Losing It

October 28, 2015 at 4:50 pm 33 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 30 October 2015

Dale Rogerson
Photo Credit: Dale Rogerson

From the bridge, Michael looks at the abandoned creek below. Amidst the trash, he finds memories of happy days. A broken chair. A yellow rubber duck floating upside down. A once trusted bike that had lost its wheel. And so on.

The place is a reminder that everything in this life has an expiration date. All the good things must come to an end. But, if there’s any consolation, all the bad things don’t last either.

Without much further ado, he throws his briefcase into the mix. He has no need for it now after being fired from his job.

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  • 1. Dale  |  October 28, 2015 at 6:30 pm

    Oy! Your guy can join my gal! πŸ˜‰

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    • 2. plaridel  |  October 28, 2015 at 11:16 pm

      dale:

      sounds like a good idea. πŸ™‚

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      • 3. Dale  |  October 29, 2015 at 4:03 am

        πŸ™‚

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  • 4. Dreamer of Dreams  |  October 28, 2015 at 6:51 pm

    What a sudden and bitter end! This sentence made me sad: “he place is a reminder everything in this life has an expiration date.”
    I feel for your protagonist. A very well narrated story!

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    • 5. plaridel  |  October 28, 2015 at 11:17 pm

      vijaya:

      thank you. i thought of suicide at first but decided against it at the last minute. he deserved a second chance. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 6. micklively  |  October 29, 2015 at 12:56 am

    It’s too easy to get into bloody-minded mode.
    Good piece.

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    • 7. plaridel  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:25 pm

      mick:

      that is so true. thanks again for the support.

      Reply
  • 8. rochellewisoff  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:00 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Everything in this life has an expiration date. Great line. Really good story. I hope this is the beginning of the beginning for him.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 9. plaridel  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:25 pm

      rochelle:

      i’d been fired twice before so i know how it felt to be dumped and finding your time was up. when one door closed, however, another one opened. he’d find another beginning awaiting him somewhere.

      Reply
  • 10. gahlearner  |  October 29, 2015 at 3:03 am

    Catharsis is good for the psyche. Good story, I also liked that line a lot.

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    • 11. plaridel  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:24 pm

      gahlearner:

      sometimes, folks need to do something symbolic to get out of the rut.

      Reply
  • 12. Sandra  |  October 29, 2015 at 4:05 am

    He’ll soon be needing another briefcase. I feel it in my bones. Nicely done.

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    • 13. plaridel  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:24 pm

      sandra:

      i felt there was still a fight left in him, so i allowed him to live. πŸ™‚

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      • 14. Sandra  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:47 pm

        You’re all heart. .. 😊

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        • 15. plaridel  |  October 30, 2015 at 3:34 pm

          sandra:

          i hope so. πŸ™‚

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  • 16. draliman  |  October 29, 2015 at 6:46 am

    This sounds like a dumping place for the detritus of his life. Quite sad.

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    • 17. plaridel  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:23 pm

      draliman:

      detritus. xounds scary. i never heard of that word before so i had to google it. but you’re exactly right. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 18. Deborah Drucker  |  October 29, 2015 at 12:26 pm

    I like it. He is fighting back. But things can be recycled into something better or useful again. πŸ™‚

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    • 19. plaridel  |  October 29, 2015 at 2:23 pm

      deborah:

      i agree and that includes him. πŸ™‚

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      • 20. Deborah Drucker  |  October 29, 2015 at 3:05 pm

        Yes, I was thinking that too. πŸ™‚

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        • 21. plaridel  |  October 30, 2015 at 3:34 pm

          deborah:

          πŸ™‚

          Reply
  • 22. Suzanne Joshi  |  October 30, 2015 at 5:54 am

    Heartrending. I hope his depression at the job loss also won’t last. Well done, Plaridel. —- Suzanne

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    • 23. plaridel  |  October 30, 2015 at 3:33 pm

      suzanne:

      losing a job isn’t the end of the world. he’d find another one better.

      Reply
  • 24. BjΓΆrn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  October 30, 2015 at 1:51 pm

    There is a funeral place for everything… but it’s better with the briefcase than himself.

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    • 25. plaridel  |  October 30, 2015 at 3:33 pm

      bjΓΆrn:

      that’s true. one is reminded not to lose hope even in anger.

      Reply
  • 26. ansumani  |  October 31, 2015 at 9:21 am

    That ending was an unexpected twist to what felt like a rumination. I can understand his angst but he shouldn’t litter the lake.

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    • 27. plaridel  |  October 31, 2015 at 10:01 am

      ansumani:

      i know it wasn’t right. but, at least, he didn’t litter the place with his own body.

      Reply
  • 28. Amy Reese  |  October 31, 2015 at 12:06 pm

    Oh, that must have felt good to throw his briefcase into the water and to let go of the old life. Nice one, Plaridel.

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    • 29. plaridel  |  October 31, 2015 at 3:32 pm

      amy:

      that’s one way of looking at it. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 30. rgayer55  |  October 31, 2015 at 2:20 pm

    How many briefs were in that case? What a waste of good underwear.

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    • 31. plaridel  |  October 31, 2015 at 3:32 pm

      russell:

      thank goodness, it was a different kind of briefs that he threw away. besides, he wasn’t ready to go commando yet. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 32. Perry Block (@PerryBlock)  |  November 1, 2015 at 1:51 pm

    Hopefully this turns out to be a bad thing and not a good thing that ended. Great use of the prompt.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  November 2, 2015 at 9:29 am

      perry:

      thank you. i appreciate the comment.

      Reply

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