He Had Enough

December 14, 2016 at 3:08 pm 48 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 16 December 2016

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Against the backdrop of a darkening sky, 14-year-old Peter watched the horses enjoying what would be their last meal. They were destined for the slaughterhouse in the morning.

Like the doomed horses, Peter felt trapped in the family farm. After his mom passed away, his stepdad treated him like an indentured slave and beat him occasionally.

On a whim, he opened the gate of the corral and freed the horses.

“P-e-t-e-r! What have you done?” He heard his stepdad yelling from the distance.

As the old man rushed towards him with a whip, Peter hit him hard with a shovel.

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  • 1. Christa chn  |  December 14, 2016 at 7:23 pm

    A really beating hearted mini fiction, thrilling words till the end.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  December 14, 2016 at 9:16 pm

      christa:

      it was very generous of you. thank you for your comment.

      Reply
      • 3. Christa chn  |  December 14, 2016 at 9:38 pm

        @plaridel, you’re welcome.

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        • 4. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:06 am

          christa:

          thanks again. 🙂

          Reply
  • 5. Just Me  |  December 14, 2016 at 10:49 pm

    I love the lawlessness of this. I wrote something similar on this kind of feral manner of handling things.

    https://silentfall.me/2016/10/17/a-sinister-easter-and-the-angel/

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    • 6. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:06 am

      Just Me:

      thank you for the support. it’s much appreciated.

      Reply
      • 7. Just Me  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:07 am

        My pleasure. Stop by my blog sometime. I love the company and would love your opinion. Take care!

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        • 8. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 10:55 pm

          just me:

          i did stop by, but i couldn’t get in. would try again later.

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          • 9. Just Me  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:01 pm

            Aww, thanks for trying. I’m so sorry I didn’t attend to your request sooner. It was on my mind, but I went ahead and made my blog public again today. Stop on by at your convenience and when I go private again, I will approve your request. I won’t have access to your request until I go private again, unfortunately. But it’s public, so feel free to browser at your leisure.

            I truly appreciate your effort! ❤

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            • 10. plaridel  |  December 17, 2016 at 2:03 pm

              just me:

              ok, thanks.

              Reply
  • 11. Sandra  |  December 15, 2016 at 1:10 am

    A lot of story in 100 words. Good one.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:05 am

      sandra:

      thank you. i had fun writing it.

      Reply
  • 13. Iain Kelly  |  December 15, 2016 at 1:57 am

    Go Peter! I hope he doesn’t end up in even more trouble, I imagine him riding off on the horses to freedom 🙂

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    • 14. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:05 am

      iain:

      yes, he should escape while there’s still time.

      Reply
  • 15. rgayer55  |  December 15, 2016 at 3:50 am

    I was going to suggest that Peter invite the Scot over, but it seems he’s addressed the problem quite nicely on his own. Well done.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:05 am

      russell:

      excellent idea. he still needs scot to clean up the mess. 🙂

      Reply
  • 17. draliman  |  December 15, 2016 at 4:38 am

    Freedom for everyone! If Peter makes a run for it, anyway.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:04 am

      draliman:

      he’s got no choice.

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  • 19. wmqcolby  |  December 15, 2016 at 4:54 am

    Well, HE got his just desserts, didn’t he?

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    • 20. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:04 am

      kent:

      he deserved every bit of it. 🙂

      Reply
  • 21. rochellewisoff  |  December 15, 2016 at 5:46 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I hope the jury will be lenient on Peter. It sounds like justifiable homicide to me. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 22. Leigh W. Smith  |  December 15, 2016 at 7:56 am

      Great story, Plaridel. I tend to like these ‘retribution’ stories. Your ending was delivered superbly: blunt and kind of sudden and almost indifferent. And, Rochelle, lovely photo!

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      • 23. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:03 am

        leigh:

        i take it as a great compliment. thank you.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:03 am

      rochelle:

      it’s set in the old west. he’ll likely be hanged when caught.

      Reply
  • 25. michael1148humphris  |  December 15, 2016 at 8:17 am

    Well done Peter, now get on that horse and ride. Leigh Smith is right this is a great piece of writing.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:03 am

      michael:

      he better do it fast. a posse would soon be after him.

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  • 27. FabricatingFiction  |  December 15, 2016 at 11:36 am

    Great choice of title title he certainly had had enough!

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    • 28. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 10:54 pm

      louise:

      if you say so… actually, i was stumped. i couldn’t figure out what title to give it.

      Reply
  • 29. Joy Pixley  |  December 15, 2016 at 6:35 pm

    Whew, what is it about a photo of horses in the snow that makes everyone want to write stories about violence and cruelty? At least this guy saved the horses, for the time being.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  December 15, 2016 at 10:54 pm

      joy:

      it must be the weather. 🙂

      Reply
  • 31. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  December 16, 2016 at 12:38 pm

    This is one of your best.. there is something grim in growing up like that. There comes a day when you have been beaten one time to many

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    • 32. plaridel  |  December 17, 2016 at 2:02 pm

      björn:

      thank you. it made writing it worthwhile.

      Reply
  • 33. Alicia Jamtaas  |  December 16, 2016 at 3:37 pm

    He’d really had enough. I’m glad he let the horses go and I’m glad he freed himself although I fear more trouble in the end.

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    • 34. plaridel  |  December 17, 2016 at 2:02 pm

      alicia:

      he had no choice. at least, he did something about it.

      Reply
  • 35. stillwatersrundark  |  December 17, 2016 at 11:45 am

    I absolutley HATE slaughterhouses. I have saved a few from that myself. So i can relate to the horses.Inhumane…I am a true animal lover always.
    i love your stories. Keep them up!
    BTW, I started writing my blog again. 😉 And i hope it gets somewhere.

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    • 36. plaridel  |  December 17, 2016 at 2:04 pm

      stillwatersrundark:

      great! i’ll take a look of your blog. 🙂

      Reply
  • 39. Michael Wynn  |  December 18, 2016 at 2:35 am

    Well done Peter, things can only get better from here. Can’t they?

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    • 40. plaridel  |  December 18, 2016 at 3:17 pm

      mick:

      not until he’s able to escape to mexico far from the reach of the posse running after him.

      Reply
  • 41. gahlearner  |  December 18, 2016 at 1:46 pm

    Maybe Peter can take the horses and escape to Mexico… This is great, gritty writing, Plaridel. I love it.

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    • 42. plaridel  |  December 18, 2016 at 3:15 pm

      gahlearner:

      it’d awesome if somehow he makes to mexico.

      Reply
  • 43. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  December 18, 2016 at 11:30 pm

    This story packed a wallop!

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    • 44. plaridel  |  December 19, 2016 at 6:47 pm

      dawn:

      lots of details were left out to fit the 100-word requirement. i’m glad it still worked for you.

      Reply
  • 45. Indira  |  December 19, 2016 at 12:01 pm

    Nice one.

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    • 46. plaridel  |  December 19, 2016 at 6:46 pm

      indira:

      thank you.

      Reply
  • 47. Siobhan McNamara  |  December 19, 2016 at 3:07 pm

    I think anyone who ever suffered oppression would have liked to be right there with Peter swinging that shovel

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    • 48. plaridel  |  December 19, 2016 at 6:45 pm

      siobhan:

      it’s human nature, i guess.

      Reply

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