Brotherly Love
August 2, 2017 at 10:05 am 59 comments
For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 4 August 2017
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Photo Credit: Dale Rogerson
Ahmad respected Annisa’s decision to marry Farhan even though the family didn’t approve. At the same time, he was duty-bound to protect his sister.
One day, he saw Annisa with a black eye and swollen lips.
“I slipped and fell,” she said averting his eyes.
The following day, Farhan didn’t come home. His body was later found floating in the river.
Annisa confronted Ahmad as he came bringing flowers.
“You killed him,” she screamed. “You killed my husband and the father of my child.”
Ahmad ignored the outburst, placed the bouquet on the table, and left without saying a word.
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Musings of a Random Mind 
1.
Zee | August 2, 2017 at 11:36 am
Oh man !!!😧😧
2.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 12:55 pm
zee:
the brother knows once a husband lays a hand on his wife, he’s bound to do it again.
3.
Jelli | August 2, 2017 at 12:37 pm
Now, THAT is love.
4.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 12:55 pm
jelli:
he needed to protect his sister from that scum at all cost.
5.
Jelli | August 3, 2017 at 8:56 am
I agree. One does what on must when one can! 🙂 ❤
6.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:13 am
jelli:
i second the motion. 🙂
7.
Alice Audrey | August 2, 2017 at 12:53 pm
But what if it really was just an accident?
Great story. Come see mine here.
8.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 12:57 pm
alice:
i’m afraid it wasn’t.
9.
Alice Audrey | August 2, 2017 at 11:54 pm
Then her brother just did her a world of service.
10.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:01 am
alice:
for sure, he did.
11.
Iain Kelly | August 2, 2017 at 2:24 pm
Nice ambiguity, not spelling out if he really did or not. He doesn’t seem to mind either way. Nice one.
12.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 10:59 pm
iain:
i’m flattered by your generous comment. thank you.
13.
Indira | August 2, 2017 at 2:30 pm
Brotherly love indeed.Nice story.
14.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 10:59 pm
indira:
love can be blind. he had to protect her.
15.
Indira | August 3, 2017 at 9:25 am
There are so many brothers who don’t care what happens to their sisters after marriage.
16.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:14 am
indira:
she can thank her lucky stars… ahmad isn’t one of them.
17.
Alicia Jamtaas | August 2, 2017 at 4:34 pm
Blood is thicker than marriage. I like where you took this.
18.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 10:58 pm
alicia:
yes, i totally agree. blood is thicker than marriage.
19.
Dale | August 2, 2017 at 9:02 pm
What a fabulous brother… She could not see clearly so he had to
20.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 10:58 pm
dale:
hopefully, his sister would understand and forgive him for what he did.
21.
Dale | August 3, 2017 at 6:45 am
I certainly hope so.
22.
Christine Goodnough | August 3, 2017 at 7:18 am
In some cultures, though, she will never be allowed to marry again. In some cultures she will never be allowed to walk out of her house alone again— without a male relative as escort —never mind work to support herself. In my mind the jury’s still out deciding the wisdom of this brother’s actions.
All that said, it’s a really poignant, well told story.
23.
Dale | August 3, 2017 at 7:35 am
Too true, Christine…
24.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:08 am
christine:
her immediate family will make sure she’s taken care of. that’s how it usually works.
25.
Moon | August 2, 2017 at 9:27 pm
Loved your story , Plaridel. I hope Ahmad goes scott-free now, it was only in the tone of sister’s-defence.
26.
plaridel | August 2, 2017 at 10:57 pm
moon:
spousal abuse should be nipped in the bud and not allow to prosper. i think ahmad is willing to accept the consequences of his action.
27.
rochellewisoff | August 3, 2017 at 4:37 am
Dear Plaridel,
I seem to remember a scene just like this in The Godfather. Perhaps one day she’ll thank her brother. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
28.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:03 am
rochelle:
someday, she’ll be grateful for saving her from further abuse.
29.
draliman | August 3, 2017 at 5:45 am
Harsh justice. At least now she’s safe.
