Rite of Passage

December 12, 2018 at 3:43 pm 43 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 14 December 2018

Douglas M. MacIlroy
Photo Credit: Douglas M. MacIlroy

 
“What’s wrong with Robbie?“ Abby wondered. “He was spending too much time alone in the family garage.”

“Ahhhh!” She’d hear him moan sometimes.

“Dad, is Robbie sick? she asked. “He’s acting really weird lately.”

“Don’t worry about it, Abby. He’s a growing boy.”

One evening, unable to contain her curiosity, Abby followed her brother to the garage.

She opened the door and found him in shorts sweating profusely.

“Robbie, what are you doing?”

“Mind your own business, little sister. Don’t you see I’m working out to qualify for the soccer team?”

“Oh, ok!” She rolled her eyes and quickly left.
 

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  • 1. anuragbakhshi  |  December 12, 2018 at 10:48 pm

    Ha, nicely done twist there.

    Reply
    • 2. plaridel  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:42 am

      anurag:

      a twist or just telling it like it is? 🙂

      Reply
  • 3. Iain Kelly  |  December 13, 2018 at 12:58 am

    I hope that’s all he was doing! 🙂

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    • 4. plaridel  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:43 am

      iain:

      i hope so too. 🙂

      Reply
  • 5. draliman  |  December 13, 2018 at 12:58 am

    Phew, just a bit of football training 🙂

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    • 6. plaridel  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:43 am

      draliman:

      you can say that again. 🙂

      Reply
  • 7. i b arora  |  December 13, 2018 at 1:43 am

    well it sounded like a bit of mystery

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    • 8. plaridel  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:45 am

      i b arora:

      i guess the secret is out. it isn’t a mystery anymore. 🙂

      Reply
  • 9. Brenda's Thoughts  |  December 13, 2018 at 7:05 am

    Pesky little sisters!

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    • 10. plaridel  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:46 am

      brenda:

      i think she was only worried about her big brother. 🙂

      Reply
      • 11. Brenda's Thoughts  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:51 am

        I’m sure … I was a pest to my two big brothers. hehe

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        • 12. plaridel  |  December 14, 2018 at 10:14 am

          brenda:

          you can’t be serious. i’d rather think otherwise. 🙂

          Reply
  • 14. Sandra  |  December 13, 2018 at 7:19 am

    Yep, I was heading in the wrong direction with that one…

    Reply
    • 15. plaridel  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:48 am

      sandra:

      it’s very kind of you. thank you.

      Reply
  • 16. granonine  |  December 13, 2018 at 10:59 am

    I was REALLY hoping she wasn’t going to see what you wanted us to think she was going to see. See? 🙂

    Reply
    • 17. plaridel  |  December 13, 2018 at 11:50 am

      linda:

      thanks for the confusion it created. i was trying to be as straightforward as i could. 🙂

      Reply
  • 18. Russell Gayer  |  December 13, 2018 at 3:48 pm

    I guess he can check the garage off his list as “safe places to spank your monkey.” 🙂
    Though I doubt that particular exercise will help him make the soccer team.

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    • 19. plaridel  |  December 14, 2018 at 10:14 am

      russell:

      he shouldn’t forget to lock the door next time so he couldn’t be disturbed while doing his workout. 🙂

      Reply
  • 20. Dale  |  December 13, 2018 at 3:58 pm

    Ha ha! Dreams begin with hard work!

    Reply
    • 21. plaridel  |  December 14, 2018 at 10:14 am

      dale:

      i totally agree. 🙂

      Reply
  • 22. Abhijit Ray  |  December 13, 2018 at 7:51 pm

    Each one has a different use for the old garage and each one has a unique way to visualise a situation, like Abby did. Nice story.

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    • 23. plaridel  |  December 14, 2018 at 10:13 am

      abhijit:

      you nailed it. to each his own. 🙂

      Reply
  • 24. Keith's Ramblings  |  December 14, 2018 at 3:03 am

    Phew, that was a relief!

    Reply
    • 25. plaridel  |  December 14, 2018 at 10:13 am

      keith:

      like they say, all’s well that ends well. 🙂

      Reply
  • 26. Violet Lentz  |  December 14, 2018 at 4:19 am

    I love a good twist. Thanks.

    Reply
    • 27. plaridel  |  December 14, 2018 at 10:13 am

      violet:

      thank you for the generous comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 28. rochellewisoff  |  December 14, 2018 at 7:44 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I’ll not even ask for clarification. Growing boy indeed. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Reply
    • 29. plaridel  |  December 14, 2018 at 10:13 am

      rochelle:

      i know what you mean. 🙂

      Reply
  • 30. lisarey1990  |  December 14, 2018 at 12:30 pm

    A cover story or the truth? Like the mystery of this.

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    • 31. plaridel  |  December 15, 2018 at 2:25 pm

      lisa:

      it could be either. 🙂

      Reply
  • 32. Liz Young  |  December 14, 2018 at 2:32 pm

    It’s about time he learned you can never keep a secret from a sister for long!

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    • 33. plaridel  |  December 15, 2018 at 2:24 pm

      liz:

      i think that’s a wise advice. 🙂

      Reply
  • 34. Alicia Jamtaas  |  December 14, 2018 at 4:22 pm

    Oh, little sisters can be SO nosey. But I like the fact that she cared enough to snoop. Very nice take on the prompt.

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    • 35. plaridel  |  December 15, 2018 at 2:24 pm

      alicia:

      what are little sisters for? 🙂

      Reply
  • 36. jillyfunnell  |  December 15, 2018 at 2:56 am

    He needs his privacy sometimes, whatever he’s doing. Little sisters are pesky but he’s lucky to have a sister. Neatly told.

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    • 37. plaridel  |  December 15, 2018 at 2:24 pm

      jilly:

      he’s lucky, indeed, to have a sister who’s concerned about his well-being.

      Reply
  • 38. michaelwynnauthor  |  December 16, 2018 at 5:34 am

    Amusing, you led us up the garden path with this one, training for the footie team, that’s all. Thank God.

    Reply
    • 39. plaridel  |  December 19, 2018 at 8:31 am

      mick:

      hopefully, he’ll make the team. 🙂

      Reply
  • 40. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  December 16, 2018 at 11:47 am

    I know it well.. you have to start with the ball to play soccer.

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    • 41. plaridel  |  December 19, 2018 at 8:31 am

      björn:

      that’s funny. 🙂

      Reply
  • 42. Dawn M. Miller  |  December 18, 2018 at 7:42 pm

    Very true to life.

    Reply
    • 43. plaridel  |  December 19, 2018 at 8:30 am

      dawn:

      i think so, too.

      Reply

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