The Long Wait

June 3, 2015 at 2:17 pm 46 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 5 June 2015

C. Hase
Photo Credit: C. Hase

Papi followed little Ella and her uncle to the beach where a boat was taking them to the main island.

“Behave yourself until I return,” she told Papi. Early that morning, she caught her dog chasing chickens in the backyard.

As she boarded the boat, Ella didn’t realize she wouldn’t be coming back. She had been given up for adoption and heading to America.

Every day, Papi went to the beach waiting for her. Whenever a boat arrived, he’d wag his tail only to be disappointed time and time again. Papi never gave up until he died of old age.

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  • 1. ansumani  |  June 3, 2015 at 2:27 pm

    That’s so sad….Papi being a dog makes it even sadder. Nicely told story.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  June 3, 2015 at 6:50 pm

      ansumani:

      thank you for reading. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 3. gahlearner  |  June 3, 2015 at 5:28 pm

    I’m not sure if I should be sad or happy. Poor Papi doesn’t understand what’s happening and waits for his friend. Ella may be lucky being adopted into a loving family–and maybe not, losing everything she knew and loved. Very thought-provoking story, made especially emotional through the doggie.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  June 3, 2015 at 7:02 pm

      gahlearner:

      when i sat down to write the story, i had nothing in mind. then i remembered this old post of mine. the picture in that post became the inspiration.

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  • 5. Tracey@WhatsforDinnerDoc.com  |  June 3, 2015 at 7:26 pm

    We can only hope that the new family is as devoted to Ella as Papi was.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  June 3, 2015 at 11:27 pm

      tracey:

      anything less would indeed be a tragedy.

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  • 7. Amy Reese  |  June 3, 2015 at 8:24 pm

    Loyal to the very end. That’s just like a dog. Sweet story, Plaridel, but a little sad.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  June 3, 2015 at 11:27 pm

      amy:

      i believe most dogs are capable of unconditional love. that’s why they’re excellent pets.

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  • 9. Lata Sunil  |  June 4, 2015 at 12:15 am

    Its so sad.. for Papi.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  June 4, 2015 at 10:01 am

      lata:

      thank you for reading. you don’t realize how much i appreciate it.

      Reply
  • 11. draliman  |  June 4, 2015 at 12:39 am

    Very sad, such a loyal little dog.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  June 4, 2015 at 10:01 am

      draliman:

      a dog is one’s best friend. it’s loyal to a fault.

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  • 13. rochellewisoff  |  June 4, 2015 at 1:44 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    The image of Papi waiting for her every day tears my heart out. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 14. plaridel  |  June 4, 2015 at 10:01 am

      rochelle:

      thank you for the nice compliment. i’m glad you found the story worth reading.

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  • 15. rgayer55  |  June 4, 2015 at 3:52 am

    A beautifully crafted story. It brought an “Awwww” to my lips at the end. It’s been written that God made dogs as an example of how to love.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  June 4, 2015 at 10:02 am

      russell:

      what a great compliment. thank you.

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  • 17. Francesca Smith  |  June 4, 2015 at 3:53 am

    This reminds me of a story from Japan where a dog known as Hachikō waited for the return of his dead owner for 9 years.
    Bittersweet take on the prompt.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  June 4, 2015 at 10:02 am

      fran:

      thank you. i appreciate your comment very much.

      Reply
  • 19. Sandra  |  June 4, 2015 at 9:07 am

    That was really sad. I’m a sucker for a sad-dog story.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  June 4, 2015 at 10:05 am

      sandra:

      thank you kindly. a devoted dog is really a keeper.

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  • 21. Margaret  |  June 5, 2015 at 2:03 am

    I’m feeling sad for both Ella and Papi. Little Ella seems to have been happy on the island, and why doesn’t she know she won’t be back? There’s a lot to read between the lines here. Well told.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  June 5, 2015 at 9:17 am

      margaret:

      she was given up for adoption. 😦

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  • 23. micklively  |  June 5, 2015 at 5:59 am

    The pack instinct runs mighty deep.
    Good piece.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  June 5, 2015 at 9:18 am

      mick:

      it’s great that you found time to read this pieace. thank you.

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      • 25. micklively  |  June 7, 2015 at 11:50 pm

        Not at all: it’s great that you took the time to write it. THANK YOU!

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        • 26. plaridel  |  June 8, 2015 at 10:10 pm

          mick:

          that’s very encouraging. thanks again. 🙂

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  • 27. aliciajamtaas  |  June 5, 2015 at 6:57 am

    Hope springs eternal. Sad little tale, well written.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  June 5, 2015 at 9:18 am

      alicia:

      yes, hope springs eternal. to paraphrase jane austen, he hopes the longest when all hopes are gone.

      Reply
  • 29. The Writer's Village  |  June 5, 2015 at 8:43 am

    Awww.
    Good tail… I mean tale.
    Randy

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    • 30. plaridel  |  June 5, 2015 at 9:18 am

      randy:

      thank you for reading. i really appreciate it.

      Reply
  • 31. Lorna's Voice  |  June 5, 2015 at 1:59 pm

    Oh, how sad for both of them…In such a short story, you surprised me twice! Great job.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  June 6, 2015 at 5:27 pm

      lorna:

      thank for the great compliment. i really appreciate it.

      Reply
  • 35. tinabasu  |  June 5, 2015 at 11:26 pm

    Poor little Papi… nice post

    Tina from The Sunny Side of Life

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    • 36. plaridel  |  June 6, 2015 at 5:27 pm

      tina:

      thank you for stopping by and commenting. deeply appreciated.

      Reply
  • 37. Keith's Ramblings  |  June 6, 2015 at 2:15 am

    Such faithful creatures. What a moving story.

    Visit Keith’s Ramblings!

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    • 38. plaridel  |  June 6, 2015 at 5:28 pm

      keith:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you for your comment.

      Reply
  • 39. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  June 9, 2015 at 1:05 am

    What sadness.. nothing is sadder than the disappointment in a faithful dog’s waving tail

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    • 40. plaridel  |  June 9, 2015 at 6:59 pm

      björn:

      thank you for your comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 41. Weltchysnotebook  |  June 9, 2015 at 5:11 am

    That’s pretty sad.

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    • 42. plaridel  |  June 9, 2015 at 7:00 pm

      welchy:

      thank you for reading and commenting.

      Reply
  • 43. Suzanne Joshi  |  June 9, 2015 at 5:50 pm

    That’s such a sad story, Plaridel, but so well done. Dogs truly love as long as they live. — Suzanne

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    • 44. plaridel  |  June 9, 2015 at 7:01 pm

      suzanne:

      thank you for the encouraging comment. 🙂

      Reply
  • 45. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist  |  June 10, 2015 at 12:21 am

    A lovely story of the dog’s devotion and how dreadful for Ella to be taken and not know she would not be back. They did that with the Barnado children after the second world war taking them supposedly to a birthday party and they ended up in Australia. Caused the kids huge problems. Nicely written.

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    • 46. plaridel  |  June 10, 2015 at 11:16 am

      irene:

      it was heartbreaking indeed for both the little girl and her dog.

      Reply

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