She Lied

March 16, 2016 at 7:19 pm 38 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 18 March 2016

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

After his tour in the Pacific, John went straight to the antique shop by the river.

It was owned by Peggy’s family for generations. It was there where he said goodbye four years ago.

Peggy promised she’d wait for his return from the world war.

He wondered if she was still waiting for him. After all, she had many suitors.

Suddenly, he heard an excited woman’s voice that made his heart skip a beat.

“There you are! I’ve been looking for you all over!”

When he turned around, he saw Peggy grabbing a toddler by the arm.

Obviously, she lied.

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38 Comments Add your own

  • 1. FabricatingFiction  |  March 17, 2016 at 1:51 am

    Awww. Could it be his child?

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    • 2. plaridel  |  March 17, 2016 at 10:07 am

      louise:

      good question. 🙂

      Reply
  • 3. Sandra  |  March 17, 2016 at 2:33 am

    Tough! But maybe she was looking after the child for someone else?

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    • 4. plaridel  |  March 17, 2016 at 10:08 am

      sandra:

      that’s true. he shouldn’t be too quick to judge.

      Reply
  • 5. Fuzzy Panda Barista  |  March 17, 2016 at 3:18 am

    How sad. I was anticipating a happy ending. Nice powerful twist.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  March 17, 2016 at 10:08 am

      jenny:

      but what if it was his child? 🙂

      Reply
  • 7. draliman  |  March 17, 2016 at 5:00 am

    His sudden hope just as suddenly dashed (unless she was only babysitting as Sandra mentioned!). Nicely done!

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    • 8. plaridel  |  March 17, 2016 at 10:09 am

      draliman:

      confronting her would definitely help.

      Reply
  • 9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  March 17, 2016 at 5:17 am

    Ah.. I guess toddler means he is not the father… but who knows it could be a young cousin

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    • 10. plaridel  |  March 17, 2016 at 10:09 am

      björn:

      he needs to talk to her to know the real story.

      Reply
  • 11. Mike  |  March 17, 2016 at 1:32 pm

    Perhaps his own guilt led him to jump to a conclusion!

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    • 12. plaridel  |  March 17, 2016 at 2:13 pm

      mike:

      he could be suffering from post-traumatic stress disorder syndrome.

      Reply
  • 13. aliciajamtaas  |  March 17, 2016 at 1:51 pm

    MMM. I was going to say “Ouch!” but after reading the comments, I’ll think again. Well done…..

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    • 14. plaridel  |  March 17, 2016 at 2:13 pm

      alicia:

      this makes writing fiction more fun, doesn’t it? 🙂

      Reply
      • 15. aliciajamtaas  |  March 17, 2016 at 2:42 pm

        Indeed it does.

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        • 16. plaridel  |  March 18, 2016 at 1:44 pm

          alicia:

          let’s have fun then while we may. 🙂

          Reply
  • 17. gahlearner  |  March 17, 2016 at 4:37 pm

    I think she’s got some explaining to do. Moving story, and sad.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  March 18, 2016 at 1:44 pm

      gahlearner:

      they need to sit down and talk about it.

      Reply
  • 19. nice2beme  |  March 18, 2016 at 2:09 am

    May be this was his child, so then she didn`t lie… But during this time she might found another father for her baby.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  March 18, 2016 at 1:44 pm

      nice2beme:

      he shouldn’t prejudge and listen to what she has to say first.

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      • 21. nice2beme  |  March 20, 2016 at 12:53 pm

        Completely agree.

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        • 22. plaridel  |  March 21, 2016 at 12:21 pm

          nice2beme:

          thank you.

          Reply
  • 23. mickwynn2013  |  March 18, 2016 at 2:16 am

    Poor man disappointed again.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  March 18, 2016 at 1:43 pm

      mick:

      sometimes it’s not always what it appears. perhaps there’s a silver lining after all.

      Reply
  • 25. Perry Block (@PerryBlock)  |  March 18, 2016 at 3:44 pm

    Great story with a very effective surprise ending. I like it very much.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  March 19, 2016 at 9:10 am

      perry:

      thank you. that’s a great compliment. 🙂

      Reply
  • 27. wmqcolby  |  March 19, 2016 at 1:29 pm

    Hahahahaha! And BOOM goes the dynamite, Plaridel. That was a killer of an ending, almost like a signature. Dedicated to all the guys in the service that “Jody” took away. Awesome.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  March 20, 2016 at 1:41 pm

      kent:

      thank you. hopefully, the story didn’t end there. 🙂

      Reply
      • 29. wmqcolby  |  March 20, 2016 at 1:42 pm

        I’d love to read a sequel.

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        • 30. plaridel  |  March 21, 2016 at 12:20 pm

          kent:

          wonderful idea. 🙂

          Reply
  • 31. rochellewisoff  |  March 19, 2016 at 1:45 pm

    Dear Plaridel,

    I guess a woman can only keep a promise so long. Well done…love the surprise twist at the end.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 32. plaridel  |  March 20, 2016 at 1:41 pm

      rochelle:

      maybe she did after all. 🙂

      Reply
  • 33. Amy Reese  |  March 19, 2016 at 8:01 pm

    His heart skipped a beat at the sound of her voice. I liked that part. Nice touch. It’s too bad she couldn’t wait. Maybe it was her biological clock ticking.

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    • 34. plaridel  |  March 20, 2016 at 1:41 pm

      amy:

      i think he has to wait for her to tell the real story. 🙂

      Reply
  • 35. rgayer55  |  March 21, 2016 at 9:51 am

    John? John who? I don’t think she remembers anyone by that name.

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    • 36. plaridel  |  March 21, 2016 at 12:20 pm

      russell:

      she must under stress. she needs to calm down. 🙂

      Reply
  • 37. patriciaruthsusan  |  March 22, 2016 at 1:34 am

    If it had been four years, the child couldn’t have been his if it was a toddler. She could have been babysitting for a friend. Then again, many girls didn’t wait. Four years is a long time for a young person. Well done, Plaridel. — Suzanne

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    • 38. plaridel  |  March 23, 2016 at 1:49 pm

      suzanne:

      i agree some girls couldn’t wait that long. he’d get over it. 🙂

      Reply

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