply
  • 9. aliciajamtaas  |  March 18, 2015 at 9:04 pm

    There’s a lot of sadness in this piece, but you sprinkled in just enough hope. Well done.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 12:08 am

      alicia:

      without hope, she won’t survive. thank you for reading.

      Reply
  • 11. Sandra  |  March 18, 2015 at 11:51 pm

    There’s a sense of determination about her. Good one.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 12:09 am

      sandra:

      she’s tough. she’ll learn to move on with her life.

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  • 13. draliman  |  March 19, 2015 at 2:09 am

    Coming home after fleeing a war. It must be sad to see what’s left after already losing so much.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:27 am

      draliman:

      at least, she’s able to come home and rebuild what’s left.

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  • 15. patrickprinsloo  |  March 19, 2015 at 2:27 am

    Tough story, well told. Too many people spending too long in refugee camps – too much need for refugee camps.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:28 am

      patrick:

      war is hell.

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  • 17. dmmacilroy  |  March 19, 2015 at 3:44 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    It’s a hard life.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • 18. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:28 am

      doug:

      i know.

      Reply
  • 19. rochellewisoff  |  March 19, 2015 at 3:44 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I hope she’s able to rebuild after the ravages of war.
    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 20. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:28 am

      rochelle:

      i hope so, too. she deserves a new leaf in life.

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  • 21. gahlearner  |  March 19, 2015 at 5:21 am

    Great use of the prompt. There are too many refugees in our world.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:29 am

      gahlearner:

      as long as men are engaged in useless wars, there would be refugees.

      Reply
  • 23. keiths ramblings  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:39 am

    At least she was able to return.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 3:10 pm

      keith:

      that’s a plus. she was given a new lease in life.

      Reply
  • 25. afairymind  |  March 19, 2015 at 9:56 am

    Great story. I hope she manages to put the pieces of her life together. 🙂

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    • 26. plaridel  |  March 19, 2015 at 3:10 pm

      afairymind:

      if there’s a will, there’ll always be a way. 🙂

      Reply
  • 27. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  March 19, 2015 at 5:11 pm

    Well that was pretty good. I was cheering her on!

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    • 28. plaridel  |  March 20, 2015 at 8:42 pm

      dawn:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 29. unwindthechaos  |  March 20, 2015 at 9:23 am

    Definitely rooting for her, hope she can come out of all that.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  March 20, 2015 at 8:43 pm

      unwindthechaos:

      she’s a survivor. the worst is behind her.

      Reply
  • 31. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  March 20, 2015 at 1:46 pm

    To me this is a story that might happen over and over again.. we seem to be creating new refuges every day…

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    • 32. plaridel  |  March 20, 2015 at 8:43 pm

      björn:

      unfortunately, that is very true. 😦

      Reply
  • 33. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist  |  March 23, 2015 at 12:32 am

    A sad story as is the story of all refugees. I’m glad she gets to go home and her hostilities are over. Is her nightmare just about to begin as she returns to the place of her childhood memories of happier times.

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    • 34. plaridel  |  March 23, 2015 at 6:46 pm

      irene:

      she must remain strong in memory of those she lost.

      Reply

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