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April 8, 2020 at 9:16 am 44 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 10 April 2020

Jeff Arnold
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Ariel had never been so close to Enya before. It was heavenly feeling her warm body against his own. But somehow she became restless and wanted to switch positions.

“Alright,” he said while looking into her pleading eyes.

For sometime now, they found themselves out on the ocean using a cooler as a floating device. Unable to reach shore because of strong currents, they were about to lose hope when a passing cruise ship finally spotted them.

Suffering from the cold and hypothermia, Ariel and Enya were the last survivors of the migrant boat that sank off the Aegean coast.

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  • 1. Susan A Eames  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:02 am

    I didn’t see where this was leading when I started reading it, so thanks for surprising me and glad they made it.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • 2. plaridel  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:03 pm

      susan:

      I’m glad it worked. thank you for reading.

      Reply
  • 3. michael1148humphris  |  April 8, 2020 at 12:46 pm

    A piece of fiction to make one think, well told Plaridel

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    • 4. plaridel  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:03 pm

      michael:

      i’m deeply flattered. thank you.

      Reply
  • 5. msjadeli  |  April 8, 2020 at 1:46 pm

    I like the misdirection in the beginning, became invested in their well-being in the middle, and was relieved at the end, but still heartbroken they were the only survivors. As if refugees didn’t have it bad before, it’s got to be unbearable and even more dangerous for them now 😦

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    • 6. plaridel  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:02 pm

      msjadeli:

      what a well-thought out comment. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 7. rochellewisoff  |  April 8, 2020 at 2:51 pm

    Dear Plaridel,

    I hope help comes soon. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 8. plaridel  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:02 pm

      rochelle:

      if a country accepts them as refugees that would be the happy ending.

      Reply
  • 9. Dale  |  April 8, 2020 at 3:15 pm

    Help from a cruise ship… romantic in a crazy way…

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    • 10. plaridel  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:02 pm

      dale:

      well, at least they were rescured in style. πŸ™‚

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      • 11. Dale  |  April 9, 2020 at 7:03 am

        Definitely!

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        • 12. plaridel  |  April 9, 2020 at 11:42 am

          dale:

          πŸ™‚

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  • 13. Iain Kelly  |  April 8, 2020 at 3:26 pm

    Sucker punch in the last reveal. Nicely done.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:01 pm

      iain:

      i appreciated the generous comment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 15. Na'ama Yehuda  |  April 8, 2020 at 4:20 pm

    Nice twist about a sad reality.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  April 8, 2020 at 10:01 pm

      na’ama:

      you’re very kind. thank you.

      Reply
  • Well now, you threw a wet blanket on that fantasy.
    Tracey

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  • 21. Brenda's Thoughts  |  April 9, 2020 at 6:07 am

    Well, what a twist! I’m very glad they were rescued in the end.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  April 9, 2020 at 11:43 am

      brenda:

      thank you for your comment. i’m glad you liked it.

      Reply
  • 23. theministryofshrawleywalks  |  April 9, 2020 at 6:40 am

    Nice take, I wasn’t expecting that!

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  • 27. granonine  |  April 9, 2020 at 9:59 am

    Fact or fiction? Quite believable! Very sympathetic characters.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  April 9, 2020 at 11:42 am

      linda:

      although fact can be stranger than fiction, this story is real fiction. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 29. ceayr  |  April 9, 2020 at 1:01 pm

    Strange how the refugees, the Australian bushfires and even sodding Brexit have all disappeared from the news bulletins.
    Excellent story and timely reminder, Plaridel, that for some the situation has gone from life-threatening to much worse.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  April 10, 2020 at 9:09 am

      ceayr:

      understandable considering covering the pandemic has caught everybody’s attention span for now.

      Reply
  • 31. Tannille  |  April 9, 2020 at 10:10 pm

    Great story. However, I kept seeing the mermaid Ariel & the singer Enya. Haha.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  April 10, 2020 at 9:09 am

      tannille:

      in that case, i could relate. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 33. Sandra  |  April 9, 2020 at 11:55 pm

    Hopefully this is the start of better things.

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    • 34. plaridel  |  April 10, 2020 at 9:08 am

      sandra:

      i’m sure there’ll be more challenges ahead but i’m confident they’re up to it considerating what they had gone through.

      Reply
  • 35. Alicia Jamtaas  |  April 10, 2020 at 6:58 am

    What a delightfully happy ending to a scene that I think is played out far too often these days.

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    • 36. plaridel  |  April 10, 2020 at 9:07 am

      alicia:

      i love happy ending. πŸ™‚

      Reply
  • 37. An Introverted blogger  |  April 10, 2020 at 11:57 am

    I loved this! I did not anticipate it going like this! Brilliant!

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    • 38. plaridel  |  April 11, 2020 at 8:59 am

      nadia:

      it was fun to write. thank you for your kind comment.

      Reply
  • 39. draliman  |  April 10, 2020 at 10:38 pm

    Sadly true to life, nice one!

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    • 40. plaridel  |  April 11, 2020 at 8:57 am

      draliman:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you.

      Reply
  • 41. pennygadd51  |  April 11, 2020 at 2:44 am

    Good misdirection at the beginning, and an upbeat ending.

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    • 42. plaridel  |  April 11, 2020 at 8:56 am

      penny:

      it’s very kind of you. thank you.

      Reply
  • 43. Inside the Mind of Isadora  |  April 13, 2020 at 11:27 am

    That was a surprise ending. I like the way you crafted this story.
    Nicely done …
    Isadora 😎

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    • 44. plaridel  |  April 14, 2020 at 3:14 pm

      isadora:

      your comment is much appreciated. thank you, πŸ™‚

      Reply

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