The Break-Up

May 11, 2016 at 1:51 pm 47 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 13 May 2016

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Photo Credit: C. E. Ayr

Ella and I went to the same high school where she was an exchange student.

Following our graduation, we joined our classmates to celebrate at the skating arena.

She didn’t skate and neither did I so we just sat and reminisced and watched our friends enjoying themselves on the ice.

Ella was going back to New Zealand that weekend.

We broke up believing that a long distance relationship wouldn’t work for us.

“Remember me.”

“I promise,” I said as we were leaving the place.

She smiled the way I’d always remember her, turned around, and headed to the waiting car.

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  • 1. wmqcolby  |  May 11, 2016 at 5:32 pm

    Awww, gee. That’s rough. Young love and expectations cancelled by long distances. Well, like they say in Spanish — “Amor de lejos, es de pendejos.” “Love that’s far away is of stupidity.” Oh well.

    Great story, Plaridel. Keep ’em coming!

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    • 2. plaridel  |  May 12, 2016 at 10:18 am

      kent:

      we wanted to believe otherwise, but that spanish saying is right on the money.

      Reply
      • 3. wmqcolby  |  May 12, 2016 at 12:11 pm

        Yeah, I found that out a few times myself.

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        • 4. plaridel  |  May 12, 2016 at 1:34 pm

          kent:

          but you did survive and that a good thing. πŸ™‚

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          • 5. wmqcolby  |  May 12, 2016 at 3:19 pm

            Yes. Always. πŸ™‚

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            • 6. plaridel  |  May 14, 2016 at 12:21 pm

              kent:

              glad to hear that. πŸ™‚

              Reply
  • 7. mickwynn2013  |  May 12, 2016 at 12:32 am

    That is the problem of distance. Being realistic there’s no point trying to hold on

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    • 8. plaridel  |  May 12, 2016 at 10:17 am

      mick:

      i agree.

      Reply
  • 9. misskzebra  |  May 12, 2016 at 2:28 am

    Aw, that’s sad.

    Btw, I think “enjoyed” might be better as “enjoying”, in the third paragraph. πŸ™‚

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    • 10. plaridel  |  May 12, 2016 at 10:17 am

      misskzebra:

      thank you for bringing that up. but do you mean the other way around? originally, i did write “enjoyed” in that sentence. after reading your comment, however, i changed it to “enjoying” as it sounded much better. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 11. draliman  |  May 12, 2016 at 4:52 am

    Quite sad. There are long-distance relationships and then there are other-side-of-the-world relationships. I guess they made the right choice.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  May 12, 2016 at 10:16 am

      draliman:

      under the circumstances, it was the right decision.

      Reply
  • 13. gahlearner  |  May 12, 2016 at 5:54 am

    A beautiful snippet of life. He could have proposed.

    Reply
    • 14. plaridel  |  May 12, 2016 at 10:16 am

      gahlearner:

      too young with so much life ahead of them.

      Reply
  • 15. oldentimes  |  May 12, 2016 at 11:59 am

    as true as love is at seventeen or so, they made a fine choice

    Reply
    • 16. plaridel  |  May 12, 2016 at 1:32 pm

      oldentimes:

      maybe if they’re really meant for each other, they’d cross path again.

      Reply
      • 17. oldentimes  |  May 12, 2016 at 2:09 pm

        More than likely πŸ˜‰

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        • 18. plaridel  |  May 14, 2016 at 12:21 pm

          oldentimes:

          who knows? πŸ™‚

          Reply
  • 19. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  May 12, 2016 at 4:45 pm

    Very sweet and realistic.

    Reply
    • 20. plaridel  |  May 14, 2016 at 12:21 pm

      dawn:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 21. Keith's Ramblings  |  May 13, 2016 at 2:46 am

    Absence makes the heart grow fonder! True love will never be diminished by distance. Nice one..

    Visit Keith’s Ramblings

    Reply
    • 22. plaridel  |  May 14, 2016 at 12:20 pm

      keith:

      who really knows what the future brings…

      Reply
  • 23. ansumani  |  May 13, 2016 at 6:36 am

    Looks like he kept his promise πŸ™‚ Nice one.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  May 14, 2016 at 12:20 pm

      ansumani:

      that would be a happy ending. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 25. Perry Block (@PerryBlock)  |  May 13, 2016 at 2:45 pm

    Kind of sad but lovely and real. Liked it!

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    • 26. plaridel  |  May 14, 2016 at 12:20 pm

      perry:

      you’re very kind. thank you.

      Reply
  • 27. spicedmullings  |  May 14, 2016 at 9:12 pm

    Cute!
    Accepting reality and not building wistful dreams!

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    • 28. plaridel  |  May 15, 2016 at 2:42 pm

      sabina:

      i agree totally.

      Reply
  • 29. d3athlily  |  May 15, 2016 at 2:19 pm

    Long distance can be done, but it is so tasking on a relationship. It is definitely more prudent to go your separate ways. Timeless piece nonetheless! ☺

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    • 30. plaridel  |  May 15, 2016 at 2:42 pm

      melony:

      yes, i think it leads to me more heartaches.

      Reply
  • 31. rosemawrites  |  May 16, 2016 at 1:00 am

    the simplicity of the way you tell the story made it more appealing and heartfelt. πŸ™‚ oh, young love.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  May 17, 2016 at 10:54 am

      rosema:

      that’s very encouraging. thank you. πŸ™‚

      Reply
      • 33. rosemawrites  |  May 17, 2016 at 7:16 pm

        you are most welcome! πŸ™‚

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        • 34. plaridel  |  May 17, 2016 at 11:16 pm

          rosema:

          that made me feel good. πŸ™‚

          Reply
  • 37. rochellewisoff  |  May 16, 2016 at 5:38 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Sweet, sad and realistic. Perhaps they’ll find a way though. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 38. plaridel  |  May 17, 2016 at 10:54 am

      rochelle:

      maybe in another life…

      Reply
  • 39. Amy Reese  |  May 16, 2016 at 12:01 pm

    Oh, I want to see them skate together, holding hands! Maybe he can visit her next. Sweet story, Plaridel.

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    • 40. plaridel  |  May 17, 2016 at 10:54 am

      amy:

      that would have been awesome. but…

      Reply
  • 41. patriciaruthsusan  |  May 17, 2016 at 12:21 pm

    A very bittersweet memory, Plaridel. I would guess it happens often that way. It’s the way life is sometimes. Well written. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • 42. plaridel  |  May 17, 2016 at 11:15 pm

      suzanne:

      sadly, the timing just wasn’t right for them.

      Reply
  • 43. Dreamer of Dreams  |  May 17, 2016 at 11:11 pm

    A sweet and gentle story, with overtones of sadness and regret. I’m sorry that happened, but as breakups go, that was beautifully done. Who knows? You might run into each other again in propitious circumstances.

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    • 44. plaridel  |  May 17, 2016 at 11:16 pm

      vijaya:

      yes, hope springs eternal. if not in this life, maybe in the next one. πŸ™‚

      Reply
      • 45. Dreamer of Dreams  |  May 17, 2016 at 11:17 pm

        πŸ™‚
        Life is long. You never know. You story might send out the ripples which will touch that shore.

        Reply

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