A Short Reprieve

June 8, 2016 at 2:32 pm 33 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 10 June 2016

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Douglas M. MacIlroy
Photo Credit: Douglas M. MacIlroy

The Reaper was watching him closely. It was supposed to be his last day on earth. Could it somehow be a mistake?

Josh was a bad dude leading a gang breaking into homes in the neighborhood.

He was in his room trying on his latest find when a stray bullet hit him from across the street.

When he regained consciousness, he was relieved to find himself in the hospital.

“Thank goodness, I thought Iโ€™ve died,โ€ he told his mom sitting by his bedside.

“Not yet,” the Reaper quipped as if Josh could hear him. “Wait until the clock strikes twelve.”

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  • 1. TraceyDelaplainMD.com  |  June 8, 2016 at 4:10 pm

    That’s much worse than, “Just wait until your father gets home!” My Mom used to threaten us with severe punishments that never happened when Dad got home. This reminds me of those days.

    Reply
    • 2. plaridel  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:13 pm

      tracey:

      those were the days, indeed. you’ve got a great dad.

      Reply
  • 3. draliman  |  June 9, 2016 at 12:45 am

    Just a temporary reprieve, then. Nice story!

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    • 4. plaridel  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:13 pm

      draliman:

      yes, just enough time to enjoy his last meal. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 5. wmqcolby  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:28 am

    Ooh! Ominous! Fine work. I like the midnight touch.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:12 pm

      kent:

      thank you. i had fun writing it. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
      • 7. wmqcolby  |  June 9, 2016 at 5:12 pm

        I could tell. It’s great when that happens!

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        • 8. plaridel  |  June 10, 2016 at 10:13 pm

          kent:

          glad it happens even if it’s only once in a while. ๐Ÿ™‚

          Reply
      • 9. rgayer55  |  June 10, 2016 at 12:50 pm

        Amen to that. ๐Ÿ™‚

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        • 10. plaridel  |  June 10, 2016 at 10:12 pm

          russell:

          thank you.

          Reply
  • 11. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:55 am

    Maybe he has just a couple of hours to do good… that would be an excellent start of a book.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:12 pm

      bjรถrn:

      hmmm… that’s an idea.:)

      Reply
  • 13. gahlearner  |  June 9, 2016 at 7:03 am

    Oooh, scary. And funny. I like the new one better. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • 14. plaridel  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:11 pm

      gahlearner:

      i guess second time’s the charm. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 15. michael1148humphris  |  June 9, 2016 at 12:02 pm

    I was wondering why a stray bullet. Then I got it. ๐Ÿ˜Š

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    • 16. plaridel  |  June 9, 2016 at 4:11 pm

      michael:

      he happened to live in a tough neighborhood. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 17. Sandra  |  June 10, 2016 at 2:05 am

    The Reaper likes his deferred gratification, it seems. Nicely done.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  June 10, 2016 at 10:13 pm

      sandra:

      he knows his time. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 19. rochellewisoff  |  June 10, 2016 at 4:23 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    As I’ve said before, you’ve improved as a writer. I’m glad you found the shift key. ๐Ÿ˜‰ The Reaper’s a nice touch.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 20. plaridel  |  June 10, 2016 at 10:13 pm

      rochelle:

      that’s very generous of you. thank you. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 21. rgayer55  |  June 10, 2016 at 12:51 pm

    Sound like fate caught up with him after all. I love the way you started and ended with the Reaper. Great job.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  June 10, 2016 at 10:12 pm

      russell:

      the reaper was an after thought. glad it worked for you. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 23. liz young  |  June 11, 2016 at 9:17 am

    The clock striking twelve is a powerful image that runs through many a story – well done.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  June 12, 2016 at 8:29 pm

      liz:

      thank you. i’m glad it worked. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 25. Perry Block (@PerryBlock)  |  June 12, 2016 at 12:17 am

    Well, any extra time is good time!,

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    • 26. plaridel  |  June 12, 2016 at 8:29 pm

      perry:

      i agree. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply
  • 27. creatingahome  |  June 12, 2016 at 10:00 am

    Oh dear, poor fellow.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  June 12, 2016 at 8:31 pm

      creatingahome:

      sadly, it was his time. no opportunity to mend his ways.

      Reply
  • 30. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  June 13, 2016 at 4:34 am

    This is good!

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    • 31. plaridel  |  June 13, 2016 at 3:59 pm

      dawn:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you.

      Reply
  • 32. patriciaruthsusan  |  June 15, 2016 at 12:18 am

    Well, at least he got to say, “Goodbye”. I like both stories. Each is good in its own way. Well written, Plaridel. ๐Ÿ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • 33. plaridel  |  June 15, 2016 at 9:54 am

      suzanne:

      glad you liked both of them. thank you. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Reply

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