Moving On

April 8, 2015 at 1:48 pm 40 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 10 April 2015

Jennifer Pendergast
Photo Credit: Jennifer Pendergast

After arriving home from the train station, Robbie went straight to the room he shared with Nathan.

He looked forward to having it all to himself. But now that his brother had left for college, he wasn’t sure anymore. It was weird seeing Nathan’s made-up bed and his dirty socks on the floor gone. He felt an emptiness that couldn’t be filled. He missed his brother already.

As for Nathan, he too felt an emptiness leaving Mom and Dad and Robbie behind. But it was only for a moment. It was soon overcome by the excitement of what lay ahead.

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  • 1. aliciajamtaas  |  April 8, 2015 at 4:23 pm

    Sometimes it’s easier to be the one leaving than the ones left behind – this story tells that very well.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  April 8, 2015 at 7:22 pm

      alicia:

      having experienced both, i can only agree with you.

      Reply
  • 3. Lata  |  April 8, 2015 at 8:33 pm

    The one who is leaving has something to look forward to and can escape his lonelines.. but its those left behind who will miss you forever. Our parents, for eg. Good story.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  April 8, 2015 at 11:07 pm

      lata:

      my sentiments exactly. thank you for reading.

      Reply
  • 5. Nan Falkner  |  April 8, 2015 at 10:08 pm

    This is what growing up is all about! Good story! Nan ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 6. plaridel  |  April 8, 2015 at 11:10 pm

      nan:

      yes, it’s a phase we have to go through. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 7. Sandra  |  April 8, 2015 at 11:38 pm

    Nicely captured – another milestone in the road to growing up.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  April 9, 2015 at 9:46 am

      sandra:

      nathan’s on his way to the best days of his life. college is the time you enjoy adulthood with your parents doling out the dough.

      Reply
  • 9. gahlearner  |  April 9, 2015 at 2:02 am

    Great take on the prompt. I always preferred to be the one leaving, too.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  April 9, 2015 at 9:46 am

      gahlearner:

      most folks do. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 11. draliman  |  April 9, 2015 at 4:56 am

    It’s usually easier for the ones who leave, I think. A reminder that nothing stays the same forever.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  April 9, 2015 at 9:47 am

      draliman:

      i agree. at the same time, nothing lives in a vacuum. it’s just a matter of time when robbie enjoys his new pad.

      Reply
  • 13. rgayer55  |  April 9, 2015 at 2:20 pm

    Ah, the empty-nest syndrome. At least Nathan just moved to college. It’s much worse when they are gone from this life. Well written piece.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  April 10, 2015 at 8:48 am

      russell:

      i could have nathan die in an accident, but seeing students having fun on spring break, i didn’t have the heart. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 15. elmowrites  |  April 10, 2015 at 5:56 am

    Nice comparison between the two brothers.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  April 10, 2015 at 8:48 am

      jen:

      thank you for reading. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 17. lifeconfusions  |  April 10, 2015 at 9:54 am

    We sometimes have to leave things and people behind to learn and shape into a person we are meant to be but yeah the emptiness always lingers of the people and things once left behind.
    Great story Plaridel ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 18. plaridel  |  April 10, 2015 at 6:52 pm

      zee:

      when i left home, i was unaware that my mother and grandmother cried all week, especially the latter who thought she wouldn’t see me again. but as fate would have it, she saw me again before she passed away.

      Reply
  • 19. dmmacilroy  |  April 10, 2015 at 3:32 pm

    Dear Plaridel,

    Leaving the nest fills the heart with excitement. Great story about a leap of faith.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • 20. plaridel  |  April 10, 2015 at 6:53 pm

      doug:

      so true, indeed. i’d been there and done that.

      Reply
  • 21. Francesca Smith  |  April 10, 2015 at 4:06 pm

    A well written story about how change affects all.
    I enjoyed this very much so.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  April 10, 2015 at 6:53 pm

      fran:

      thank you for reading. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 23. milliethom  |  April 11, 2015 at 5:16 am

    I can empathise with both characters here, although Nathan’s excitement about a life with new friends will undoubtedly diminish his sense of loss quite soon. Robbie and his parents will take much longer to adjust. An enjoyable read, Plaridel. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 24. plaridel  |  April 11, 2015 at 9:14 am

      millie:

      it’s true indeed. although we’re gone, we leave imprints that folks have to live through.

      Reply
  • 25. Amy Reese  |  April 11, 2015 at 12:02 pm

    The excitement of new beginnings. I like how this is tied to the train ride. Nice one, Plaridel.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  April 11, 2015 at 7:23 pm

      amy:

      thank you. i appreciate your taking the time to read it. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 27. afairymind  |  April 11, 2015 at 12:55 pm

    A good take on the prompt. ๐Ÿ™‚ It’s definitely easier to be the one leaving than the one being left behind – though I’m sure Robbie will soon grow used to having the room to himself!

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    • 28. plaridel  |  April 11, 2015 at 7:24 pm

      afairymind:

      as they say, nothing stays in a vacuum. the void that nathan left behind would soon be filled with something else.

      Reply
  • 29. The Writer's Village  |  April 11, 2015 at 6:50 pm

    Changes from two vantage points… nice.
    randy

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    • 30. plaridel  |  April 11, 2015 at 7:24 pm

      randy:

      thanks for reading. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 31. rochellewisoff  |  April 12, 2015 at 1:59 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I remember feeling that way when my older brother went into the Air Force. You’ve captured the scene well. Very true to life.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 32. plaridel  |  April 12, 2015 at 8:11 pm

      rochelle:

      i share the feeling. it must have been touch for you.

      Reply
  • 33. keiths ramblings  |  April 12, 2015 at 3:42 am

    We all left and most of us have seen them go.

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    • 34. plaridel  |  April 12, 2015 at 8:11 pm

      keith:

      it’s the circle of life.

      Reply
  • 35. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  April 13, 2015 at 7:56 am

    We grow up and find our paths in life… separation is part of humanity

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    • 36. plaridel  |  April 14, 2015 at 11:15 am

      bjรถrn:

      i guess that’s what life is all about.

      Reply
  • 37. talesfromthemotherland  |  April 13, 2015 at 3:37 pm

    These mixed emotions for life events… they’re so universal. Nice job touching on that, Plaridel.

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    • 38. plaridel  |  April 14, 2015 at 11:15 am

      dawn:

      thank for reading as usual. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 39. Indira  |  April 13, 2015 at 9:38 pm

    You write simple and beautiful stories. We always miss someone when the person has left.

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    • 40. plaridel  |  April 14, 2015 at 11:17 am

      indira:

      thank you for reading my stories. i feel honored.

      Reply

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