LeRoys’s Obsession

April 18, 2018 at 10:08 am 51 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 20 Apr 2018

Douglas M. MacIlroy

Photo Credit: Douglas M. MacIlroy
 
LeRoy had been long obsessed with her. He found her alone on the golf course practicing her swing. At 40, she was still a looker wearing a white visor, long sleeve plaid shirt and white shorts.

Although she had sunglasses on with her black hair tied up in a pony tail, there was no mistaking it was her.

For Leroy, it was now or never. He felt for the gun in his holster. Like a predator in pursuit of a prey, he approached her slowly from behind.

“Mrs. Smith,” he said. β€œYou’re under arrest for the murder of your husband.”
 

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51 Comments Add your own

  • 1. James  |  April 18, 2018 at 10:36 am

    A significant portion of these stories involve guns and killings (including mine), which kind of surprises me.

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    • 2. plaridel  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:50 pm

      james:

      it makes me wonder. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 3. Susan  |  April 18, 2018 at 10:59 am

    When in doubt, shoot it out James.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:49 pm

      susan:

      i hope he can hear you. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 5. Susan  |  April 18, 2018 at 11:00 am

    I thought the story had a nice twist.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:48 pm

      susan:

      you’re very kind. thank you.

      Reply
  • 7. Susan A Eames  |  April 18, 2018 at 11:27 am

    Goodness! I wasn’t expecting that twist. Excellent story!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • 8. plaridel  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:48 pm

      susan:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you.

      Reply
  • 9. Iain Kelly  |  April 18, 2018 at 12:01 pm

    He finally caught up with her. Nice reveal.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:47 pm

      iain:

      yes, he did. πŸ™‚

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  • 11. BjΓΆrn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  April 18, 2018 at 12:36 pm

    Love the surprise ending… I expected something entirely different.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:47 pm

      bjΓΆrn:

      it was a last moment of decision on my part. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 13. Dale  |  April 18, 2018 at 2:01 pm

    Well that gave me a twist in the neck!
    Good job, Plaridel. So was not expecting that ending…

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    • 14. plaridel  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:47 pm

      dale:

      gotcha! πŸ™‚

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      • 15. Dale  |  April 18, 2018 at 6:56 pm

        And not the first time, either!!

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        • 16. plaridel  |  April 19, 2018 at 9:41 am

          dale:

          the third one will be a charm. πŸ™‚

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          • 17. Dale  |  April 19, 2018 at 9:43 am

            Haha!

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  • 18. draliman  |  April 19, 2018 at 12:26 am

    Nice, not the obsession I was expecting!

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    • 19. plaridel  |  April 19, 2018 at 9:41 am

      draliman:

      i think i’m learning from reading you guys. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 20. Sandra  |  April 19, 2018 at 2:14 am

    Justice on the golf course. Well done.

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    • 21. plaridel  |  April 19, 2018 at 9:40 am

      sandra:

      you bet. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 22. Moon  |  April 19, 2018 at 2:56 am

    Terrific twist, Plaridel.
    Great story.

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    • 23. plaridel  |  April 19, 2018 at 9:40 am

      moon:

      thank you for the delightful comment. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 24. granonine  |  April 19, 2018 at 6:07 am

    Well, that was an unexpected twist. In an instant, I went from hating the predator to admiring his persistence. Not a predator at all.

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    • 25. plaridel  |  April 19, 2018 at 9:39 am

      linda:

      i had fun writing it. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 26. The Writer's Village  |  April 19, 2018 at 10:28 am

    For Leroy, was this a stroke of luck?

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    • 27. plaridel  |  April 20, 2018 at 10:36 am

      randy:

      you could say it was. πŸ™‚

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  • 28. pennygadd51  |  April 20, 2018 at 1:22 am

    You set up the scene carefully to draw us in, making sure that the foreground is occupied by an attractive person, someone we are disposed to like. You hold us for a few moments, to look at the hunter as he approaches his quarry – good technique that! – and then you give us an unexpected twist.
    Nicely written, Plaridel!

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    • 29. plaridel  |  April 20, 2018 at 10:35 am

      penny:

      i really appreciate the wonderful comment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 30. lisarey1990  |  April 20, 2018 at 4:03 am

    There was so many twists in that and I loved them all. First I thought he was in love with her then that he wanted to kill her and finally realised he was a cop. Loved it.

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    • 31. plaridel  |  April 20, 2018 at 10:35 am

      lisarey:

      it’s been generous of you. thank you.

      Reply
  • 32. Russell Gayer  |  April 20, 2018 at 4:42 am

    She must be the trophy wife from Bjorn and Alicia’s stories. Very clever. She dyed her hair and tried to change her identity, but Leroy found her anyway. Looks like the lawyers will be the ones who enjoy her husband’s wealth.
    Well done.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  April 20, 2018 at 10:34 am

      russell:

      it’s hard to fit everything in 100 words and details had to be left out, but you’re right on the money. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 34. Norma  |  April 20, 2018 at 8:07 am

    Now that was a twist, Plaridel. Never saw that coming. πŸ™‚
    “He felt for the gun in his holster.” Thank goodness! he is a policeman and not a stalker of some kind. And she is getting arrested for what she may or might not have done.

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    • 35. plaridel  |  April 20, 2018 at 10:33 am

      norma:

      i find your comment very comforting. thank you.

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      • 36. Norma  |  April 21, 2018 at 6:21 am

        Awww! πŸ™‚

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        • 37. plaridel  |  April 22, 2018 at 9:02 am

          norma:

          it’s true. πŸ™‚

          Reply
  • 38. Tracey@MyBajaKitchen.com and TraceyDelaplainMD.com  |  April 20, 2018 at 8:33 am

    You caught me by surprise too. Great writing.
    Tracey

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    • 39. plaridel  |  April 20, 2018 at 10:32 am

      tracey:

      i appreciate the compliment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 40. jillyfunnell  |  April 20, 2018 at 9:27 am

    Good pay off at the end – total surprise. Very well done.

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    • 41. plaridel  |  April 20, 2018 at 10:32 am

      jilly:

      thank you for reading. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 42. anuragbakhshi  |  April 21, 2018 at 9:36 pm

    Ha ha ha. Great twist.

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    • 43. plaridel  |  April 22, 2018 at 9:01 am

      anurag:

      i’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 44. michaelwynnauthor  |  April 22, 2018 at 1:28 am

    Great twist, got her at last, even though probably with some regret as he had a soft spot for her

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    • 45. plaridel  |  April 22, 2018 at 9:00 am

      mick:

      your comment is much appreciated. thank you.

      Reply
  • 46. Alicia Jamtaas  |  April 22, 2018 at 2:57 pm

    Oh! Nice twist at the end. You had me going. I thought he was in love with her (and perhaps he is). Still, he had a job to do. Kudos.

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    • 47. plaridel  |  April 23, 2018 at 9:51 pm

      alicia:

      thanks for being supportive. much appreciated. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 48. Sarah Ann  |  April 23, 2018 at 1:47 am

    Well done on sending us in one direction before taking us in quite another. I hope Leroy’s obsession is over now his work is done.

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    • 49. plaridel  |  April 23, 2018 at 9:51 pm

      sarah ann:

      i’m glad it worked for you. thank you for reading. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 50. gahlearner  |  April 24, 2018 at 4:45 am

    Great twist, I love it.

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    • 51. plaridel  |  April 24, 2018 at 8:31 pm

      gabriele:

      i’m glad you like my contribution this week. much appreciated.

      Reply

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