The Steeplechase

December 9, 2020 at 2:07 pm 36 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 11 December 2020

Roger Bultot
Photo Credit: Roger Bultot

 
Such a lovely day at the amusement park. It was warm and sunny and no clouds in the sky. Everybody seemed to be enjoying themselves despite the crowd.

From the distance, Brian saw his mom and little sister took the steeplechase. It was his favorite roller coaster ride.

It was amazing how awesome it still looked since he died. He missed it terribly.

Brian wished he could take it for one more spin and share the joy and excitement that Sara was feeling as the train went up and down hills. But for now all he could do was watch.

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36 Comments Add your own

  • 1. neilmacdon  |  December 9, 2020 at 3:41 pm

    He could hover above it, maybe?

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    • 2. plaridel  |  December 9, 2020 at 6:51 pm

      neil:

      alas, it wasn’t the real thing.

      Reply
  • 3. trishsplace  |  December 9, 2020 at 5:16 pm

    He could go on the ride with them, but perhaps not feel the same sensations ‘out of body’. Good one.

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    • 4. plaridel  |  December 9, 2020 at 6:51 pm

      trish:

      under the circumstances, that’s the best he could do.

      Reply
  • 5. Sascha Darlington  |  December 9, 2020 at 9:31 pm

    I guess he can only live vicariously through them but hopefully their enjoyment will be his.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:46 am

      sascha:

      i suppose that’s one way of looking at it.

      Reply
  • 7. Sandra  |  December 10, 2020 at 2:13 am

    Sad story.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:45 am

      sandra:

      i know.

      Reply
  • 9. justjoyfulness  |  December 10, 2020 at 2:30 am

    What greater excitement than being a ghost and going wherever one wants 🙂

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    • 10. plaridel  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:45 am

      justjoyfulness:

      in a way, i suppose.

      Reply
  • 11. rochellewisoff  |  December 10, 2020 at 4:33 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    An interesting perspective from the other side. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 12. plaridel  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:45 am

      rochelle:

      what a generous comment. thanks for reading as usual.

      Reply
  • 13. Iain Kelly  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:20 am

    A shame he can’t join them. Nice that they still go on it and I’m sure they remember him.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:45 am

      iain:

      they’re probably doing it in his memory.

      Reply
  • 15. draliman  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:21 am

    Stuck on Earth, watching everyone enjoying his favourite things. Hopefully he will be able to move on soon.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  December 10, 2020 at 9:44 am

      draliman:

      it may take time but hope springs eternal.

      Reply
  • 17. Tannille  |  December 10, 2020 at 11:31 pm

    Great take on the prompt. Limbo doesn’t sound great.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  December 11, 2020 at 3:35 pm

      tannille:

      i agree, being in limbo is the pits.

      Reply
  • 19. James McEwan  |  December 11, 2020 at 1:56 am

    This makes you wonder if we are all being observed by our dearly departed. Ooops.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  December 11, 2020 at 3:34 pm

      james:

      earthbound souls do. 🙂

      Reply
  • 21. Keith's Ramblings  |  December 11, 2020 at 4:41 am

    At least he likes what he sees.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  December 11, 2020 at 3:34 pm

      keith:

      if that’s any consolation.

      Reply
  • 23. Brenda's Thoughts  |  December 11, 2020 at 1:38 pm

    How sad, but at least he can see them and watch their excitement in riding the roller coaster.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  December 11, 2020 at 3:38 pm

      brenda:

      if that’s any consolation…

      Reply
  • 25. Russell Gayer  |  December 11, 2020 at 3:07 pm

    Poor spirit. He has a lot of time on his hands and no one to share it with.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  December 11, 2020 at 3:34 pm

      russell:

      if he looks hard enough, he’ll find kindred spirits around him.

      Reply
  • 27. granonine  |  December 12, 2020 at 5:37 am

    I found this very sad. Apparently a young boy died way too soon. I hope his mom and sister think of him as they enjoy their ride.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  December 14, 2020 at 9:29 am

      linda:

      i’m sure he was always in their mind.

      Reply
  • 29. msjadeli  |  December 12, 2020 at 9:43 am

    Such a poignant story. I like how you matter-of-factly injected that he was dead.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  December 14, 2020 at 9:29 am

      msjadeli:

      i thought pointing the obvious outright will help in this story.

      Reply
  • 31. ahtdoucette  |  December 12, 2020 at 3:58 pm

    Creepy and fun ghost story! I like it.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  December 14, 2020 at 9:29 am

      anne:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you. 🙂

      Reply
  • 33. Dale  |  December 13, 2020 at 9:20 am

    One would think a ghost could join in on any of these things. How disappointing to find it not so!

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    • 34. plaridel  |  December 14, 2020 at 9:28 am

      dale:

      i’m afraid so.

      Reply
      • 35. Dale  |  December 14, 2020 at 10:12 am

        Sad state of affairs…

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        • 36. plaridel  |  December 16, 2020 at 7:47 pm

          dale:

          absolutely right.

          Reply

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