The Spy

April 20, 2022 at 2:07 pm 28 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 22 April 2022

Carole Erdman-Grant
Photo Credit: Carole Erdman-Grant

 
It was a favorite hangout for servicemen from the nearby military base. From nowhere, she came to work there until the war destroyed it with the rest of his hometown.

All that remained of it was a shell of its former self and vandals had defiled it more with graffiti. It might be next to impossible to restore it to its past glory.

He realized there was something she should have told him but didn’t, and there was something he shouldn’t have said but did. It was all moot now. Along with the invaders, she was gone without saying goodbye.

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28 Comments Add your own

  • 1. neilmacdon  |  April 20, 2022 at 2:24 pm

    Beautifully rendered with mystery and poignancy

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    • 2. plaridel  |  April 20, 2022 at 6:59 pm

      neil:

      what a generous comment. much appreciated. 🙂

      Reply
  • 3. larry trasciatti  |  April 20, 2022 at 2:24 pm

    That’s a hidden part of the collateral damage of war

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    • 4. plaridel  |  April 20, 2022 at 6:59 pm

      larry:

      i couldn’t agree more.

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  • 5. Frank Hubeny  |  April 20, 2022 at 3:00 pm

    Nice story of remembrance. I wonder if he could fix the place up.

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    • 6. plaridel  |  April 20, 2022 at 6:58 pm

      frank:

      i think he’d fix it up if he could.

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  • 7. Iain Kelly  |  April 21, 2022 at 12:55 am

    Enjoyed the mystery behind this one. Well done.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  April 22, 2022 at 9:49 am

      iain:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you for the usual siupport.

      Reply
  • 9. Bill  |  April 21, 2022 at 9:18 am

    There is much surrounding this story. Well done.

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    • 10. plaridel  |  April 22, 2022 at 9:49 am

      bill:

      glad you enjoyed it. thank you for reading.

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  • 11. GHLearner  |  April 22, 2022 at 5:27 am

    Too late and all that’s left are regrets. I enjoyed this (although it’s so sad).

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    • 12. plaridel  |  April 22, 2022 at 9:49 am

      gabi:

      sadness, that’s what came to me when i looked at the photo prompt.

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  • 13. draliman  |  April 22, 2022 at 8:09 am

    It’s not just buildings that are destroyed by war.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  April 22, 2022 at 9:48 am

      draliman:

      the emotional aftermath can be tragic as well.

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  • 15. rochellewisoff  |  April 22, 2022 at 8:21 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    So much story told in a small space. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 16. plaridel  |  April 22, 2022 at 9:48 am

      rochelle:

      so much remained unsaid to so as not to exceed 100 words. glad it still made sense. 🙂

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  • 17. Tannille  |  April 22, 2022 at 10:04 pm

    So much left unsaid. Intriguing.

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    • 18. plaridel  |  April 24, 2022 at 9:49 am

      tannille:

      thank you for reading and support. much appreciated. 🙂

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  • 19. Keith's Ramblings  |  April 23, 2022 at 6:10 am

    What might have been, what could have been if only things were said. Nice one plaridel.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  April 24, 2022 at 9:49 am

      keith:

      i know the sentiment very well. thank you for reading. 🙂

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  • 21. Margaret  |  April 23, 2022 at 5:34 pm

    I love where you went with this. It’s a perfect balance of what you tell and what you leave out for the reader to fill in. The final paragraph is so beautifully expressed.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  April 24, 2022 at 9:48 am

      margaret:

      it’s very kind of you. thank you. 🙂

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  • 23. pennygadd51  |  April 25, 2022 at 2:00 am

    Lovely story. You have been subtle in how you have balanced what you tell the reader and what you leave to their imagination. I can’t help wondering whether the main character has fathered a child by the woman.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  April 27, 2022 at 12:16 pm

      penny:

      i doubt it. no long-term romance here if ever there was one. she was after all a spy planted by the invaders.

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  • 25. msjadeli  |  April 25, 2022 at 6:27 pm

    If that building symbolizes anything, it is abandonment. Your story reflects that atmosphere very well.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  April 27, 2022 at 12:16 pm

      msjadeli:

      thank you for your insight. much appreciated. 🙂

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      • 27. msjadeli  |  April 27, 2022 at 1:12 pm

        You are welcome 🙂

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        • 28. plaridel  |  April 27, 2022 at 7:04 pm

          msjadeli:

          🙂

          Reply

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