Childhood Lost

November 3, 2021 at 4:25 pm 40 comments

For Friday Fictioneers 100-Word Challenge: 5 November 2021

Jennifer Pendergast
Photo Credit: Jennifer Pendergast

 
“You can start working on it,” her dad said of the Harry Potter Castle Model Building Kit that he gave her for Christmas. “We’ll finish it together after I return from Afghanistan.”

Hardly a moment passed that Riley didn’t look forward to the day he’d be home. Sadly, she didn’t expect him to be in a casket.

Since there was no magic wand to bring him back to life, Riley had decided to disassemble the unfinished castle and put the pieces in a can. Along with her childhood, she buried them in the yard of their now for sale home.

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  • 1. Dale  |  November 3, 2021 at 5:28 pm

    This is so sad…
    (By the way, your link is to last week’s story)

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    • 2. plaridel  |  November 3, 2021 at 5:40 pm

      dale:

      corrected as we speak. thanks for watching my back. 🙂

      Reply
      • 3. Dale  |  November 3, 2021 at 6:01 pm

        Ta dah! You are welcome 🙂

        Reply
  • 5. dhak  |  November 3, 2021 at 6:01 pm

    Tragic ending for children, when expectations like hopes are buried with their soldier parents.
    pax,
    dora

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    • 6. plaridel  |  November 4, 2021 at 8:37 am

      dora:

      it’s heartbreaking indeed for somebody to lose her dad like that.

      Reply
  • 7. trishsplace  |  November 4, 2021 at 12:56 am

    Oh, sad. But nicely written.

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    • 8. plaridel  |  November 4, 2021 at 8:36 am

      trish:

      thank you for reading. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 9. neilmacdon  |  November 4, 2021 at 1:55 am

    Why do I think that one day she’s going to want to sneak in there and dig up the can?

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    • 10. plaridel  |  November 4, 2021 at 8:36 am

      neil:

      nobody really knows what the future holds.

      Reply
  • 11. Mason Bushell  |  November 4, 2021 at 6:56 am

    Such a sad tale. Well done, Plaridel.

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    • 12. plaridel  |  November 4, 2021 at 8:36 am

      mason:

      i’m glad you liked it. thank you.

      Reply
  • 13. Brenda's Thoughts  |  November 4, 2021 at 8:00 am

    Oh, so very sad. Her childhood gone because of her grief. Very well written, Plaridel.

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    • 14. plaridel  |  November 4, 2021 at 8:35 am

      brenda:

      i know.

      Reply
  • 15. Iain Kelly  |  November 4, 2021 at 11:57 am

    Real life can be brutal, and unfortunately the magic does fade.

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    • 16. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:04 am

      iain:

      sad, but true.

      Reply
  • 17. Courtney Wright  |  November 4, 2021 at 1:37 pm

    😦 *broken heart* for the truth unfolded..

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    • 18. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:04 am

      courtney:

      it might be difficult but hopefully, she’d be able to move on.

      Reply
  • 19. Bill  |  November 5, 2021 at 1:58 am

    The end of one story and the beginning of another. Well told.

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    • 20. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:04 am

      bill:

      that’s one way of looking at it. thank you.

      Reply
  • 21. GHLearner  |  November 5, 2021 at 2:46 am

    This is so sad. You expertly pull heartstrings again, well done.

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    • 22. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:05 am

      gabi:

      you’re very kind. thank you.

      Reply
  • 23. susanrouchard  |  November 5, 2021 at 2:46 am

    Poignant. Terrible to lose a father at such a young age.

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    • 24. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:05 am

      susan:

      i know. i remember my cousin who idolized his dad who was in the military. he dreamed of following his footsteps. he didn’t die in the war but of a heart attack. still, the pain was unbearable for my cousin who was in grade school then.

      Reply
  • 25. Keith's Ramblings  |  November 5, 2021 at 4:55 am

    A really moving story, well done plaridel.

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    • 26. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:08 am

      keith:

      thank you for reading and the usual support. much appreciated.

      Reply
  • 27. elmowrites  |  November 5, 2021 at 8:14 am

    Ouch, I like “along with her childhood” for its subtlety.

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    • 28. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:07 am

      jen:

      it’s very generous of you. thank you.

      Reply
  • 29. draliman  |  November 5, 2021 at 8:49 am

    Very sad. A childhood lost indeed.

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    • 30. plaridel  |  November 5, 2021 at 9:13 am

      draliman:

      it must be for you kid who lost her dad.

      Reply
  • 31. pennygadd51  |  November 5, 2021 at 10:35 am

    I agree with Elmo – “along with her childhood” is a lovely subtle touch. It’s a good take on the prompt, too.

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    • 32. plaridel  |  November 7, 2021 at 11:39 am

      penny:

      thank you for reading and the usual support. 🙂

      Reply
  • 33. rochellewisoff  |  November 6, 2021 at 3:42 am

    Dear Plaridel,

    Touching story. Life will never be the same for her. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • 34. plaridel  |  November 7, 2021 at 11:38 am

      rochelle:

      hope springs eternal. she’d learn to let go and move on.

      Reply
  • 35. Ain  |  November 7, 2021 at 3:52 am

    Very strong story indeed. Like the style v much.

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    • 36. plaridel  |  November 7, 2021 at 11:38 am

      ain:

      coming from you, i take it as a great compliment. thank you.

      Reply
  • 37. granonine  |  November 7, 2021 at 2:51 pm

    Oh my. You went to the true-to-life, inexpressibly sad this week. This is so well constructed, and I loved the ending.

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    • 38. plaridel  |  November 8, 2021 at 4:20 pm

      linda:

      thank you for the kind comment. much appreciated. 🙂

      Reply
  • 39. Woman walking Max  |  November 9, 2021 at 1:37 am

    A gut wrenching story. Like the way you build up to the poignant ending ending. Reading ‘Afghanistan’ signalled the sad ending. Well done.

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    • 40. plaridel  |  November 10, 2021 at 10:52 am

      francine:

      i appreciate the generous comment. thank you for reading.

      Reply

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