A Friend Remembered

February 12, 2020 at 12:00 pm 32 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 14 February 2020

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

 
It was on these back steps that Tommy and I used to sit and share our dreams. We were the best of buddies. He had that engaging laughter I could still hear in my mind.

One day I rode my bike and Tommy followed me on his skateboard. As we were crossing the street, he was struck by a speeding car.

“Peter!” I remember him uttering my name before he passed out. He later died due to his injuries.

His death left an emptiness in my heart that could never be filled. After all these years, I still miss him.

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32 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Psychic-Medium-Author Ronda Del Boccio  |  February 12, 2020 at 1:30 pm

    People do leave imprints! Good story.
    Ronda

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    • 2. plaridel  |  February 12, 2020 at 6:17 pm

      ronda:

      i totally agree.

      Reply
  • 3. Iain Kelly  |  February 12, 2020 at 4:15 pm

    A tragic tale. Poor Tommy.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  February 12, 2020 at 6:16 pm

      iain:

      the idea of somebody dying young is contrary to the natural order of things.

      Reply
  • 5. Tannille  |  February 12, 2020 at 11:04 pm

    Some people can’t be replaced. The loss is strong.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  February 13, 2020 at 8:59 am

      tannille:

      tommy was more than a brother to him.

      Reply
  • 7. ceayr  |  February 13, 2020 at 5:42 am

    I like the matter-of-fact delivery of this painful tale

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    • 8. plaridel  |  February 13, 2020 at 8:59 am

      ceayr:

      sometimes, there’s no better way of telling a story than just telling it like it is.

      Reply
  • 9. draliman  |  February 13, 2020 at 5:57 am

    Very sad. He’ll never forget him.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  February 13, 2020 at 8:59 am

      draliman:

      for sure, he’ll always remember him.

      Reply
  • 11. Keith's Ramblings  |  February 13, 2020 at 6:32 am

    The fact that Peter’s name was the last word Tommy uttered will have made it all the more difficult to find closure. A sad tale indeed.

    Here’s mine!

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    • 12. plaridel  |  February 13, 2020 at 8:58 am

      keith:

      that and thinking he was partly to be blamed for his death. if he didn’t ask him to go with him, it wouldn’t have happened.

      Reply
  • 13. rochellewisoff  |  February 13, 2020 at 6:36 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Such a believable and poignant story. I hope it’s not based on a truth in your life. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 14. plaridel  |  February 13, 2020 at 8:58 am

      rochelle:

      it’s very perceptive of you. it’s based on a true story although the circumstances have been changed.

      Reply
  • 15. Dale  |  February 13, 2020 at 8:16 am

    What a heart-breaking tale. It is one Peter will never forget, that is for sure. Well written.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  February 13, 2020 at 8:57 am

      dale:

      he’ll likely take tommy’s memory to the grave.

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      • 17. Dale  |  February 13, 2020 at 9:00 am

        He will, without a doubt.

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        • 18. plaridel  |  February 15, 2020 at 9:11 am

          dale:

          i totally agree.

          Reply
  • 19. Susan A Eames  |  February 13, 2020 at 10:30 am

    Beautifully poignant story and even sadder that it’s based on a true story.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • 20. plaridel  |  February 15, 2020 at 9:11 am

      susan:

      thank you for reading and commenting, it meant a lot.

      Reply
  • 21. granonine  |  February 14, 2020 at 11:38 am

    This is some of the most realistic fiction you’ve written, which makes me wonder if it’s based on truth. I liked the matter-of-fact tone, almost like an emotionless news story, that you’ve used in relating this incredibly sad tale.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  February 15, 2020 at 9:10 am

      linda:

      it was a fictionalized story of my cousin who was hit by a bus while crossing the street.

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      • 23. granonine  |  February 15, 2020 at 12:54 pm

        OH, I was afraid of something like that. So sad!

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        • 24. plaridel  |  February 18, 2020 at 11:37 am

          linda:

          i know.

          Reply
  • 25. Alicia Jamtaas  |  February 14, 2020 at 11:55 am

    This is a sweet and sad tale of friendship had and lost. Well done.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  February 15, 2020 at 9:09 am

      alicia:

      i deeply appreciate your comment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 27. Liz Young  |  February 15, 2020 at 4:29 am

    What a sad story!

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    • 28. plaridel  |  February 15, 2020 at 9:08 am

      liz:

      thank you for reading as usual. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 29. michaelwynnauthor  |  February 15, 2020 at 6:12 am

    Very sad tale, told powerfully

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    • 30. plaridel  |  February 15, 2020 at 9:05 am

      mick:

      thank you for the kind comment.

      Reply
  • 31. James McEwan  |  February 15, 2020 at 11:29 am

    such a sad event. Your story captures the sadness.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  February 18, 2020 at 11:38 am

      james:

      i appreciate the comment. thank you.

      Reply

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