One From the Heart

June 28, 2017 at 2:25 pm 66 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 30 June 2017

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

With mixed emotions, David returned to the village to meet Anita who won his daughter’s heart.

He and Emily were very close. He watched her grow up, taught her to skate and rode the bike. He was there to support her when she came out of the closet.

But there was a time when he failed her. It was when she lay dying after a biking accident.

“Dad, I want to live,” she implored, and he couldn’t save her.

“I’m sorry for your loss,” Anita said.

He hugged her so tight he could feel Emily’s heart beating in her breast.

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  • 1. Iain Kelly  |  June 28, 2017 at 3:35 pm

    The worst kind of loss. Nicely done.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  June 28, 2017 at 6:24 pm

      iain:

      if anythng, transplanting her heart into Anita save the latter’s life.

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  • 3. granonine  |  June 28, 2017 at 5:33 pm

    Oh my. Lots of threads to untangle here. Excellent.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  June 28, 2017 at 6:24 pm

      linda:

      come to think of it, i must have overdone it. 🙂

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      • 5. granonine  |  June 29, 2017 at 3:36 am

        Really? Why is that? I forgot to mention–in that first paragraph you said “Anita, who had won her daughter’s heart.” Shouldn’t the pronoun have been “his”?

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        • 6. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:43 am

          linda:

          corrected as we speak. thank you for being my second pair of eyes.

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          • 7. granonine  |  June 29, 2017 at 1:05 pm

            You’re welcome. It’s the English teacher in me 🙂

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            • 8. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 2:51 pm

              linda:

              in my native language, the same pronoun is used for both sexes. that’s why i tend to make that mistake. 🙂

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              • 9. granonine  |  June 29, 2017 at 7:50 pm

                Really. And what is your native language? I’ve studied both German and Spanish, and the pronouns are different by gender, like in English.

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                • 10. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:29 pm

                  linda:

                  filipino is my native tonque. it’s one of the languages that are known for their gender neutrality.

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                  • 11. granonine  |  June 30, 2017 at 3:03 pm

                    That’s fascinating. I hope I’m not being a pest, but this is so interesting to me. Does that mean there is no equivalent in Filipino for our “he” and “she”? Would that pronoun be more like our neutral “it”?

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                    • 12. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 3:19 pm

                      linda:

                      yes, that’s true. “siya” in filipino could mean either “he is” or “she is”. 🙂

                    • 13. granonine  |  June 30, 2017 at 7:24 pm

                      That makes things a bit easier 🙂

                    • 14. plaridel  |  July 1, 2017 at 9:35 am

                      linda:

                      🙂

  • 15. Dale  |  June 28, 2017 at 8:38 pm

    Heartbreaking and heartwarming at the same time

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    • 16. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:45 am

      dale:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

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  • 17. gravadee  |  June 28, 2017 at 11:24 pm

    Such a heartbreaking tale. God Bless David

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    • 18. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:44 am

      merina:

      he’ll appreciate the sentiment. thank you.

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  • 19. kittysverses  |  June 29, 2017 at 1:08 am

    Oh my, sad yet beautifully portrayed.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:44 am

      kittysverses:

      i’m glad it appealed to you. thank you for reading.

      Reply
  • 22. Keith's Ramblings  |  June 29, 2017 at 2:50 am

    This is incredibly moving. Simply brilliant.

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    • 23. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:44 am

      keith:

      i don’t know what to say, but thank you very much.

      Reply
  • 24. draliman  |  June 29, 2017 at 6:00 am

    Very sad. I’m glad he accepted Anita in Emily’s life, though. They can help each other now.

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    • 25. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:43 am

      draliman:

      who knows? perhaps anita can fill in the void left by emily.

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  • 26. wmqcolby  |  June 29, 2017 at 6:25 am

    Wow! Wonderfully told, Plaridel. I have read and seen similar stories like these where the donors meet the family members. Every story has a uniqueness about it and this was wonderful. Great!

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    • 27. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:43 am

      kent:

      thank you for your generous comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 28. rochellewisoff  |  June 29, 2017 at 7:57 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Beautifully and subtly told. Love this!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 29. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:42 am

      rochelle:

      thank you. hopefully, not too much subtletly.

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      • 30. rochellewisoff  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:46 am

        Just the right amount. No more no less.

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        • 31. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 2:52 pm

          rochelle:

          i feel relieved. 🙂

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  • 32. Christine Goodnough  |  June 29, 2017 at 12:23 pm

    I had to read it a couple of times to get it. The word won threw me until I read the comments.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 2:51 pm

      christine:

      perhaps “claimed” would have been a better choice?