30.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:04 am
draliman:
the husband deserved it.
31.
Christine Goodnough | August 3, 2017 at 7:07 am
Great illustration of “every action has consequences”. Fahran’s actions had immediate ones for him, now the brother’s actions will likely have a lifetime of consequences for Annisa.
32.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:06 am
christine:
yes, a lifetime of consequences for annisa, but hopefully, for the better
33.
Christine Goodnough | August 3, 2017 at 11:20 am
Hopefully yes. A lifetime (often considerably shortened) of being beaten is no picnic, either.
34.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 10:31 pm
christine:
such is life.
35.
wmqcolby | August 3, 2017 at 8:21 am
Oh, yeah. Just another bad decision corrected by revenge. No kidding, I have a friend whose sister was married to a guy who beat her up a lot. So, he and his other brothers went over to him and beat him up big time. You don’t mess with the Irish!
Fun read, sir!
36.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:10 am
kent:
it happens in the philippines, too. abusive husbands are oftentimes don’t get a free ride.
37.
wmqcolby | August 3, 2017 at 12:33 pm
I understand.
38.
granonine | August 3, 2017 at 8:23 am
So, he rescued her from a lifetime of abuse, but gave her, possibly, a lifetime of poverty as a single mother. Life can be tough.
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plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 11:12 am
linda:
the brother and the family will provide now that she’s a widow.
40.
granonine | August 3, 2017 at 1:07 pm
That wouldn’t necessarily happen in the USA. Divorce is the primary reason for the povertization of women in America. I know she’s a widow, not a divorcee, but sometimes the results are about the same.
41.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 10:31 pm
linda:
that’s sad… thinking about it.
42.
granonine | August 4, 2017 at 8:53 am
Indeed.Many causes, I think. Sometimes it’s simply distance–we are a mobile nation.
43.
plaridel | August 6, 2017 at 9:12 pm
linda:
such a reality we have to deal with.
44.
Life Lessons of a Dog Lover | August 3, 2017 at 11:42 am
Loved his quiet strength and dedication. Nicely written.
45.
plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 10:31 pm
cindy:
thank you for reading. he’d always be there for his sister.
46.
Keith's Ramblings | August 3, 2017 at 5:27 pm
I can’t help but wonder if she did, in fact, slip and fall! Nice one plaridel
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plaridel | August 3, 2017 at 10:30 pm
keith:
she didn’t. she was covering up for her husband’s abuses.
48.
rgayer55 | August 5, 2017 at 3:18 am
I don’t have any sympathy for abusers. No tears from me.
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plaridel | August 6, 2017 at 9:11 pm
russell:
my sentiments exactly.
50.
subroto | August 6, 2017 at 6:13 am
Never mess with the family. Future suitors are going to be very careful I think.
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plaridel | August 6, 2017 at 9:10 pm
subroto:
yes, they should always be on their good behavior.
52.
Kelvin M. Knight's blog | August 6, 2017 at 8:12 am
What a chilling story. Surely she would have warned him about her vindictive family? Maybe she did and he thought their bark was worse than their bite? Such a brutal story, told with a brutal simplicity. Good take.
53.
plaridel | August 6, 2017 at 9:09 pm
kelvin:
he had overstayed his welcome by abusing his wife. he got what he deserved.
54.
Sandra | August 6, 2017 at 8:12 am
Well, he’s certainly a man of action!
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plaridel | August 6, 2017 at 9:09 pm
sandra:
i think you’re right.
56.
lingeringvisions by Dawn | August 6, 2017 at 5:54 pm
A lot going on in these 100 words!
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plaridel | August 6, 2017 at 9:08 pm
dawn:
hope it still made sense after eliminating many details.
58.
gahlearner | August 8, 2017 at 2:20 am
First the wife has an ‘accident’, then the husband has an ‘accident’–there seems some justice at work here, although the authorities may not quite agree. Great story, Plaridel.
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plaridel | August 8, 2017 at 9:08 am
gahlearner:
in some cultures, it could be called sweet justice.