A Dying Wish

September 9, 2015 at 4:01 pm 46 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 11 September 2015

Note: Just got back from vacation. I went to Scotland and enjoyed it very much. It’s such a beautiful country. Darn, reality is starting to sink in. Anyway, this is my contribution for this week. If it’s a little lame, you can blame it on the jet lag. πŸ™‚

Jennifer Pendergast
Photo Credit: Jennifer Pendergast

As she lay sunbathing on the beach, Rebecca pondered at Darren’s dying wish.

Of course, she knew he didn’t have cancer. It was a lie. It was just a ploy to pressure her into going along with it.

The mere thought of it made Rebecca squirm. It was against her values. At the same time, she loved Darren so much she found herself helpless to resist.

Darren approached, sat beside her, and looked at her with pleading eyes.

“So?” he asked with bated breath.

Ok, Darren,” Rebecca said, exasperated. “You’ve won. You can wear my clothes.”

“Awesome! Thanks, big sis.”

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  • 1. aysabaw  |  September 9, 2015 at 8:53 pm

    nice. welcome back Sir P!

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    • 2. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:31 am

      aysabaw:

      thanks. sometimes the mind works in mysterious ways. when I looked at this week’s prompt, it reminded me of the beach, kendall jennner frolicking in mexico with her boyfriend and her father turning into a woman. that’s how I came up with the story. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 3. BjΓΆrn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  September 9, 2015 at 9:35 pm

    I never saw that coming… Nice surprise

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    • 4. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:32 am

      bjΓΆrn:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 5. FabricatingFiction  |  September 9, 2015 at 10:58 pm

    I was holding my breath waiting for the reveal! Scotland is very beautiful.

    Reply
    • 6. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:34 am

      louise:

      Scotland is really something. I enjoyed the highlands very much.

      Reply
  • 7. Suzanne Joshi  |  September 10, 2015 at 2:04 am

    Great unexpected twist at the end, Plaridel. I’ve seen pictures of Scotland, and it does look beautiful. Well done. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • 8. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:37 am

      suzanne:

      i’ll write about the Scotland trip. i’ll have pictures to share, too. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 9. rochellewisoff  |  September 10, 2015 at 2:23 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I was just thinking about you yesterday. It’s good to see you back. Quite the surprise ending that left me shaking my head.

    A couple of grammar issues: “…made Rebecca squirmed..”.take off the ‘ed’
    and “Rebecca saw Darren approached, sat beside her….”one suggestion: Rebecca saw Darren approach, sit beside her…or stronger (since we know it’s Rebecca who’s seeing) “Darren approached, sat beside her and looked…”

    In the end it’s your decision. Aside from those nitpicks I didn’t find your story lame. Glad you’re back.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 10. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:44 am

      rochelle:

      i’m sure glad to be back. i appreciate your suggestions. how could i miss those errors? i’ll correct them right away. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 11. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist  |  September 10, 2015 at 5:35 am

    That was unexpected. Well done.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:47 am

      irene:

      i appreciate your comment very much. thank you. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 13. Sandra  |  September 10, 2015 at 5:51 am

    Back in style I see. πŸ™‚

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    • 14. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:48 am

      sandra:

      you bet. just hope mom and dad wouldn’t mind losing a son and gaining another daughter. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 15. mschrysalis  |  September 10, 2015 at 6:28 am

    caught me by surprise … love it

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    • 16. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:49 am

      pat:

      i’m glad the twist worked for you. thank you. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 17. lifeconfusions  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:10 am

    Hey Plaridel ! Welcome back, you were missed ! πŸ™‚

    That was a brilliant story with a funny unexpected twist, Great way to get back into blogging again !

    Hope to see you around and hear more about your adventures and vacation there in Scotland πŸ™‚

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    • 18. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:52 am

      zee:

      i’m glad you missed me. i missed you, too. i’ll have stories and pictures to share about this trip. i just need a vacation from this vacation. πŸ™‚

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      • 19. lifeconfusions  |  September 11, 2015 at 3:45 am

        Awh can’t wait to see them Plaridel ! Once again so glad to see you around. Have a great weekend πŸ™‚

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        • 20. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:17 pm

          zee:

          still trying to get to reality. it’s coming soon. πŸ™‚

          Reply
  • 21. ansumani  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:37 am

    Great twist at the end there. Except for those grammar issues that Rochelle pointed out it was well done.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  September 10, 2015 at 10:53 am

      ansumani:

      i really appreciate rochelle watching my back. she’s an angel. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 23. Dale  |  September 10, 2015 at 8:35 pm

    Well that was a twist!

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    • 24. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:22 pm

      dale:

      thank you for reading. i deeply appreciate it. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 25. Nan Falkner  |  September 10, 2015 at 9:16 pm

    Dear Plaridel, I always enjoy your wackiness! Funny and cute! Nan

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    • 26. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:21 pm

      nan:

      what a great compliment. you just made my day. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 27. gravadee  |  September 10, 2015 at 11:01 pm

    Nice take on the prompt

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    • 28. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:20 pm

      gravadee:

      thank you for the nice compliment. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 29. ceayr  |  September 11, 2015 at 3:27 am

    Another chuckle, thank you.
    And, as an expatriate Scot, I have to ask.
    How was the weather?

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    • 30. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:19 pm

      ceayr:

      the weather was great. it hardly rained at all during our visit which made it more memorable.

      Reply
  • 31. rgayer55  |  September 11, 2015 at 3:49 am

    Not lame at all. Very amusing in my opinion.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:16 pm

      russell:

      hopefully, i didn’t offend anymore.

      Reply
  • 33. draliman  |  September 11, 2015 at 4:42 am

    Fun twist! Such great lengths he went to πŸ™‚

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    • 34. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:15 pm

      draliman:

      i had fun writing it. thank you very much. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 35. sustainabilitea  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:54 am

    I didn’t expect that. Glad you had a wonderful vacation. I’d love to visit Scotland again. The first and only time was many too many years ago.

    janet

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    • 36. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:14 pm

      janet:

      great country! great people! loved the haggis! πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 37. gahlearner  |  September 11, 2015 at 12:41 pm

    I love the twist, the whole setup. Great to see you back. πŸ™‚

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    • 38. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:13 pm

      gahlearner:

      what a great compliment. thank you. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 39. Francesca Smith  |  September 11, 2015 at 2:59 pm

    Welcome back!
    You have written a very interesting story.

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    • 40. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:12 pm

      francesca:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 41. Margaret  |  September 11, 2015 at 4:17 pm

    Ha. Funny ending. Love it.

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    • 42. plaridel  |  September 11, 2015 at 8:11 pm

      margaret:

      gotcha! πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 43. Priceless Joy  |  September 12, 2015 at 11:45 am

    What a nice sister! My sister use to beat me up if I put on her clothes. This story wasn’t lame! It’s a wonderful story.

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    • 44. plaridel  |  September 14, 2015 at 12:38 pm

      priceless joy:

      that’s a nice compliment. thank you. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 45. Amy Reese  |  September 12, 2015 at 2:05 pm

    Well, that wasn’t what I was expecting! Now that’s bonding when a sister lets her brother wear her clothes. Welcome back!

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    • 46. plaridel  |  September 14, 2015 at 12:38 pm

      amy:

      i’m glad you liked it. and thank you for the nice welcome back. πŸ™‚

      Reply

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