Eerie Quiet and Dark
December 22, 2021 at 1:01 pm 39 comments
For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 24 December 2021
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| Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields |
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Todd felt weird when he arrived home. Amid twinkling Christmas lights around the neighborhood, it was eerie quiet and dark.
Getting out of his car, he wondered if everything was alright. He remembered calling Dolores that he was on the way home, but there was no answer.
Knowing their neighbor was broken into recently only added to his anxiety.
Nervously, he grabbed the key from his pocket, opened the door, and turned on the lights fearing the worst.
“Surprise!” Dolores and their friends yelled as he entered. “Happy birthday, Darling!”
It was a celebration he’d remember for a long time.
Entry filed under: Blogroll, Daily Post, friday fictioneers. Tags: 100-word challenge, fiction, humor.
Musings of a Random Mind 
1.
beth | December 22, 2021 at 2:45 pm
oh! ))
2.
plaridel | December 23, 2021 at 9:12 am
beth:
indeed. 🙂
3.
neilmacdon | December 22, 2021 at 2:48 pm
Did he yell at her for scaring him? Even just a little yell, just at first?
4.
plaridel | December 23, 2021 at 9:11 am
neil:
nah, he was a good sport. 🙂
5.
James McEwan | December 23, 2021 at 3:49 am
I can just feel his sense of relief, after your build up.
6.
plaridel | December 23, 2021 at 9:11 am
james:
glad it worked. i admit it’s a rehash of an old storyline. 🙂
7.
Bernadette Braganza | December 23, 2021 at 6:30 am
Did he attack or faint? That would surely make the celebration unforgettable?
8.
plaridel | December 23, 2021 at 9:11 am
bernadette:
he almost fainted. 🙂
9.
oneta hayes | December 23, 2021 at 7:27 am
I love happy endings. Happy Birthday, Todd.
10.
plaridel | December 23, 2021 at 9:10 am
oneta:
me too. 🙂
11.
msjadeli | December 23, 2021 at 9:48 am
Good tension setting in this, Plaridel. Usually people with birthdays near Christmas get cheated so the surprise party will be doubly appreciated 🙂
12.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 8:48 am
msjadeli:
thank you for reading. happy holidays! 🙂
13.
msjadeli | December 24, 2021 at 9:02 am
You’re welcome and Happy Holidays to You and Your Family 🙂
14.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 10:07 pm
msjadeli:
🙂
15.
GHLearner | December 23, 2021 at 1:58 pm
What a lovely surprise for him. Lovely story!
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plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 8:48 am
gabi:
i was surprised ending my story that way too. i initially thought of something dark. it must be the season. 🙂
17.
Dale | December 23, 2021 at 8:29 pm
Oh dear! He must have wanted to either lunge or faint! Original story!
18.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 8:47 am
dale:
it was a rehash of an old theme. you must have read variations of the same story before. 🙂
19.
Dale | December 24, 2021 at 9:12 am
True. 🙂
20.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 10:06 pm
dale:
🙂
21.
Brenda's Thoughts | December 24, 2021 at 1:56 am
Oh my, from fear to exhilaration. I agree, a birthday he won’t forget any time soon. Clever story and very suspenseful. Well done!
22.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 8:46 am
brenda:
i appreciate your lovely comment very much. thank you. 🙂
23.
Sandra | December 24, 2021 at 2:33 am
A lovely ending!
24.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 8:46 am
sandra:
i’m glad you liked it. thank you. 🙂
25.
rochellewisoff | December 24, 2021 at 6:10 am
Dear Plaridel,
Love it! Such a happy story.
Shalom and Merry Christmas,
Rochelle
26.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 8:46 am
rochelle:
thank you for reading as usual. may the spirit of the season be with you and your loved ones.
27.
draliman | December 24, 2021 at 7:31 am
Phew, a happy homecoming after all.
28.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 8:45 am
draliman:
what a relief indeed. 🙂
29.
Keith's Ramblings | December 24, 2021 at 9:06 am
I like a happy ending! Nice one.
30.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 10:07 pm
keith:
cheers! who doesn’t? happy holidays to you and loved ones. 🙂
31.
Bill | December 24, 2021 at 12:52 pm
Why was I anticipating disaster? Well done.
32.
plaridel | December 24, 2021 at 10:06 pm
bill:
gotcha! happy holidays! 🙂
33.
Bill | December 25, 2021 at 1:01 am
🙂
34.
pennygadd51 | December 26, 2021 at 1:41 pm
Well done – you built the tension nicely, and then gave us a happy ending. Happy Christmas!
35.
plaridel | December 28, 2021 at 3:09 pm
penny:
thank you for reading and commenting as usual. it makes writing worthwhile. 🙂
36.
Tannille | December 26, 2021 at 8:08 pm
I hope he didn’t have a heart attack…Great twist.
37.
plaridel | December 28, 2021 at 3:09 pm
tannille:
thank goodness, he didn’t. he could have wet his pants, though. 🙂
38.
jillyfunnell | December 28, 2021 at 5:37 am
Great to have a happy ending – I was fully anticipating something quite different.
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plaridel | December 28, 2021 at 3:09 pm
jilly:
i love happy ending. 🙂