The Sacrifice

June 21, 2017 at 7:11 pm 47 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 23 June 2017

Ted Strutz

Photo Credit: Ted Strutz

On board the ferry, Sharina took one long last look of the island she’d always call home.

She was heading to the big city where a job awaited her. At 16, her father thought she was too young and wouldn’t let her go. But when the recruiter offered to pay 6 months of her salary in advance, he relented. It would help pay for her brother’s education.

Sensing her apprehension, the recruiter approached Sharina and put his arm around her shoulder.

“Don’t worry, sweetie,” he said in a voice that sent shivers down her spine. “I’ll take care of you.”

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47 Comments Add your own

  • 1. draliman  |  June 21, 2017 at 11:23 pm

    Urk, a sacrifice indeed. A grim future awaits.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 9:47 am

      draliman:

      hopefully, if nothing else, it’ll all be worth the sacrifice.

      Reply
  • 3. Iain Kelly  |  June 22, 2017 at 1:16 am

    Chilling, I don’t think I want to know the details of what lies in store for her.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 9:46 am

      iain:

      unfortunately, she’s not the only one. her story is repeated many times in some countries around the world.

      Reply
  • 5. kittysverses  |  June 22, 2017 at 3:53 am

    Omg, a chilly tale, but well said.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 9:46 am

      kittysverses:

      thank you for reading.

      Reply
  • 8. rgayer55  |  June 22, 2017 at 3:57 am

    I’m pretty sure I don’t like his idea of “taking care” of her.

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    • 9. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 9:46 am

      russell:

      she’s doomed.

      Reply
  • 10. jellico84  |  June 22, 2017 at 6:16 am

    I don’t have to know the outcome to let my imagination finish this… Good story, even if it is grim.

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    • 11. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 9:45 am

      jelli:

      it’s grim, indeed. the fact that her father accepted advance payment for her services made her situation worse.

      Reply
      • 12. jellico84  |  June 22, 2017 at 11:47 am

        Indeed. To me, it reads of the “white slavery” and “sex trafficking” issue. Scary in all realms. My mother often sold me out for day labor, but never anything seedy or sex related, just hard labor.

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        • 13. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 7:27 pm

          jelli:

          i guess kids who work in the family business could be considered some kind of slavery. there are also those parents of immigrants who were petitioned by their children to come to the u.s. to babysit their grandchildren and take care of the housekeeping without pay.

          Reply
          • 14. jellico84  |  June 23, 2017 at 6:01 am

            That too. Mom soldme out to clean, mostly, and usually people’s refrigerators filled with rotten food, or backed up nasty bathrooms. It was horrid. Never saw a penny reward for the work, Mom always took it and spent it on drugs.

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            • 15. plaridel  |  June 23, 2017 at 7:34 am

              jelli:

              it must be horrible. if nothing else, it made you stronger as a person.

              Reply
  • 16. rochellewisoff  |  June 22, 2017 at 6:29 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Something tells me this isn’t what Sharina signed on for. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 17. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 9:45 am

      rochelle:

      sadly, you’re right.

      Reply
  • 18. granonine  |  June 22, 2017 at 8:55 am

    Horrible man, naive father. Sad.

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    • 19. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 9:47 am

      linda:

      nothing can save her now but herself.

      Reply
      • 20. granonine  |  June 22, 2017 at 4:51 pm

        Our stories were similar this week.

        Reply
        • 21. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 7:25 pm

          linda:

          yes, i think so. 🙂 but honestly, i became aware of it only after the fact.

          Reply
  • 22. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover  |  June 22, 2017 at 3:08 pm

    Oh this was heart wrenching. Nicely done.

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    • 23. plaridel  |  June 22, 2017 at 7:25 pm

      cindy:

      thank you for your support. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 24. Keith's Ramblings  |  June 23, 2017 at 2:42 am

    I’d like to think he was being nice, but I fear not. Oh dear.

    My story – ‘An empty bottle’

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    • 25. plaridel  |  June 23, 2017 at 7:35 am

      keith:

      he was the devil in disguise.

      Reply
  • 26. wmqcolby  |  June 23, 2017 at 5:09 am

    Sent shivers down my spine, too. I was thinking army recruit and lied about her age, but, yeah. This is a pretty bad scenario.

    Great job, Plaridel.

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    • 27. plaridel  |  June 23, 2017 at 7:34 am

      kent:

      yes, she’s kind of doomed.

      Reply
  • 28. Michael Wynn  |  June 23, 2017 at 2:13 pm

    Oh no, this is going to get ugly, poor girl

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    • 29. plaridel  |  June 23, 2017 at 6:36 pm

      mick:

      sadly, you’re right.

      Reply
  • 30. michael1148humphris  |  June 23, 2017 at 3:38 pm

    I hope she outfoxes him.

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    • 31. plaridel  |  June 23, 2017 at 6:35 pm

      michael:

      hope springs eternal.

      Reply
  • 32. Alicia Jamtaas  |  June 23, 2017 at 6:04 pm

    Oh, I bet he will. What a schmuck. Well done. You said a lot without beating us over the head with it.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  June 23, 2017 at 6:35 pm

      alicia:

      he’s the scum of the earth.

      Reply
  • 34. Sarah Ann  |  June 24, 2017 at 4:12 am

    Your last line had me cringing. I hope Sharina is able to get away. Well told, with just the right amount of fear and suspense at the end.

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    • 35. plaridel  |  June 24, 2017 at 2:04 pm

      sarah ann:

      i wish there was a better ending.

      Reply
  • 36. Inside the Mind of Isadora  |  June 24, 2017 at 6:11 am

    The way this is written affords us the opportunity to create the story and it’s finality. I’m sure horror awaits this poor teen. Super write …
    Isadora 😎

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    • 37. plaridel  |  June 24, 2017 at 2:03 pm

      isadora:

      thank you for your generous comment. you’re very kind.

      Reply
  • 38. patriciaruthsusan  |  June 24, 2017 at 8:18 am

    Uh, oh. That doesn’t sound at all good. That would give me shivers too. Good writing, Plaridel. —- Suzanne

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    • 39. plaridel  |  June 24, 2017 at 2:03 pm

      suzanne:

      who knows? a fellow passenger might be able to save her from her plight.

      Reply
  • 40. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  June 24, 2017 at 10:08 am

    Ewww!

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    • 41. plaridel  |  June 24, 2017 at 2:02 pm

      dawn:

      i know. 😦

      Reply
  • 42. Mrs. Completely  |  June 24, 2017 at 11:47 am

    No no no no! Aw……poor girl. Well told but so tragic.

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    • 43. plaridel  |  June 24, 2017 at 2:02 pm

      mrs. completely:

      thank you for reading. i appreciate your comment very much.

      Reply
  • 44. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  June 24, 2017 at 1:39 pm

    I hope that she can still change her mind,

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    • 45. plaridel  |  June 24, 2017 at 2:01 pm

      björn:

      that would be tough considering the recruiter had already paid her father the equivalent of 6 months salary.

      Reply
  • 46. Dale  |  June 25, 2017 at 2:03 pm

    Dang… it’s like her father sold her… awful future ahead…

    Reply
    • 47. plaridel  |  June 27, 2017 at 9:37 am

      dale:

      i’m afraid so. 😦

      Reply

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