Missing Someone

January 22, 2020 at 8:55 am 34 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 24 January 2020

Na’ama Yehuda
Photo Credit: Na’ama Yehuda

 
Reuben had decided to cut his vacation short. He was terribly missing someone back home.

“I heard that you’re leaving this weekend,” Elena said while they were having ice cream at Swensen’s. After meeting at a local dance, she started having romantic feelings towards him.

“Darn, I guess somebody beat me to it. I meant to tell you today.”

“You must be getting bored of this sleepy little town.”

“Not at all. On the contrary, I have enjoyed my stay.”

“Is someone waiting for you, a special girl perhaps?” she asked, her voice quivering.

“Yes, but it’s a boy actually.”

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34 Comments Add your own

  • 1. neilmacdon  |  January 22, 2020 at 9:16 am

    Nice twist

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    • 2. plaridel  |  January 22, 2020 at 5:02 pm

      neil:

      i did one final edit to the story. hope it helped. 🙂

      Reply
  • 3. ceayr  |  January 22, 2020 at 10:08 am

    Love doesn’t care about anything as trivial as gender

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    • 4. plaridel  |  January 22, 2020 at 5:02 pm

      ceayr:

      true, love is gender blind.

      Reply
  • 5. granonine  |  January 22, 2020 at 10:13 am

    Another twist like Penny’s. And I didn’t see this one coming, either 🙂

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    • 6. plaridel  |  January 22, 2020 at 5:01 pm

      linda:

      glad it worked for you. 🙂

      Reply
  • 7. Iain Kelly  |  January 22, 2020 at 11:16 am

    Poor Elena. At least she found out before she did anything more embarrassing.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  January 22, 2020 at 5:01 pm

      iain:

      if anything, that’s her saving grace.

      Reply
  • 9. msjadeli  |  January 22, 2020 at 11:51 am

    Well-told tale, Plaridel. I’m glad they will soon be reunited.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  January 22, 2020 at 5:01 pm

      msjadeli:

      well, who knows what the future brings. 🙂

      Reply
  • 11. Dale  |  January 22, 2020 at 12:32 pm

    Love is love… too bad she was crushing on someone who is crushing on someone else…

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    • 12. plaridel  |  January 22, 2020 at 5:00 pm

      dale:

      such is life. 😦

      Reply
  • 13. Na'ama Yehuda  |  January 22, 2020 at 3:11 pm

    Nicely done! I hope he and his interest work out! 🙂

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    • 14. plaridel  |  January 22, 2020 at 5:00 pm

      na’ama:

      he’s keeping his fingers crossed. 🙂

      Reply
  • 15. draliman  |  January 22, 2020 at 11:53 pm

    Boy or girl, she’s sadly out of luck.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  January 23, 2020 at 8:54 am

      draliman:

      at least, she can enjoy the ice cream.

      Reply
  • 17. Tannille  |  January 23, 2020 at 3:51 am

    Perhaps the boy is a son? Although it could be a lover. Depends on the reading. Nice job!

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    • 18. plaridel  |  January 23, 2020 at 8:53 am

      tannille:

      the boy is a son? that would make it a better twist, wouldn’t it?

      Reply
      • 19. Tannille  |  January 24, 2020 at 8:43 pm

        Both good, but son most would see coming 😀 – I think.

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        • 20. plaridel  |  January 25, 2020 at 7:09 pm

          tannille:

          better keep it as it is then. 🙂

          Reply
  • 21. Sandra  |  January 23, 2020 at 5:49 am

    As well to find these things out early. And so much easier to do that nowadays.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  January 23, 2020 at 8:53 am

      sandra:

      it’s a new world for sure.

      Reply
  • 23. rochellewisoff  |  January 23, 2020 at 6:09 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    I hope things work out for all concerned. I didn’t see the twist coming.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 24. plaridel  |  January 23, 2020 at 8:53 am

      rochelle:

      she’s young. she can get over it.

      Reply
  • 25. Keith's Ramblings  |  January 23, 2020 at 8:52 am

    Worth checking first these days!

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    • 26. plaridel  |  January 23, 2020 at 9:58 am

      keith:

      it’s not a bad idea. 🙂

      Reply
  • 27. susanmehr  |  January 24, 2020 at 5:11 am

    Love the twist.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  January 25, 2020 at 7:10 pm

      susan:

      i’m glad you liked it. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 29. Liz Young  |  January 24, 2020 at 6:51 am

    At least she found out before she got in too deep.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  January 25, 2020 at 7:10 pm

      liz:

      it could be a blessing in disquise.

      Reply
  • 31. Bernadette Braganza  |  January 24, 2020 at 9:21 am

    Poor Elena. She fell for the wrong guy.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  January 25, 2020 at 7:09 pm

      bernadette:

      it happens sometimes. 😦

      Reply
  • 33. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)  |  January 26, 2020 at 1:15 pm

    This is not the first time… but the good news is that for once it’s safe to say: “but let’s be friends”… it might be even better.

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    • 34. plaridel  |  January 28, 2020 at 9:43 am

      björn:

      it’s something for them to think about. 🙂

      Reply

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