No Turning Back

March 6, 2019 at 9:10 am 42 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 8 March 2019

C.E. Ayr
Photo Credit: C. E. Ayr

 
Once it was decided to flee, there was no turning back.

Ariyah and her mother arrived at the border on a motorcycle when a group of armed men demanded payment for their passage.

“We have nothing,” Ariyah pleaded.

“Are you sure?” their leader asked, giving her the look that caused her shivers.

He took her inside the barn for inspection. Moments later, Ariyah emerged trying to compose herself.

“Did they find the jewelry hidden in your clothes?” her mother asked after crossing to freedom.

“No.”

“Thank God.”

What Ariyah’s mother didn’t know was it cost her something much more precious.

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42 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Alice Audrey  |  March 6, 2019 at 10:26 am

    What an ignorant and unsympathetic mother.

    Reply
    • 2. plaridel  |  March 6, 2019 at 2:52 pm

      alice:

      her mother didn’t have a clue what happened to her. ariyah kept it to herself.

      Reply
  • 3. pennygadd51  |  March 6, 2019 at 10:29 am

    The cost was very high, but Ariyah and her mother survived – life is even more precious.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  March 6, 2019 at 2:52 pm

      penny:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 5. Rachel Bjerke  |  March 6, 2019 at 11:29 am

    I’m sure this story isn’t entirely fiction to someone out there… and it makes me think that it would have happened even if they had given up the jewels.

    Good story!

    -Rachel

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    • 6. plaridel  |  March 6, 2019 at 2:52 pm

      rachel:

      i’m afraid you’re exactly right.

      Reply
  • 7. Iain Kelly  |  March 6, 2019 at 12:29 pm

    Oh dear, what a troubling story of survival. I hope a better future awaits them.

    Reply
    • 8. plaridel  |  March 6, 2019 at 2:51 pm

      iain:

      for them, there’s no other way but to move forward.

      Reply
  • 9. theministryofshrawleywalks  |  March 6, 2019 at 2:09 pm

    Oh grim, what a horrible reality of life for some people. Well written chilling piece

    Reply
    • 10. plaridel  |  March 6, 2019 at 2:51 pm

      shrawley:

      sadly, it’s a reality that happens somewhere in this world as we speak.

      Reply
      • 11. theministryofshrawleywalks  |  March 6, 2019 at 2:54 pm

        Yep I know, its a terrible thing we can do nothing about from our living rooms.

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        • 12. plaridel  |  March 7, 2019 at 8:30 am

          shrawley:

          it gives one a terrible feeling indeed.

          Reply
  • 13. draliman  |  March 7, 2019 at 12:12 am

    Very grim, a high cost to pay indeed. At least hey are all alive, though.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  March 7, 2019 at 8:30 am

      draliman:

      it’s incredible how much people are willing to sacrifice for freedom that we sometimes take for granted.

      Reply
  • 15. Sandra  |  March 7, 2019 at 2:32 am

    Survival always has a price. Nicely done

    Reply
    • 16. plaridel  |  March 7, 2019 at 8:29 am

      sandra:

      i guess nothing in life comes free.

      Reply
  • 17. Abhijit Ray  |  March 7, 2019 at 3:33 am

    You said so much without saying much. Nicely done.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  March 7, 2019 at 8:29 am

      abhijit:

      your nice comment is deeply appreciated. thank you.

      Reply
  • 19. gahlearner  |  March 7, 2019 at 11:50 am

    It’s such a horrible price to pay for freedom. At least they let them go and didn’t kill them.

    Reply
    • 20. plaridel  |  March 8, 2019 at 4:05 pm

      gahlearner:

      hopefully, it’ll be all worth it.

      Reply
  • 21. Dale  |  March 7, 2019 at 1:33 pm

    Oh the poor girl! I bet she will never let her mother know…
    Horrible price to pay.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  March 8, 2019 at 4:05 pm

      dale:

      she’ll keep it to herself for sure.

      Reply
  • 23. rochellewisoff  |  March 7, 2019 at 2:11 pm

    Dear Plaridel,

    What a horrible price to pay for freedom. Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Reply
    • 24. plaridel  |  March 8, 2019 at 4:04 pm

      rochelle:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you for the usual support.

      Reply
  • 25. Keith's Ramblings  |  March 8, 2019 at 2:33 am

    The only ray of light in this sorrowful tale is that they are free and will hopefully be able to move on.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  March 8, 2019 at 4:04 pm

      keith:

      there’s no turning back, so they have to make the best of it.

      Reply
  • 27. patrickprinsloo  |  March 8, 2019 at 5:58 am

    Too true for fiction. A sad world we occupy.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  March 8, 2019 at 4:03 pm

      patrick:

      yep, sometimes it makes me sad to think about it.

      Reply
  • 29. Violet Lentz  |  March 9, 2019 at 2:03 am

    Well, on the lighter side, they have escaped, and still have a purse with which to start a new life. Nicely told..

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    • 30. plaridel  |  March 10, 2019 at 5:11 pm

      violet:

      if there was a silver lining to the story, that would be it.

      Reply
  • 31. granonine  |  March 9, 2019 at 5:58 am

    This read too much like truth. You know this type of thing happens, but it’s more convenient to ignore it. And truthfully? There is very little anyone can do to stop such abuses. I have to give an ovation to the daughter for not burdening her mother with the assault she endured.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  March 10, 2019 at 5:11 pm

      linda:

      i appreciate your wonderful insight. thank you.

      Reply
  • 33. Margaret  |  March 9, 2019 at 6:04 pm

    You told this sensitively and compellingly. Such a difficult subject to tackle. Bravo for doing it. What a world we have. Who can understand what drives some people to such cruelty?

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    • 34. plaridel  |  March 10, 2019 at 5:10 pm

      margaret:

      i’m glad you liked it thank you for reading.

      Reply
  • 35. 4963andypop  |  March 10, 2019 at 7:49 am

    Give a man a little power ( or a woman for that matter.). Instances like this hammer home the notion that such “transactions” have more to do with an imbalance of power, than with attraction or even lust.

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    • 36. plaridel  |  March 10, 2019 at 5:10 pm

      andrea:

      you’re right. it’s all about asserting power over somebody.

      Reply
  • 37. Liz Young  |  March 10, 2019 at 10:17 am

    Her mother should have guessed what happened. She might not have been able to do anything about it but a bit of sympathy wouldn’t have gone amiss.

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    • 38. plaridel  |  March 10, 2019 at 5:10 pm

      liz:

      her mother knew what happened but keeping it to herself out of respect for her daughter’s privacy.

      Reply
  • 39. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  March 10, 2019 at 1:21 pm

    There is always a price to be paid… alas too many have paid that price (and continue to pay)

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    • 40. plaridel  |  March 10, 2019 at 5:09 pm

      björn:

      that’s the sad truth indeed.

      Reply
  • 41. Fatima Fakier  |  March 11, 2019 at 12:47 am

    The plight of some people can drive them to grim and desperate measures. At the end though, they survived and hopefully she can move on.

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    • 42. plaridel  |  March 13, 2019 at 9:20 am

      fatima:

      most definitely, it was the risk worth taking.

      Reply

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