Never Again

June 1, 2016 at 4:40 pm 31 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 3 June 2016

 Piya Singh
Photo Credit: Piya Singh

Working on a cruise ship, Ahmed was away from home for months at a time.

With rumors of civil war escalating, his wife and daughter begged him not to go back anymore, but money was good, so he just ignored them.

Ahmed was at sea when the rebels overran their village and it took weeks of intense fighting before government forces recaptured it back.

When he returned, the sight of their ruined house brought him to his knees.

“We’re so lucky to be alive,” his wife said.

“Never again,” Ahmed sobbed unabashedly, “never again will I leave my family behind.”

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31 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Dreamer of Dreams  |  June 1, 2016 at 11:25 pm

    Very moving, well-narrated story. Glad that his family was safe, at least.

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  • 4. maria  |  June 1, 2016 at 11:45 pm

    Ooh, that’s a tough-earned realization at the end. Still, I’m happy his family is safe.

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    • 5. plaridel  |  June 2, 2016 at 10:20 am

      maria:

      hopefully, he learned his lesson.

      Reply
  • 6. creatingahome  |  June 2, 2016 at 12:20 am

    Ohh that I was a lucky escape.

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    • 7. plaridel  |  June 2, 2016 at 10:20 am

      creatingahome:

      i agree. lt could have been a different ending.

      Reply
  • 8. draliman  |  June 2, 2016 at 2:32 am

    The lure of money. He’s learnt his lesson, I’m glad his family survived.

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    • 9. plaridel  |  June 2, 2016 at 10:19 am

      draliman:

      they were the lucky ones.

      Reply
  • 10. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  June 2, 2016 at 12:15 pm

    I’m so glad that his family survived… and maybe with the money he can rebuild his home.

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    • 11. plaridel  |  June 2, 2016 at 11:03 pm

      björn:

      in this case, he was very fortunate. yes, he could rebuild their home.

      Reply
  • 12. Amy Reese  |  June 2, 2016 at 2:13 pm

    Money isn’t everything. I’m glad he found that out and didn’t lose them. Moving story, Plaridel.

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    • 13. plaridel  |  June 2, 2016 at 11:03 pm

      amy:

      money isn’t everything — that’s very true.

      Reply
  • 14. cheesecake  |  June 3, 2016 at 12:29 am

    thinking of a different twist: they are now talking as wandering souls. 🙂

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    • 15. plaridel  |  June 4, 2016 at 9:40 am

      cheesecake:

      what a great idea. thanks. 🙂

      Reply
  • 16. mickwynn2013  |  June 3, 2016 at 3:15 am

    Moving story. He’s lucky only to have lost his home, hope he realises it wasn’t that important compared to what he could have lost

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  • 18. rgayer55  |  June 3, 2016 at 3:22 am

    You did a good job of conveying his emotions. After an experience like that he could never leave home without being weighed down by guilt and fear.

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    • 19. plaridel  |  June 4, 2016 at 9:39 am

      russell:

      from the looks of it, he’s a changed man.

      Reply
  • 20. ansumani  |  June 3, 2016 at 4:01 am

    Unfortunately it takes war and destruction for some people to understand what’s important in life. Nicely written.

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    • 21. plaridel  |  June 4, 2016 at 9:39 am

      ansumani:

      that’s the sad truth for some people.

      Reply
  • 22. wmqcolby  |  June 4, 2016 at 5:56 am

    Wonderful writing, Plaridel, just wonderful. You captured a lot in 100 words.

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    • 23. plaridel  |  June 4, 2016 at 9:39 am

      kent:

      it’s quite generous of you. thank you. 🙂

      Reply
  • 24. rochellewisoff  |  June 4, 2016 at 3:15 pm

    Dear Plaridel,

    I’m so glad you didn’t kill off Ahmed’s family. Well done, full of emotion.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 25. plaridel  |  June 5, 2016 at 12:27 pm

      rochelle:

      saved at the last minute. 🙂

      Reply
  • 26. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  June 5, 2016 at 7:56 am

    He was lucky he still had a family.

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    • 27. plaridel  |  June 5, 2016 at 12:29 pm

      dawn:

      he was so lucky, indeed.

      Reply
  • 28. gahlearner  |  June 7, 2016 at 6:12 am

    Oh how sad, despite the happy outcome. People are forced to work away from home to get a decent income, and then they have the added risk of losing family and home in troubled times. Let’s hope he finds a job where he lives. I think he’s between a rock and a hard place.

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    • 29. plaridel  |  June 7, 2016 at 3:01 pm

      gahlearner:

      he’s moving his family out to the west when he gets the chance.

      Reply
  • 30. Dale  |  June 7, 2016 at 7:48 am

    I was so afraid he would come back to no more family left! Well done, Plaridel!

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    • 31. plaridel  |  June 7, 2016 at 3:00 pm

      dale:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it. 🙂

      Reply

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