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April 29, 2015 at 6:46 pm 50 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 1 May 2015

Note: My contribution this week is a little risquรฉ. Please proceed with caution.

Dee Lovering
Photo Credit: Dee Lovering

Walking down Las Ramblas, Tim was seduced by the bright neon sign and went in for a massage. Unbeknownst to him, the place was under surveillance.

She told him to strip and lay on his stomach. She was an angel wearing almost nothing at all. Tim tried to touch her to make sure she was real but she brushed him off.

After a nice rub out, she had him turn on his back for the final touch. By now, she had his full attention and his eyes closed in anticipation.

Suddenly, a loud banging was heard. “Policia, abre la puerta!

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  • 1. Yinglan  |  April 29, 2015 at 9:53 pm

    What was happening? Why did the police come? I’ll bet the masseuse/seductress was a wanted criminal. You had me from the beginning. Great story. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 2. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:17 am

      yinglan:

      the place had been suspected of providing massage with extra benefits. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
      • 3. Yinglan  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:46 am

        Ah, I see.

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        • 4. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 12:26 pm

          yinglan:

          ah, at last. ๐Ÿ™‚

          Reply
  • 5. aysabaw  |  April 29, 2015 at 11:58 pm

    this is nice ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 6. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:18 am

      aysabaw:

      thank you. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 7. Francesca Smith  |  April 30, 2015 at 1:44 am

    Wow, definitely the start of a crime thriller here, and you have got me intrigued with this one. Great story!

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    • 8. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:21 am

      fran:

      so much details left to meet the 100-word limit. glad it still made sense to you.

      Reply
  • 9. ansumani  |  April 30, 2015 at 5:37 am

    Tim.Tim. Did you really have to go in? Hearing about what came next would be equally interesting. Good one.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:18 am

      ansumani:

      what came next? he went to jail.

      Reply
  • 11. gahlearner  |  April 30, 2015 at 5:49 am

    Was it an illegal ‘massage studio’? Or maybe drugs? Many possibilities to this story. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 12. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:19 am

      gahlearner:

      i’d say both. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 13. Lorna's Voice  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:33 am

    Not a very relaxing massage, huh? Hope he didn’t have to pay for the pleasure! ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    • 14. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 12:23 pm

      lorna:

      sadly, he had to pay in advance and there was no refund policy. the saga continues in prison. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 17. draliman  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:36 am

    No “happy ending” for him ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 18. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 12:23 pm

      draliman:

      you bet. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 19. Nan Falkner  |  April 30, 2015 at 9:38 am

    Coitus Interuptus – seems like he was set up. Too bad. Interesting story! (I can’t believe I used that word.) Nan ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 20. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 12:25 pm

      nan:

      i don’t know what it means, but it seems right on the money just by saying it aloud to myself. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 21. aliciajamtaas  |  April 30, 2015 at 10:30 am

    Ooops! Wrong place at the wrong time. Fun take on the prompt.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 12:26 pm

      alicia:

      tourists make this kind of mistake. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 23. The Writer's Village  |  April 30, 2015 at 4:41 pm

    Aside from not getting happy ending, this massage is going to end up costing him a load (all puns intended).
    Randy

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    • 24. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 10:04 pm

      randy:

      i assure you he was drained emotionally and physically from the experience. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 27. Perry Block (@PerryBlock)  |  April 30, 2015 at 5:24 pm

    Damn, I was looking for a happy ending! In every sense of the word. What’s the address of that angel wearing almost nothing again?

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    • 28. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 10:04 pm

      perry:

      it was closed for renovation. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  • 29. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  April 30, 2015 at 6:52 pm

    Damn, I hate when that happens! lol

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    • 30. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 10:05 pm

      dawn:

      me, too. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 31. bykimberlylynne  |  April 30, 2015 at 8:56 pm

    Timely – our little town had two “massage therapists” arrested just today for that little something extra.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  April 30, 2015 at 10:05 pm

      kimberly:

      i guess it’s the sign of the times. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 33. FabricatingFiction  |  May 1, 2015 at 12:43 am

    I hope he doesn’t have a wife who might find out!

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    • 34. plaridel  |  May 1, 2015 at 10:04 am

      louise:

      wouldn’t it be lovely if she does? ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 35. Suzanne Joshi (@PaSusan2)  |  May 1, 2015 at 12:58 am

    That’s a warning if I ever heard one. Now he’s in trouble as well, and in a foreign country. O_o Good writing, Plaridel. — Suzanne

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    • 36. plaridel  |  May 1, 2015 at 10:04 am

      suzanne:

      sorry to say, some tourists are easy prey for this kind of stuff.

      Reply
  • 37. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist  |  May 1, 2015 at 1:08 am

    Poor Tim has really been caught with his pants down. Great story Plaridel

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  • 41. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  May 1, 2015 at 6:17 am

    Ah.. Yes he got more than he payed for I guess.. Some free concrete hospitality and maybe also some original tapas.

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    • 42. plaridel  |  May 1, 2015 at 10:05 am

      bjรถrn:

      hopefully, he’s got some dineros left to bribe his way out of the situation.

      Reply
  • 43. Amy Reese  |  May 1, 2015 at 2:22 pm

    Rookie tourist maneuver. Caught in the act! Good one, Plaridel!

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    • 44. plaridel  |  May 1, 2015 at 7:27 pm

      amy:

      sometimes when nature comes calling, it’s hard to resist. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 45. afairymind  |  May 2, 2015 at 4:51 am

    I think he chose the wrong place for his massage! Good story. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 46. plaridel  |  May 3, 2015 at 7:03 pm

      afairymind:

      wrong timing was more like it. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 47. rochellewisoff  |  May 3, 2015 at 4:09 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    No doubt Tim will be standing at attention when that door opens. ๐Ÿ˜‰

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 48. plaridel  |  May 3, 2015 at 7:03 pm

      rochelle:

      that’s a good one! ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 49. Dawn Quyle Landau  |  May 3, 2015 at 9:19 am

    Yes, what Rochelle said! To keep this risquรฉ mood going! ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    • 50. plaridel  |  May 3, 2015 at 7:04 pm

      dawn:

      she nailed it. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply

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