The Roof Over Their Heads

November 9, 2016 at 10:41 am 34 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 11 November 2016

Sandra Crook
Photo Credit: Sandra Crook

Amelia was at the local bar waiting for a call.

As the eldest in the family, she worked hard to keep the roof over their heads after their father died. Still, Amelia often fell short.

She learned the hospital wouldn’t admit her brother, who was shot, without a huge deposit.

Amelia decided to sell her body to come up with the money.

After tonight, she would break up with her boyfriend. She knew she would no longer be worthy of his love.

The phone rang, but it wasn’t the call she was expecting.

“Your brother is dead,” her mother said.

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  • 1. rochellewisoff  |  November 9, 2016 at 11:09 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    That certainly had an ugly twist at the end. Poor Amelia.



    • 2. plaridel  |  November 9, 2016 at 3:08 pm


      she’s saved this time. i don’t know about tomorrow.

  • 3. Iain Kelly  |  November 9, 2016 at 11:14 am

    That’s a depressing tale. Poor Amelia. Well written though.

    • 4. plaridel  |  November 9, 2016 at 3:07 pm


      sadly, it’s a story repeated many times in developing countries where daughters are treated like commodities.

  • 5. FabricatingFiction  |  November 9, 2016 at 11:21 am

    Oh no – poor Amelia. Perhaps she can stay with her boyfriend now though?

    • 6. plaridel  |  November 9, 2016 at 3:07 pm


      but of course. 🙂

  • 7. ellenbest24  |  November 9, 2016 at 11:37 am

    Oh my… saved by the bell. Great response well done.

    • 8. plaridel  |  November 9, 2016 at 3:06 pm


      it was her lucky day. 🙂

  • 9. Dale  |  November 9, 2016 at 11:54 am

    As sad as it is, she no longer has to sell herself for what feels like ungrateful people…
    By the way, I think you want to change his to her…

    • 10. plaridel  |  November 9, 2016 at 3:06 pm


      ouch! thanks for looking after me. just corrected as we speak.

      • 11. Dale  |  November 9, 2016 at 3:08 pm

        Ahhh… that’s what friends are for!

        • 12. plaridel  |  November 10, 2016 at 3:34 pm


          thanks again. 🙂

  • 13. rgayer55  |  November 10, 2016 at 3:35 am

    Pretty tough medical system. Sad about her brother, but I’m glad she didn’t have to turn to prostitution to pay his bill.

    • 14. plaridel  |  November 10, 2016 at 3:34 pm


      i guess it’s a relief in a way that her brother is in a better place now.

  • 15. draliman  |  November 10, 2016 at 4:46 am

    Well, every cloud has a silver lining I suppose though there was never going to be a “good” outcome, short of moving to a country which treats sick people without requiring tons of cash up front.

    • 16. plaridel  |  November 10, 2016 at 3:33 pm


      at least, she didn’t have to sacrifice more than necessary.

  • 17. gahlearner  |  November 10, 2016 at 6:40 am

    Poor Amelia. Caught between a rock and a hard place. Can she be relieved by the death of her brother?

    • 18. plaridel  |  November 10, 2016 at 3:33 pm


      that’s a good question. Probably not.

  • 19. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  November 10, 2016 at 2:52 pm

    How horrible to think you would need a deposit to get emergency medical treatment! Scary story!

    • 20. plaridel  |  November 10, 2016 at 3:33 pm


      in countries like the philippines, unless it’s a public hospital, a deposit is required. adding insult to injury, there aren’t many public hospitals around, and they’re usually overcrowded, so the chances of getting admitted aren’t good either.

      • 21. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  November 11, 2016 at 5:59 am

        Thank you for that explanation and reminding me pf how lucky I am to live in this screwed up country of mine. lol

        • 22. plaridel  |  November 11, 2016 at 11:46 am


          in a way, we’re indeed fortunate living in this country.

  • 23. aliciajamtaas  |  November 10, 2016 at 3:48 pm

    A sad, but well-written tale.

    • 24. plaridel  |  November 11, 2016 at 11:42 am


      a sad story, indeed.

  • 25. Sandra  |  November 11, 2016 at 1:42 am

    Very sad.

    • 26. plaridel  |  November 11, 2016 at 11:42 am


      reality sucks sometimes.

  • 27. Clare Hempstead  |  November 11, 2016 at 5:03 am

    Great story – just one thing: You said he was ‘fatally’ shot when she was trying to get him admitted to the hospital, so presumably he was already dead? Just my opinion, but I think it would be better without the word ‘fatally’. I’m glad she doesn’t have to sell herself and break up with her boyfriend. 🙂

    • 28. plaridel  |  November 11, 2016 at 11:44 am


      your point’s well-taken. corrected as we speak.

  • 29. Michael Wynn  |  November 12, 2016 at 4:43 am

    Wow, that’s one desperate lady but, fortunately saved although not in the way she would appreciate.

    • 30. plaridel  |  November 13, 2016 at 1:47 pm


      good point.

  • 31. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  November 14, 2016 at 7:43 am

    For once it seems like a dead brother is a blessing…maybe he realized her sacrifice and killed himself.

    • 32. plaridel  |  November 16, 2016 at 5:30 pm


      he died because the hospital refused to admit him.

  • 33. patriciaruthsusan  |  November 16, 2016 at 7:49 am

    That really happens. I read where a little boy died because the father had not money to pay the ambulance. How cruel people can be. Good writing, Plaridel.

    • 34. plaridel  |  November 16, 2016 at 5:29 pm


      sad to say, it happens.


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