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      • 34. Christine Goodnough  |  June 29, 2017 at 5:08 pm

        Received would have been clearest. At least we’d say a person is the recipient of an organ transplant.

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        • 35. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:30 pm

          christine:

          makes sense. but then that would be too obvious, wouldn’t it? 🙂

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          • 36. Christine Goodnough  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:42 pm

            Right. And “won” works —once you know.:)

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            • 37. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 3:22 pm

              christine:

              it’s one part of writing that i enjoy. whenever the opportunity knows (which isn’t often for a beginning writer like me), i take advantage of it. 🙂

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  • 38. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover  |  June 29, 2017 at 1:42 pm

    I agree with Rochelle this was beautiful and subtle.

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    • 39. plaridel  |  June 29, 2017 at 2:50 pm

      cindy:

      awesome! and very encouraging.

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  • 40. Moon  |  June 29, 2017 at 9:31 pm

    such a well woven story! I feel for David. May he find more Emily in Anita and may she fill a pocket in the vast void .
    Beautiful story, Plaridel!

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    • 41. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:29 pm

      moon:

      i’m glad you liked it. much appreciated.

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  • 42. Fluid Phrase  |  June 29, 2017 at 10:53 pm

    Very touching! Well done!

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    • 43. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:29 pm

      fluid phrase:

      your comment is very encouraging. thank you.

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  • 44. Nan Falkner  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:06 am

    Dear Plaridel, This is a life lesson many parents have had to learn. Good job. Nan

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    • 45. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:28 pm

      nan:

      it’s very generous of you. thank you for your comment.

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  • 46. rgayer55  |  June 30, 2017 at 3:48 am

    Like Christine, the word “won” threw me until I read the comments. Once I understood, I liked the story even better. Very heartwarming.

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    • 47. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 12:28 pm

      russell:

      what an inspiring compliment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 48. Mrs. Completely  |  June 30, 2017 at 2:42 pm

    Wow! I had to read it twice because the first time I was going in a completely different direction. This was wonderful and touching.

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    • 49. plaridel  |  June 30, 2017 at 3:19 pm

      mrs. completely:

      sorry, but gotcha! 🙂

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  • 50. Sascha Darlington  |  June 30, 2017 at 6:30 pm

    Wow, I was slow on this one. I’m not alone, evidently. Well done.

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    • 51. plaridel  |  July 1, 2017 at 9:36 am

      sascha:

      i’m glad you enjoyed it. thank you for reading.

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  • 52. Liz Young  |  July 1, 2017 at 10:10 am

    So sad but uplifting too. A neat twist.

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    • 53. plaridel  |  July 2, 2017 at 12:44 pm

      liz:

      thank for your nice comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 54. Alicia Jamtaas  |  July 1, 2017 at 6:57 pm

    Goodness! That is beautiful. Kudos!!!!

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    • 55. plaridel  |  July 2, 2017 at 12:44 pm

      alicia:

      goodness! i’m flattered. thanks.

      Reply
  • 56. Michael Wynn  |  July 2, 2017 at 12:29 am

    Very sad but at least they have each other to cling to

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    • 57. plaridel  |  July 2, 2017 at 12:43 pm

      mick:

      i agree.

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  • 58. Dahlia  |  July 2, 2017 at 5:59 am

    So many layers to this story! Very well done 🙂

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    • 59. plaridel  |  July 2, 2017 at 12:43 pm

      dahlia:

      you’re very encouranging. thank you.

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  • 60. patriciaruthsusan  |  July 2, 2017 at 6:49 am

    This was both heartrending and filled with hope, Plaridel. Great ending twist. Good writing. —- Suzanne

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    • 61. plaridel  |  July 2, 2017 at 12:42 pm

      suzanne:

      what a generous comment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 62. L.E.R.T  |  July 2, 2017 at 10:18 pm

    This was heartachingly beautiful. But at least David has a part of his daughter in this world to hold on to. Well done

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    • 63. plaridel  |  July 3, 2017 at 9:14 am

      tracey:

      doctors and nurses risk their lives to save people. in a world that’s becoming highly polarized, they job becomes more dangerous. they have my highest respect.

      Reply
    • 64. plaridel  |  July 3, 2017 at 9:16 am

      varadharajan:

      your very kind. thank you.

      Reply
  • 65. amiewrites74  |  July 5, 2017 at 12:11 pm

    Nice twist at the end, I certainly didn’t see that coming. Beautiful. It is heartbreaking and hopeful at the same time.

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    • 66. plaridel  |  July 5, 2017 at 3:10 pm

      amie:

      thank you for reading. i feel honored.

      Reply

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