Chance Encounter

April 6, 2016 at 10:14 am 28 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 8 April 2016

 J. Hardy Carroll
Photo Credit: J. Hardy Carroll

After a chance encounter, Brian and Ashley knew they’d own the night.

He was a homeless veteran who just returned from Afghanistan.

She was a runaway.

In a dim-lit corner of an abandoned building, they sat and talked and shared a joint.

Brian was glad to be out of the war.

Ashley had it with her stepdad who tried to rape her.

Soon they started making out.

“Ashley, if you ask me to stop now, I can’t.”

She didn’t say a word and let passion take over.

At dawn, they parted ways unsure of what the new day would bring.

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28 Comments Add your own

  • 1. wmqcolby  |  April 6, 2016 at 2:38 pm

    I think you wanted to say “take over” instead of “took.”

    Hmmm. I wonder how they met in the first place. You put a lot of stuff in those characters. I’m happy you focused on the people instead of the house. Five out of five roofing nails! 😀 Nice work this week, Plaridel!

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    • 2. plaridel  |  April 6, 2016 at 8:12 pm

      kent:

      duly corrected. thank you for being my second pair of eyes. 🙂

      Reply
  • 3. Sandra  |  April 6, 2016 at 11:30 pm

    Sensitively done, enjoyed your piece.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  April 7, 2016 at 9:22 am

      sandra:

      thank you. i’m glad i was able to fit it in 100 words. 🙂

      Reply
  • 5. rochellewisoff  |  April 7, 2016 at 4:12 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    You’ve just written a novel in 100 words. Applause.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 6. plaridel  |  April 7, 2016 at 9:22 am

      rochelle:

      what a pleasant compliment. i deeply appreciate it.

      Reply
  • 7. mickwynn2013  |  April 7, 2016 at 4:53 am

    Agreed sensitively done.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  April 7, 2016 at 9:21 am

      mick:

      thank you for your reading as always. deeply appreciated.

      Reply
  • 9. draliman  |  April 7, 2016 at 5:07 am

    Quite a common occurrence I bet, though circumstances vary. Nice piece!

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    • 10. plaridel  |  April 7, 2016 at 9:21 am

      draliman:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 11. Mike  |  April 7, 2016 at 1:51 pm

    I hope that the parting of the ways is only temporary. This was a good piece to read

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    • 12. plaridel  |  April 8, 2016 at 10:39 am

      mike:

      who knows? that would be a happy endiing, indeed.

      Reply
  • 13. ansumani  |  April 7, 2016 at 6:31 pm

    Both don’t like to carry any baggage it seems – their mental baggage heavy enough. Nice one.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  April 8, 2016 at 10:38 am

      ansumani:

      you’re right. under the circumstances, they have to travel light.

      Reply
  • 15. rgayer55  |  April 8, 2016 at 4:05 am

    Excellent piece. I’m glad they found comfort, even if it was temporary, with each other.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  April 8, 2016 at 10:38 am

      russell:

      for them, the memory of that night would last a long time.

      Reply
  • 17. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  April 8, 2016 at 5:45 am

    Wonderful.. somehow i think they each gave the other what they needed to get on alone… but somehow I hope they will connect again.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  April 8, 2016 at 10:38 am

      björn:

      it’s really a blessing to find someone who’d listen and see you as a person even if it’s only for a moment.

      Reply
  • 19. Dreamer of Dreams  |  April 8, 2016 at 7:45 am

    What an interesting, moving story! It could become a longer piece, I think. The house seems to be the witness to their tryst.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  April 8, 2016 at 10:37 am

      vijaya:

      actually, it took sometime to condense the story to 100 words. thank you.

      Reply
  • 21. gahlearner  |  April 8, 2016 at 9:51 am

    That’s a great glimpse into two uprooted people’s life. I hope they’ll be able to find more comfort than such brief encounters. Great story.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  April 8, 2016 at 10:40 am

      gahlearner:

      if anything, it was a good start.

      Reply
  • 23. Amy Reese  |  April 9, 2016 at 2:43 pm

    Very realistic take, Plaridel. LIfe is so tentative for them but at least they had some solace spending a night together. What a tough life. Nice one!

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    • 24. plaridel  |  April 10, 2016 at 7:11 pm

      amy:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 25. madamewriter  |  April 10, 2016 at 12:25 pm

    Excellent characterization. Interesting story, well done!

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    • 26. plaridel  |  April 10, 2016 at 7:11 pm

      madamewriter:

      what a great compliment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 27. patriciaruthsusan  |  April 12, 2016 at 3:27 am

    Good description of two confused people. I hope they find help before they really mess up their lives. It’s dangerous on the streets. Well done, Plaridel. —- Suzanne

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    • 28. plaridel  |  April 13, 2016 at 2:04 pm

      suzanne:

      there are many like them out on the streets. they need all the help they could get.

      Reply

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