Grandfather’s Mansion

September 27, 2017 at 4:42 pm 41 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 27 September 2017

J Hardy Carroll

Photo Credit: J Hardy Carroll
 
What a difference a day made.

Aissa and her mother found themselves standing amidst the rubble of what used to be her late grandfather’s mansion. It was his pride and joy. Didn’t he once boast that it would last for many generations?

But it proved to be no match against the giant hurricane that descended on their village. What the heavy rain and strong winds didn’t destroy, the flash flood that followed did.

“We can rebuild,” Aissa told her mother.

“No,” she said shaking her head. “We could no longer live in a place built with earnings from illegal drugs.

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  • 1. Christine Goodnough  |  September 27, 2017 at 8:29 pm

    Hope she’s got an alternate, legitimate source of income or the temptation might be pretty strong to rely on what worked before.

    Good story.someone needed to introduce a hurricane into this picture. 🙂

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    • 2. plaridel  |  September 27, 2017 at 11:11 pm

      christine:

      the hurricane could be a blessing in disguise.

      Reply
  • 3. Iain Kelly  |  September 28, 2017 at 1:15 am

    Topical story and a surprise last line. the hurricane wiped away the sins. Nice take. Enjoyed the longer version too.

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    • 4. Iain Kelly  |  September 28, 2017 at 1:17 am

      The longer version seems to be linked to last week’s story though..?

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      • 5. plaridel  |  September 28, 2017 at 9:04 am

        iain:

        you’re so right. thanks for pointing that out. corrected as we speak.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  September 28, 2017 at 9:05 am

      iain:

      thanks to the hurricane they can move on from the past.

      Reply
  • 7. Keith's Ramblings  |  September 28, 2017 at 2:55 am

    Principals can be expensive to maintain. Time to look forward not back.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    • 8. plaridel  |  September 28, 2017 at 9:04 am

      keith:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 9. rochellewisoff  |  September 28, 2017 at 5:12 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Ouch! That took quite an unexpected twist. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 10. plaridel  |  September 28, 2017 at 9:04 am

      rochelle:

      thank you for the usual support. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 11. FabricatingFiction  |  September 28, 2017 at 5:35 am

    Unexpected twist. Maybe it’s a blessing in disguise.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  September 28, 2017 at 9:03 am

      louise:

      under the circumstances, it could well be.

      Reply
  • 13. granonine  |  September 28, 2017 at 8:48 am

    Oops. Grandpa wasn’t such a good guy.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  September 28, 2017 at 9:05 am

      linda:

      i’m afraid not.

      Reply
  • 15. Alice Audrey  |  September 28, 2017 at 4:50 pm

    Does that mean the money is all gone?

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    • 16. plaridel  |  September 29, 2017 at 9:28 am

      alice:

      the hurricane took everything. they had to start from scratch.

      Reply
  • 17. Alicia Jamtaas  |  September 28, 2017 at 7:14 pm

    whoa! nice twist at the end… Nicley done.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  September 29, 2017 at 9:28 am

      alicia:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 19. draliman  |  September 28, 2017 at 11:53 pm

    Sounds like they’re not all that sorry to see it gone, given how the original funds were obtained. A clean break from the past.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  September 29, 2017 at 9:27 am

      draliman:

      they should thank mother nature for giving them the extra push to break from the past.

      Reply
  • 21. rgayer55  |  September 29, 2017 at 3:36 am

    I think I could still live in the Playboy Mansion, despite where the money came from.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  September 29, 2017 at 9:27 am

      russell:

      me, too, if i can afford it. 🙂

      Reply
  • 23. Fatima Fakier  |  September 29, 2017 at 8:46 am

    A sort of cleansing and renewal. Our trials bring forth our greatest selves.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  September 29, 2017 at 9:26 am

      fatima:

      thank you for the great comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 25. Norma  |  September 30, 2017 at 7:29 am

    Perhaps a new start. Good story.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  October 1, 2017 at 1:36 pm

      norma:

      it looks that way. thank you for reading.

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      • 27. plaridel  |  October 1, 2017 at 1:36 pm

        thanks for the pingback! much appreciated.

        Reply
  • 28. Sandra  |  October 1, 2017 at 6:06 am

    A topical take. Well done.

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    • 29. plaridel  |  October 1, 2017 at 1:35 pm

      sandra

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it. 🙂

      Reply
  • 30. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  October 1, 2017 at 9:17 am

    I think it takes a hurricane to make the right decision… a simpler but more honest life sounds better

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    • 31. plaridel  |  October 1, 2017 at 1:35 pm

      björn:

      if anything, the hurricane initiated a life change.

      Reply
  • 32. Liz Young  |  October 1, 2017 at 11:12 am

    There’ll be plenty of rubble to build an honest house.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  October 1, 2017 at 1:34 pm

      liz:

      well said. thank you.

      Reply
  • 34. lingeringvisions by Dawn  |  October 2, 2017 at 5:20 pm

    Sometimes doing the right thing isn’t the easiest thing to do.

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    • 35. plaridel  |  October 3, 2017 at 2:47 pm

      dawn:

      it certainly wasn’t, but she made a good choice.

      Reply
  • 36. gravadee  |  October 2, 2017 at 10:05 pm

    Awesome take on the photo prompt

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    • 37. plaridel  |  October 3, 2017 at 2:46 pm

      merina:

      glad you think so. thank you.

      Reply
  • 38. Sarah Ann  |  October 3, 2017 at 1:42 am

    Well, there’s a principled mother. Surprising last line, which adds so many questions and another layer to this. Good one.

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    • 39. plaridel  |  October 3, 2017 at 2:46 pm

      sarah ann:

      thank you. hopefully, a good start to a new beginning.

      Reply
  • 40. Dale  |  October 3, 2017 at 8:05 am

    Sometimes what looks like a disaster is actually a chance for rebirth. Good one!

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    • 41. plaridel  |  October 3, 2017 at 2:45 pm

      dale:

      that’s the positive way of looking at it. 🙂

      Reply

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