No Turning Back
July 29, 2020 at 9:13 am 38 comments
For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 31 July 2020
Photo Credit: Jean L. Hays |
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When Adam announced he was leaving to pursue his dreams, his father didn’t take it well.
The old man wanted him to live a simple, contented life in the town where the family had lived for generations.
For him, it was too confining. He felt trapped like the dolphin in the stained glass window panel wanting to be free.
“Just call when you need a return ticket,” his father said when he couldn‘t be stopped.
“Thanks, Papa, I promise.”
It was a lie. After signing up on a one-way mission to populate Mars, Adam knew there was no turning back.
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1. Susan A Eames | July 29, 2020 at 9:24 am
Great ending – so unexpected. Liked your take on the photo prompt!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
2. plaridel | July 29, 2020 at 11:41 am
susan:
i’m glad you liked it. thank you.
3. neilmacdon | July 29, 2020 at 9:33 am
Not trapped at all then, except by his need to escape
4. plaridel | July 29, 2020 at 11:40 am
neil:
that’s one way of looking at it. 🙂
5. Iain Kelly | July 29, 2020 at 10:11 am
That’s an expensive ticket. Hope he makes the most of it.
6. plaridel | July 29, 2020 at 11:40 am
iain:
he’ll likely get a free ride. 🙂
7. Gabriella | July 29, 2020 at 10:59 am
I was wondering where he was headed. I would never have guessed. Well-done!
8. plaridel | July 29, 2020 at 11:40 am
gabriella:
it’s very generous of you. thank you. 🙂
9. ceayr | July 29, 2020 at 11:20 am
Sometimes a man’s gotta do…
10. plaridel | July 29, 2020 at 11:40 am
ceayr:
most absolutely. 🙂
11. msjadeli | July 29, 2020 at 12:59 pm
I love that twist you spun at the end, Plaridel. Very well-told story. I hope he finds what’s he’s looking for out there.
12. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:23 am
msjadeli:
he better finds it for there’s no way he can come back.
13. rochellewisoff | July 29, 2020 at 4:56 pm
Dear Plaridel,
A one-way ticket to Mars? No, i don’t suppose he’ll be coming back. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
14. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:22 am
rochelle:
i’m afraid he’ll be there for good whether he likes it or not.
15. draliman | July 29, 2020 at 10:17 pm
Wow, there’s getting away – and then there’s getting away!
16. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:22 am
draliman:
true that. 🙂
17. Tannille | July 30, 2020 at 12:20 am
Guessing there won’t be postcards from Mars. Follow dreams vs loved ones – tricky.
18. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:21 am
tannille:
such is life.
19. Sandra | July 30, 2020 at 2:52 am
Wasn’t expecting that ending.
20. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:21 am
sandra:
i consider that a great compliment. thank you.
21. Keith's Ramblings | July 30, 2020 at 3:15 am
Rather him than me! Nice one plaridel.
Here’s mine!
22. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:20 am
keith:
i don’t blame you. 🙂
23. justjoyfulness | July 30, 2020 at 3:26 am
He must have felt really really trapped. Wasn’t expecting the trip to Mars.
24. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:20 am
justjoyfulness:
neither do i. it was last minute decision to end the story that way. 🙂
25. James McEwan | July 30, 2020 at 4:17 am
I liked how this ended, I am not sure if his father really understood the full impact of him moving to Mars. Sometimes I wish I could escape to Mars.
26. plaridel | July 30, 2020 at 9:19 am
james:
his father didn’t have a clue he’d be going to another planet. otherwise, he’d lock him up in his room. 🙂
27. Bill | July 30, 2020 at 2:34 pm
And that’s that. Well done. Enjoyed it.
28. plaridel | August 3, 2020 at 1:21 pm
bill:
i’m glad you liked it. thank you. 🙂
29. subroto | July 31, 2020 at 3:19 pm
That’s a nice twist at the end. No too far fetched though considering the Mars One Mission plans to land humans there in 2031.
30. plaridel | August 3, 2020 at 1:21 pm
subroto:
it looks like mars one has run out of funds. i believe humans will land in mars in our lifetime, though.
31. Liz Young | August 1, 2020 at 10:36 am
So clearly he didn’t tell Dad where he was going? That’s rather sad.
32. plaridel | August 3, 2020 at 1:20 pm
liz:
dad didn’t have a clue.
33. Eugenia Parrish Author | August 3, 2020 at 8:46 am
Whoa, what a wild last line! Typical story, and then wham. Great job.
34. plaridel | August 3, 2020 at 1:20 pm
eugenia:
you’re very kind. thank you. 🙂
35. granonine | August 3, 2020 at 11:44 am
I wonder—was Eve also a part of the mission?
36. plaridel | August 3, 2020 at 1:19 pm
linda:
it was a given. 🙂
37. Inside the Mind of Isadora | August 4, 2020 at 10:09 am
Nicely done, Plaridel. The ending brings it all together.
Isadora 😎
38. plaridel | August 5, 2020 at 9:39 am
isadora:
if you say so… thank you very much.