Paradise Lost

November 21, 2018 at 10:00 am 41 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 23 November 2018

Dale Rogerson
Photo Credit: Dale Rogerson

 
Feeling nostalgic about the good old days, Eve sneaked into the Garden of Eden while Adam was away hunting for food.

As she walked around their former abode, it seemed like they hadn’t left. It remained a paradise. Nothing much had changed except that it didn’t make her feel welcome.

No creature in the water, on the land and in the air came to greet her. They went about their business and completely ignored her.

The Garden of Eden was home but it wasn’t home anymore. Feeling the firstborn in her womb, Eve left and vowed never to return again.

 

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41 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Susan A Eames  |  November 21, 2018 at 1:15 pm

    Great take on the photo prompt! Such imagination.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • 2. plaridel  |  November 21, 2018 at 2:34 pm

      susan:

      thank you for the encouraging comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 3. jillyfunnell  |  November 21, 2018 at 1:22 pm

    That particular paradise has been lost as far as Eve’s concerned. Sad to think of all the creatures ignoring her.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  November 21, 2018 at 2:33 pm

      jilly:

      it’s a sad fact of life that one can’t go home again.

      Reply
  • 5. Iain Kelly  |  November 21, 2018 at 1:24 pm

    Paradise spoiled.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  November 21, 2018 at 2:33 pm

      iain:

      you nailed it. 🙂

      Reply
  • 7. Dale  |  November 21, 2018 at 6:46 pm

    Wonderful take on the prompt, Plaridel. May I suggest a comma after Adam? Otherwise, it’s like Eve not telling him who it is who went hunting 😉

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    • 8. plaridel  |  November 21, 2018 at 8:21 pm

      dale,

      thank you for the excellent suggestion. I decided to rewrite the whole sentence to make it cleaner. what do you think?

      Reply
      • 9. Dale  |  November 21, 2018 at 8:31 pm

        Nah… just the comma changes everything!

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        • 10. plaridel  |  November 21, 2018 at 8:57 pm

          i guess i overdid it. just adding the comma would suffice indeed.

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          • 11. Dale  |  November 22, 2018 at 5:49 am

            😁

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          • 12. Dale  |  November 22, 2018 at 5:50 am

            😁 But it’s fabulous now…

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            • 13. plaridel  |  November 22, 2018 at 9:58 am

              dale:

              it’s you now pulling my leg. 🙂

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              • 14. Dale  |  November 22, 2018 at 10:22 am

                Nope. I would not do that!

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                • 15. plaridel  |  November 23, 2018 at 9:05 pm

                  dale:

                  thanks a million. 🙂

                  Reply
  • 16. JoHawkTheWriter  |  November 21, 2018 at 10:25 pm

    You never can go home again. The only way is forward. Poor Eve.

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    • 17. plaridel  |  November 22, 2018 at 10:00 am

      jo:

      a sad lesson to learn indeed.

      Reply
  • 18. anuragbakhshi  |  November 21, 2018 at 10:28 pm

    Once you leave, things are never the same again. It’s just the stupid nostalgia that keeps tempting us to return.

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    • 19. plaridel  |  November 22, 2018 at 9:59 am

      anurag:

      i agree completely.

      Reply
  • 20. Abhijit Ray  |  November 21, 2018 at 11:32 pm

    Eve was pure in the garden of Eden. After eating the apple, everything changed.

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    • 21. plaridel  |  November 22, 2018 at 9:59 am

      abhijit:

      i guess it was only human to succumb to temptation

      Reply
  • 22. draliman  |  November 22, 2018 at 12:43 am

    They had their chance. Nice one!

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    • 23. plaridel  |  November 22, 2018 at 9:59 am

      draliman:

      perhaps they should get another chance. 🙂

      Reply
  • 24. Clare Hempstead  |  November 22, 2018 at 2:31 am

    They say you should never go back!

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    • 25. plaridel  |  November 22, 2018 at 9:58 am

      clare:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 26. rochellewisoff  |  November 22, 2018 at 5:57 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I wonder if Eve really could’ve gone back and walked around the garden? Well imagined tale. I enjoyed it.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 27. plaridel  |  November 22, 2018 at 9:57 am

      rochelle:

      as picasso said, everything you can imagine is real. 🙂

      Reply
  • 28. Sandra  |  November 23, 2018 at 1:35 am

    Very nice. Great take on the prompt.

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    • 29. plaridel  |  November 23, 2018 at 9:04 pm

      sandra:

      thank you for the encouraging comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 30. ladynimue  |  November 23, 2018 at 6:06 am

    And that’s why we rarely return to old haunts ..

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    • 31. plaridel  |  November 23, 2018 at 9:03 pm

      ladynimue:

      it’s very perceptive of you.

      Reply
  • 32. michaelwynnauthor  |  November 24, 2018 at 3:49 am

    Nice cautionary tale, be careful what you do because you may never be able to go back.

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    • 33. plaridel  |  November 25, 2018 at 7:34 pm

      mick:

      curiosity can be a blessing and a curse.

      Reply
  • 34. granonine  |  November 25, 2018 at 8:20 am

    Poor, sneaky Eve. Wonder if it ever occurred to her that Adam may also have gone back to take a last look at Paradise. Well, at least they still had each other 🙂

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    • 35. plaridel  |  November 25, 2018 at 7:33 pm

      linda:

      he could have but he’s not talking. 🙂

      Reply
  • 36. Brenda's Thoughts  |  November 25, 2018 at 10:43 am

    You can never go back or home. Creative tale!

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    • 37. plaridel  |  November 25, 2018 at 7:32 pm

      brenda:

      it’s a tragedy that we all have to bear.

      Reply
  • 38. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  November 25, 2018 at 12:19 pm

    I think it was not just paradise lost for humans but humans lost for paradise.

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    • 39. plaridel  |  November 25, 2018 at 7:32 pm

      björn:

      how true indeed.

      Reply
  • 40. Dawn M. Miller  |  November 27, 2018 at 3:25 am

    Enjoyable twist.

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    • 41. plaridel  |  November 28, 2018 at 5:08 pm

      dawn:

      thank you for reading as usual. much appreciated.

      Reply

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