Unfinished

December 18, 2019 at 3:15 pm 22 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 20 December 2019

Dale Rogerson
Photo Credit: Dale Rogerson

 
Amidst fallen snow, the gazebo lay abandoned and neglected.

It was supposed to be a gift for Abby on her fifth birthday.

But ten years later, it was still a work in progress due to her untimely passing.

During a family picnic, Abby was collecting rocks when she slipped and fell into the river.

“Daddy!” she cried. But before he could save her, the currents swept her away. As a father, he was supposed to protect her. In that moment when she needed him the most, he failed.

The gazebo stood unfinished like the life of his daughter cut short.

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22 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Dale  |  December 18, 2019 at 5:02 pm

    A parent’s worst nightmare. I’m surprised the father didn’t rip it down completely!

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    • 2. plaridel  |  December 19, 2019 at 12:01 pm

      dale:

      i think he didn’t have the heart to do it.

      Reply
  • 3. Tannille  |  December 18, 2019 at 8:44 pm

    Ouch. So sad and tragic. I’m not sure that kind of psychological damage ever really heals.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  December 22, 2019 at 10:28 am

      tannille:

      it may heal ultimately but the scar will remain forever.

      Reply
  • 5. draliman  |  December 19, 2019 at 12:09 am

    So sad. I don’t think the gazebo will ever be finished in light of events, just left to slowly collapse.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  December 19, 2019 at 11:54 am

      draliman:

      under the circumstances, all bets are off.

      Reply
  • 7. Iain Kelly  |  December 19, 2019 at 2:37 am

    How surprising that we both saw a father and a young lost daughter in the prompt. Definitely something about the picture is inspiring stories of loss this week. I think the gazebo may end up being burned to the ground.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  December 19, 2019 at 11:58 am

      iain:

      when i saw the picture prompt, it reminded me of the gazebo in my old neighbor’s backyard. he started working on it while his two daughters were still very young. for some reason or another, he wasn’t able to complete it. after the property was sold, the new owners got rid of it as soon as they moved.

      Reply
  • 9. rochellewisoff  |  December 19, 2019 at 6:46 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    The ultimate tragedy for any parent. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 10. plaridel  |  December 19, 2019 at 11:59 am

      rochelle:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 11. msjadeli  |  December 19, 2019 at 7:41 pm

    It would be so painful to have the gazebo there as a reminder of how he let his little girl down. Such a tragic and haunting tale.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  December 22, 2019 at 10:30 am

      msjadeli:

      some have suggested that it should be torn down to bring closure. maybe they’re right

      Reply
  • 13. pennygadd51  |  December 20, 2019 at 1:04 am

    A tragic tale. The father’s feelings of guilt must be unbearable.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  December 22, 2019 at 10:29 am

      penny:

      it was an experience you won’t wish even for your enemy.

      Reply
  • 15. James McEwan  |  December 21, 2019 at 2:59 am

    A sad tale indeed.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  December 22, 2019 at 10:27 am

      james:

      thank you.

      Reply
  • 17. Brenda's Thoughts  |  December 21, 2019 at 6:05 pm

    A sad tale and the terrible loss for a father. So sad!

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    • 18. plaridel  |  December 22, 2019 at 10:27 am

      brenda:

      thank you for reading and the usual support. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 19. Russell Gayer  |  December 23, 2019 at 4:33 am

    I can see why he lost all desire to complete it. Sad tale, but nicely written.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  December 25, 2019 at 11:00 am

      russell:

      you’re very kind. thank you.

      Reply
  • 21. granonine  |  December 23, 2019 at 12:03 pm

    Oh my, so sad. I like the gazebo as a metaphor for the girl’s unfinished life.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  December 25, 2019 at 10:59 am

      linda:

      thank you. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply

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