Refuge
November 14, 2018 at 9:33 am 56 comments
For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 16 November 2018
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| Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields |
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As night approached, Adam and Eve found refuge under the bridge to protect them from the winter cold.
Shivering in the dark, Eve started to cry feeling sorry for their circumstances.
“It was my fault for getting us kicked out from the shelter. I shouldn‘t have eaten an apple without permission.”
“It’s all in the past,” Adam said trying to comfort her. “As long as we have each other, we’ll do fine.”
Adam cuddled and kissed her. Then one thing led to another until it happened. For one brief moment, they experienced peace and everything was alright with the world.
The Air That I Breathe by The Hollies
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Musings of a Random Mind 
1.
Susan A Eames | November 14, 2018 at 10:11 am
Great take on the photo prompt! Loved this.
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2.
plaridel | November 14, 2018 at 7:18 pm
susan:
it’s very generous of you. thank you.
3.
neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS | November 14, 2018 at 10:14 am
Adam and Eve. Loved the apple bit too. Very innovative take.
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plaridel | November 14, 2018 at 7:17 pm
neel:
thank you for reading and commenting. much appreciated.
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Iain Kelly | November 14, 2018 at 12:28 pm
A modern take, not quite the garden of Eden anymore.
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plaridel | November 14, 2018 at 7:17 pm
iain:
you’re very kind. thank you for the usual support.
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neilmacdon | November 14, 2018 at 3:53 pm
I was waiting for the serpent
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plaridel | November 14, 2018 at 7:16 pm
neil:
just a little shy for now, but it’ll be coming soon. 🙂
9.
draliman | November 15, 2018 at 4:27 am
Nice modernised take on the story.
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:25 pm
draliman:
thank you. you’re very kind.
11.
Fabricating Fiction/Louise Jensen | November 15, 2018 at 4:33 am
Very clever! I liked very much.
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:25 pm
louise:
thank you for stopping and the very encouraging comment. much appreciated.
13.
Sandra | November 15, 2018 at 5:17 am
You have to take your comforts where you can, I guess.
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:24 pm
sandra:
i totally agree.
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rochellewisoff | November 15, 2018 at 6:20 am
Dear Plaridel,
Unique take on the prompt. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:24 pm
rochelle:
thank you for the unfailing support. much appreciated.
17.
Clare Hempstead | November 15, 2018 at 8:24 am
I loved the way you updated the Adam and Eve story. Very well done.
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:24 pm
clare:
it’s very generous of you. thank you.
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Keith's Ramblings | November 15, 2018 at 8:53 am
I hope they kept their fig leaves in place!
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:23 pm
keith:
i think they had tossed them by now. 🙂
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4963andypop | November 15, 2018 at 8:58 am
A modern Bible story. I dont think shes going to enjoy the labor pains in nine months or so!
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:26 pm
andrea:
no doubt about it. 🙂
23.
Liz Young | November 15, 2018 at 9:16 am
Not the best place for a tryst, but when the hormones get going there’s no stopping them!
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plaridel | November 15, 2018 at 2:23 pm
liz:
under the circumstances, they didn’t have any choice.
25.
Dale | November 15, 2018 at 2:27 pm
As we know, peace will be short-lived, indeed…
Fun take.
26.
plaridel | November 16, 2018 at 11:32 am
dale:
still, i guess it was worth it. 🙂
27.
Abhijit Ray | November 15, 2018 at 8:17 pm
Whatever they did, they did not do it in the garden of Eden. We are now facing the consequence.
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plaridel | November 16, 2018 at 11:31 am
abhiray:
i agree totally.
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elappleby | November 16, 2018 at 3:29 am
Nicely done. Poor Eve though, still taking all the blame after all these years.
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plaridel | November 16, 2018 at 11:31 am
ela:
sometimes i wonder if it’s still a man’s world after all these years. 🙂
31.
michaelwynnauthor | November 16, 2018 at 3:58 am
Modern take on the old fable, nicely done
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plaridel | November 16, 2018 at 11:29 am
mick:
i’m glad it worked in this case. thank you.
33.
talesfromthemindofkristian | November 16, 2018 at 7:41 am
Clever, history repeating itself perhaps? 🙂
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plaridel | November 16, 2018 at 11:29 am
kristian:
yes, the story never grows old. 🙂
35.
JoHawkTheWriter | November 16, 2018 at 11:02 am
I would never have imagined Adam and Eve living under a bridge. Nice job.
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plaridel | November 16, 2018 at 11:28 am
jo:
it’s only temporary until they find a better place. 🙂
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James McEwan | November 17, 2018 at 1:32 am
Just to think, it all started under a bridge. i expect we are all still looking for that shelter where apples are freely give out.
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plaridel | November 18, 2018 at 12:11 pm
james:
if we keep on looking, we might find it.
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jillyfunnell | November 17, 2018 at 2:48 am
Great imaginative take. Who would know such a boring fruit could cause so much trouble.
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plaridel | November 18, 2018 at 12:10 pm
jilly:
she must be really hungry to take the chance. 🙂
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Brenda's Thoughts | November 17, 2018 at 10:59 am
Creative take on the prompt and on the Adam & Eve tale. =)
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plaridel | November 18, 2018 at 12:10 pm
brenda:
your generous comment is much appreciated. thank you.
43.
granonine | November 17, 2018 at 11:11 am
Almost Paradise, except someone else had been there first. Great take on the prompt 🙂
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plaridel | November 18, 2018 at 12:10 pm
linda:
i think they didn’t mind it all. 🙂
45.
Russell Gayer | November 18, 2018 at 4:06 am
Ah, aren’t we all looking for that moment when peace rules and all is right in the world. Too bad it never lasts.
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plaridel | November 18, 2018 at 12:09 pm
russell:
if there’s any consolation, its memory does.
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) | November 18, 2018 at 9:04 am
I hate a world where paradise is a shelter… it gives me perspective to what I have…
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plaridel | November 18, 2018 at 12:09 pm
björn:
me too. 🙂
49.
theministryofshrawleywalks | November 18, 2018 at 11:35 am
Saucy, like the inevitability of the whole thing!!
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plaridel | November 18, 2018 at 12:09 pm
dom:
it’s sure does it, isn’t it? thank you for the lovely comment. 🙂
51.
Indira | November 20, 2018 at 7:04 am
Excellent take. Lovely.
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plaridel | November 21, 2018 at 2:34 pm
indira:
thank you for taking time to read and commenting. much appreciated.
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Indira | November 23, 2018 at 5:37 am
I love to read.
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plaridel | November 23, 2018 at 9:04 pm
indira:
me too. 🙂
55.
lisarey1990 | November 20, 2018 at 4:19 pm
Very innovative. Great, fresh take on the prompt.
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plaridel | November 21, 2018 at 2:34 pm
lisa:
thank you kindly. 🙂