The Hero

March 1, 2017 at 10:31 am 48 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 3 March 2017

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

“Don’t let Anna come visit me,” Charles told his daughter Elsa.

“But dad. You‘re her hero.”

“Dammit. I don’t want her to remember me like this.”

Anna was his granddaughter. A retired former Marine, he taught her to be a fighter, to believe in herself, and to face her disability head on.

Confined in the ICU with tubes inserted in his body, he was a shell of his former self. He could no longer be strong for her.

But Anna couldn’t be denied. She went to see him anyway. She was there for him holding his hand as he passed.

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  • 1. Iain Kelly  |  March 1, 2017 at 11:08 am

    Touching scene, a shame he felt he didn’t want her to see him like that, I’m glad she was determined enough to see him in the end. Nice one.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  March 1, 2017 at 7:32 pm

      iain:

      thank you for the nice comment. deeply appreciate it.

      Reply
  • 3. Snow's Fissures and Fractures  |  March 1, 2017 at 1:26 pm

    That really touched me, nicely done.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  March 1, 2017 at 7:31 pm

      lora:

      too much details left out. i’m glad it still worked. thank you.

      Reply
  • 5. Dale  |  March 1, 2017 at 1:39 pm

    And I am so very glad she did! As I’m sure he did as he went on to the other dimension…

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    • 6. plaridel  |  March 1, 2017 at 7:31 pm

      dale:

      when i looked at this week’s picture prompt, my first thought was that of crossing over. yes, i’m glad she did see him and vice versa before he passed.

      Reply
  • 7. michael1148humphris  |  March 1, 2017 at 2:44 pm

    Dying is part of life, so glad he let her see him.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  March 1, 2017 at 7:30 pm

      michael:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 9. Magaly Guerrero  |  March 1, 2017 at 5:55 pm

    Bittersweet. I am glad she got to see him. I hope he was not ashamed of his condition in the end.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  March 1, 2017 at 7:29 pm

      magaly:

      i believed he died peacefully.

      Reply
  • 11. Rommy  |  March 1, 2017 at 6:01 pm

    I’m glad in the end her love was stronger than his pride.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  March 1, 2017 at 7:33 pm

      rommy:

      it was very perceptive of you. thank you.

      Reply
  • 13. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  March 1, 2017 at 9:15 pm

    I think Anna had grown strong enough.. great morale.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  March 2, 2017 at 9:25 am

      björn:

      he taught her well.

      Reply
  • 15. draliman  |  March 2, 2017 at 4:49 am

    I understand where he was coming from, but I’m glad Anna came and I bet he was, too.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  March 2, 2017 at 9:25 am

      draliman:

      yes, i’m glad it ended that way.

      Reply
  • 17. rochellewisoff  |  March 2, 2017 at 5:42 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    The greatest of love (not romance 😉 ) stories. Nicely done, although shouldn’t it be ‘his’ in the first sentence?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 18. plaridel  |  March 2, 2017 at 9:24 am

      rochelle:

      oops! always makes that mistake. corrected as we speak. in my native language, it happens that male/female pronoun is gender neutral. thanks again.

      Reply
  • 19. FabricatingFiction  |  March 2, 2017 at 8:44 am

    This is such a moving piece.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  March 2, 2017 at 9:24 am

      louise:

      thank you. i’m glad it worked somewhat.

      Reply
  • 21. Alicia Jamtaas  |  March 2, 2017 at 12:12 pm

    I love the strength of the granddaughter. Nicely done.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  March 3, 2017 at 5:34 pm

      alicia:

      thanks to grandpa.

      Reply
  • 23. Joy Pixley  |  March 2, 2017 at 8:15 pm

    Very touching. Looks like she learned to face things head on after all.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  March 3, 2017 at 5:34 pm

      joy:

      he was a great teacher.

      Reply
  • 25. rgayer55  |  March 3, 2017 at 3:35 am

    My father was a shell of himself at passing too, but that’s not how I remember him. He visits me occasionally in dreams and is vibrant and witty. You captured this brilliantly.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  March 3, 2017 at 5:33 pm

      russell:

      there must be life after death. it must be his way of saying he’s alright.

      Reply
  • 27. jellico84  |  March 3, 2017 at 11:09 am

    So very sad. Very beautifully written and true of so many. 😦 ❤

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    • 28. plaridel  |  March 3, 2017 at 5:32 pm

      jelli:

      you’re very kind. thank you.

      Reply
  • 29. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover  |  March 3, 2017 at 12:28 pm

    Loved the idea of the two fighters. Well done.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  March 3, 2017 at 5:32 pm

      life lessons of a dog lover:

      isn’t it great? thank you.

      Reply
  • 31. gahlearner  |  March 3, 2017 at 2:18 pm

    Sad, but also beautiful. Anna will love him even more.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  March 3, 2017 at 5:32 pm

      gahlearner:

      i believe so.

      Reply
  • 33. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  March 3, 2017 at 4:13 pm

    Sweet story.

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    • 34. plaridel  |  March 3, 2017 at 5:31 pm

      dawn:

      thank you.

      Reply
  • 35. Michael Wynn  |  March 4, 2017 at 3:07 am

    Nicely told. He’d been there for her,now it’s her turn to be there for him

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    • 36. plaridel  |  March 5, 2017 at 3:49 pm

      mick:

      thank you for the encouraging comment. 🙂

      Reply
  • 37. Liz Young  |  March 4, 2017 at 6:34 am

    Good for her – Grandpa taught her well.

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    • 38. plaridel  |  March 5, 2017 at 3:49 pm

      liz:

      you bet. 🙂

      Reply
  • 39. yuhublogger  |  March 6, 2017 at 8:04 am

    Oh! This is so sad…. Well written. Poor grandpa.. I hope she will remember his words of strength whenever she needs it. Cheers!

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    • 40. plaridel  |  March 6, 2017 at 3:06 pm

      yuhu:

      i’m sure she will. 🙂

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      • 41. yuhublogger  |  March 6, 2017 at 7:35 pm

        Yeah! We choose to remember our loved ones in their best state of physical and mental health, don’t we? That’s what gives us strength.

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        • 42. plaridel  |  March 8, 2017 at 3:31 pm

          yuhu:

          i think that’s the best way to honor them.

          Reply
  • 44. neelwritesblog  |  March 7, 2017 at 8:47 am

    This is a very touching story. Well written, PLARIDEL.

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    • 45. plaridel  |  March 8, 2017 at 3:30 pm

      neel:

      coming from you, i take it as a great compliment. thanks.

      Reply
  • 46. magarisa  |  March 7, 2017 at 8:10 pm

    What a moving tale.

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    • 47. plaridel  |  March 8, 2017 at 3:29 pm

      magarisa:

      thank you for reading. deeply appreciated.

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      • 48. magarisa  |  March 8, 2017 at 3:53 pm

        You’re welcome, Plaridel.

        Reply

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