The Fall
June 8, 2022 at 9:04 am 31 comments
For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 10 June 2022
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“I’m bored and have nothing to do,” Eve grumbled.
“Why don’t we go up to the top of the fall?” she told Adam. “I’m sure we’ll be rewarded with an amazing view of the garden and surrounding areas.”
“Are you sure? The climb could be steep and dangerous. I don’t think the Lord would consent.”
“There you are again. Why don’t you grow some spine?”
“Are you coming or not?”
“Alright, if you lead the way.”
“Just follow me then.”
In the meantime, the serpent could be seen smiling and shaking his head while watching the couple from the distance.
Entry filed under: Blogroll, Daily Post, friday fictioneers. Tags: 100-word challenge, fiction, humor.
Musings of a Random Mind 
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pennygadd51 | June 8, 2022 at 10:46 am
Oh, dear! There are so many beautiful distractions aren’t there? Seems to me, the serpent just need to watch and smile.
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plaridel | June 8, 2022 at 3:25 pm
penny:
the serpent was biding his time waiting for the right moment to strike. 🙂
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neilmacdon | June 8, 2022 at 12:52 pm
I’ve never understood the Fall story. Why make a garden and then put bits of it out of bounds?
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plaridel | June 8, 2022 at 3:25 pm
neil:
i guess it was to make the story more interesting. 🙂
5.
Iain Kelly | June 8, 2022 at 1:23 pm
The first signs of rebellion!
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plaridel | June 8, 2022 at 3:24 pm
iain:
you’re absolutely right. 🙂
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Tracey at Whatsfordinnerdoc.com and TraceyDelaplainMD.com | June 8, 2022 at 4:01 pm
Why is it always Eve’s fault? Can’t a girl get a break? Ha ha
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plaridel | June 9, 2022 at 9:39 am
tracey:
you could see that she was a force of nature.
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Frank Hubeny | June 9, 2022 at 5:51 am
I like your description of grumbling Eve. Adam should have told her, no.
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plaridel | June 9, 2022 at 9:38 am
frank:
he should have learned not to give in so easily. give her an inch, she’d demand a foot. 🙂
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Keith's Ramblings | June 9, 2022 at 8:35 am
It’s clear who wears the trousers (or historical equivalent!) in that relationship!
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plaridel | June 9, 2022 at 9:38 am
keith:
i couldn’t agree more. 🙂
13.
Bill | June 9, 2022 at 11:41 am
These two get so much press. Nicely conceived, well executed. 🙂
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plaridel | June 10, 2022 at 8:06 pm
bill:
they’re one of my favorite subjects for sure. 🙂
15.
GHLearner | June 10, 2022 at 9:17 am
What a bore Adam is. Explains a lot of what happens next. 😉
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plaridel | June 10, 2022 at 8:06 pm
gabi:
i know, i know. 🙂
17.
granonine | June 10, 2022 at 1:08 pm
Nicely done. A different twist on an old story 🙂
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plaridel | June 10, 2022 at 8:06 pm
linda:
thanks for the lovely comment. much appreciated. 🙂
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Brenda's Thoughts | June 10, 2022 at 3:42 pm
The serpent was gathering intel. No wonder he chose Eve. Creative take on the prompt and the old story. 🙂
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plaridel | June 10, 2022 at 8:05 pm
brenda:
it’s very generous of you. thank you for reading and commenting as usual. 🙂
21.
James McEwan | June 11, 2022 at 12:38 am
Yep, there is always someone in the background waiting to pounce on peoples mistakes.
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plaridel | June 13, 2022 at 7:50 am
james:
such is life.
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Margaret | June 11, 2022 at 10:58 pm
Oh he’s a sneaky creature. They’d better watch out for him. Sadly, the ending of this story shows they never did. The picture does look like a paradise.
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plaridel | June 13, 2022 at 7:50 am
margaret:
they were doomed from the start.
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Sandra | June 12, 2022 at 2:22 am
The serpent must have endless hours of amusement.
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plaridel | June 13, 2022 at 7:50 am
sandra:
true that. 🙂
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msjadeli | June 12, 2022 at 6:42 pm
I didn’t catch on with the names at first but when I saw serpent I went back and read again. And that’s just how it happens. Way leads on to way and the next thing you know you’re burning in hell 😉
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plaridel | June 13, 2022 at 7:49 am
msjadeli:
like they say, the die was cast. 🙂
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msjadeli | June 13, 2022 at 8:12 am
🙂
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rochellewisoff | June 13, 2022 at 6:37 am
Dear Plaridel,
Trouble in Paradise. I love your imaginative Biblical takes. Nicely written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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plaridel | June 13, 2022 at 7:49 am
rochelle:
i find it fun. so far, i’d written about 20 of them for friday fictioneers. 🙂