Broken

February 15, 2017 at 4:57 pm 45 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 17 February 2017

Liz Young

Photo Credit: Liz Young

Friends at church warned Abby about him. This guy Blake was a bad dude and spelled trouble, they said. But it didn’t matter. She thought that she could change him.

Abby was drawn to him like a moth to the flame. She was infatuated by his good looks and devil-may-care attitude.

After attending a rock concert, they went to the park to chill out before calling it a night. Abby wasn’t able to resist his advances. Once it was over, Blake left her broken on the grass where they lay. She felt like trash that would never be whole again.

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  • 1. handmadejewelryhaven  |  February 15, 2017 at 5:52 pm

    Wow. What do you say after reading that…

    – Lisa

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    • 2. plaridel  |  February 15, 2017 at 9:05 pm

      lisa:

      i know. i’m dumbfounded myself. 🙂

      Reply
  • 3. Iain Kelly  |  February 16, 2017 at 1:07 am

    Nice metaphorical use of the prompt.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:15 pm

      iain:

      thank you for reading as usuaL

      Reply
  • 5. Keith's Ramblings  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:41 am

    Oh wow. I’m speechless! Clever.

    Click to read my story!

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    • 6. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:14 pm

      keith:

      you’re too generous. thank you.

      Reply
  • 7. wmqcolby  |  February 16, 2017 at 3:04 am

    Good cautionary tale/parable on dating the wrong guy. One never knows. Excellent take on the prompt. Many have been doing well with this one.

    Nice work this week, Plaridel.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:14 pm

      kent:

      it’s an irony the most girls find bad guys irresistible. 🙂

      Reply
  • 9. rochellewisoff  |  February 16, 2017 at 3:53 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Stunning piece. I don’t know of any woman who’s been successful at changing a man, or visa versa really.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 10. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:13 pm

      rochelle:

      i agree, but some believe in miracles. 🙂

      Reply
  • 11. draliman  |  February 16, 2017 at 6:19 am

    A chilling and cautionary tale.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:13 pm

      draliman:

      hopefully, she’d learned from it.

      Reply
  • 13. James  |  February 16, 2017 at 6:55 am

    Certainly a tale with a long history.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:13 pm

      james:

      you bet it was.

      Reply
  • 15. Dale  |  February 16, 2017 at 8:57 am

    You know, many of us have fallen under the wrong guy’s spell for the wrong reasons. We rarely do NOT feel like trash…

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    • 16. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:11 pm

      dale:

      she felt like trash because of her religious upbringing.

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      • 17. Dale  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:12 pm

        Yes, I realise that. Poor thing.

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        • 18. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:21 pm

          dale:

          she should learn to be on the safe side from now on by dating boring nerdy guys. 🙂

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          • 19. Dale  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:30 pm

            Oh…trust me, I have. That was way back in my youth when I wasn’t so smart!

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            • 20. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 6:21 pm

              dale:

              yes, but we do live and learn. 🙂

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              • 21. Dale  |  February 16, 2017 at 6:22 pm

                😊

                Reply
  • 22. Liz Young  |  February 16, 2017 at 8:57 am

    She should have listened to her friends – trying to change a man is a non-starter.

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    • 23. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:11 pm

      liz:

      true, but too late now.

      Reply
  • 24. FabricatingFiction  |  February 16, 2017 at 9:09 am

    Heartbreaking!

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    • 25. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:10 pm

      louise:

      just a bump in the road. she’d recover.

      Reply
  • 26. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover  |  February 16, 2017 at 1:10 pm

    Such a tragic story. The last line broke my heart.

    Reply
    • 27. plaridel  |  February 16, 2017 at 2:10 pm

      Life Lessons of a Dog Lover:

      unfortunately, it happens in real life.

      Reply
  • 28. Christine Goodnough  |  February 16, 2017 at 11:01 pm

    Yep. That’s just how it works. Life’s lessons can be painful but someday she’ll thank God he left. Good one.

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    • 29. plaridel  |  February 17, 2017 at 2:05 pm

      christine:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 30. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  February 17, 2017 at 1:43 pm

    A story told so many times… too many sordid ends in the wake of men like him

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    • 31. plaridel  |  February 17, 2017 at 2:03 pm

      björn:

      it’s a tragedy that many women fall for them.

      Reply
  • 32. Alicia Jamtaas  |  February 17, 2017 at 2:06 pm

    Ouch. The line about feeling like trash really hit home. Kudos.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  February 17, 2017 at 3:00 pm

      alicia:

      thank you. deeply appreciated.

      Reply
  • 34. Michael Wynn  |  February 18, 2017 at 2:16 am

    Extremely well written, you’ve certainly excelled yourself this eek, excellent take on the prompt

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    • 35. plaridel  |  February 18, 2017 at 2:36 pm

      mick:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 36. gahlearner  |  February 18, 2017 at 12:46 pm

    Infatuation is blinding, can’t be helped. Very harsh and realistic story, well done.

    Reply
    • 37. plaridel  |  February 18, 2017 at 2:35 pm

      gahlearner:

      yes, it’s a weakness that only but a few can resist.

      Reply
  • 38. yuhublogger  |  February 19, 2017 at 2:44 am

    Wow! Broken she lay… Oh… This is sad but very well written. Many girls feel they can change their man.. I don’t understand why!

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    • 39. plaridel  |  February 19, 2017 at 6:18 pm

      yuhu:

      i don’t understand either. 🙂

      Reply
  • 40. Tamal  |  February 20, 2017 at 11:58 am

    great story. Interestingly I think unknowingly I wrote about the boys perspective. I don’t know how that happened. 🙂

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    • 41. plaridel  |  February 21, 2017 at 9:49 am

      tamal:

      thank you for your comment. i read your story and you did a good job. 🙂

      Reply
  • 42. Emily Livingstone  |  February 21, 2017 at 11:06 am

    Yikes. A very sad story, though I think many feel that way at some time or other.

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    • 43. plaridel  |  February 21, 2017 at 4:55 pm

      emily:

      it’s just a bump in the road. she’ll get over it.

      Reply
  • 44. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  February 21, 2017 at 11:29 am

    Sad.

    Reply
    • 45. plaridel  |  February 21, 2017 at 4:55 pm

      dawn:

      i know.

      Reply

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